Kaosu Youmei

Age : 32 Posts : 41

Basic Information:

Name:
Last name: Youmei (Order)
First name: Kaosu (Chaos)
Secondary Title:
Dozu no Kugutsu "Puppet of Poison"
Age:
14
Gender:
Male
Physical Appearance:
Kaosu Youmei Anime_Boy_by_chibi_kiro_cb

Kaosu stands at 5'5, weighting at 131 pounds, Orange spiky hair and piercing Purple eyes. He wears a gray long sleeved jacket, with the sleeves rolled up to his elbows and the szipper half way done up, it has the pattern of a black skull on it.

He has two black wrist bands with white skulls on each of them. Under his long sleeved jacket, he has a stripe shirt on. Which goes, black-white-black. Kaosu wears dark green cargo pants. He wears a black belt that has his ninja headband hanging off of it. He has black shoes on.

He has a silver chain on his side that has skulls hanging on each loop. He also has earrings on each ear. Kaosu has a tattoo of the Water kanji on the back of his neck.
Personality:
Kaosu doesn't like pushovers, or vegetables. He prefers people who don't push others around for the hell of it. Kaosu loves dark quiet places, he also likes to be last to leave a room, so he doesn't get to paranoid about the people behind him. Kaosu is paranoid that people would do anything to harm him.

Kaosu believes that everything is black and white. Your either a enemy, or a friend. If you betray him, or even say something he doesn't like, he will count you as a enemy and put you on a death list. Kaosu is also known to put work on hold for other things, like girls. He also tends to be quite silent, maybe even depressing. He can also be known to be perverted more then most.

Kaosu doesn't like traitors or rats. He believes that they dishonour the Village and the Shinobi race. Kaosu is always nice to women, he was raised to respect women and treat them like equals. Kaosu doesn't like guys who think they are tough for picking on girls, so he tends to stick up for them.

Catch Phrase:
"I'm just a puppet...for Suna..."

Rank Information:

Rank:
Genin
Village Affiliation:
Sunagakure

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main: Puppetry
Sub: Medical
Elemental Affinity:
Main: Water
Sub: Lightning
Special Characteristics:
Kaosu has excellent hearing. He can hear a twig break about 125 feet away. Kaosu can feel peoples pressence even if they are in his blind spots or even if they are standing behind him. He can feel them about 1-2 feet away.

Skill Information:
Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.

Jutsu Template:

Name: Bunshin no Jutsu - Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Bunshin no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. The Bunshin technique creates a copy of the ninja without substance. The copy resembles the ninja in every way. This clone can function as a distraction or as means to confuse one's opponent. As soon the Bunshin gets attacked or comes into contact with an opponent, it will disperse

Name: Henge no Jutsu - Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents

Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu - Change of Body Stance Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themself with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

Other commonly known Techniques

Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: E
Type: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water

Name: Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: E
Type: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed

Name: Explosion Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The user will activate an explosion tag. Normally, the tag will be placed by them, so they know where it is and can easily activate it.

Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu - Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: A very basic technique that allows a ninja to escape from rope binds.

Name: Kai - Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.

Name: Shunshin no Jutsu - Body Flicker Technique
Rank: D
Element: N/A
Description: Shunshin no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. The ninja will appear and disappear in an instant, allowing them to retreat or attack suddenly. To facilitate the movement the ninja will often use nearby elements such as mist, sand or leaves to mask their appearance or disappearance.

Name:Kugutsu no Jutsu - Puppetry Technique
Type: Puppetry
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: Kugutsu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to use a puppet to attack from afar. Using their body's chakra, the ninja emits strings of chakra that run from their fingers to the puppet. The puppet itself can be loaded with many weapons and tools, allowing the puppet master to remain hidden while the puppet moves and attacks the target.

Weapon Template:

Name: Nyu-Ketsueki (New Blood)
Rank: C
Description:

Body Slots:
Slot 1: Right Hand, Poison chain that has hooks going around it.
Slot 2: Left Hand, Poison spike.
Slot 3: Mouth, releases poison gas
Slot 4: Elbows, Kunai
Slot 5: Feet, long cords to wrap around the opponent.
Slot 6: Neck, Poison senbon.
Slot 7: Stomach, cords to immobilize opponent.
Slot 8: Eyes, Senbon
Slot 9: Finger, metal dust
Slot 10: Heart, Self-Destruction
History: Kaosu's father made Nyu-Ketsueki for battle, but shortly after he finished making it, he died of a illness that struck the Village. Kaosu's mother thought that it was because of the puppet that her husband died, so she was planning on destroying it, but instead, she hidden it away for years until her son, Kaosu, stumbled upon it. Now he owns the puppet and won't let it go.

Metal Dust: Metal dust is a dust substance that is made of metal. The metal shards are used as a smoke screen, but can also blind the foe by cutting the eye or some other way.

Self-Destruction: The Heart area in Nyu's body has a bomb in it. The bomb is made of 15 paper bombs, with a explosion field of 15 feet. The self destruction destroys the core of Nyu, but right before the explosion happens, the limbs fly off to about 20 feet away.

Name: Dozu no Shikon (Fang of Poison)
Rank: C
Element: Wind
Description: The katana in Nyu-Ketsueki's right hand is covered in poison, and with the wind element it has, it can launch the poison into the air towards the opponent. The force of the slash causes the wind to travel far and fast, poisoning the opponent. The poison paralyses the targets nerves, making them unable to move or react to Kaosu's further attacks.

Poison Name: Ibara no Suna (Thorn of Sand)
Rank: C-B-S
Poison Description:
Solid State: The solid state is a small crystallized dew drop found only in the caves near Sunagakure no Sato. The toxin in it has enough to render whoever touches it completely vulnerable. It must be handled with care. (Can't be used)

Liquid State: The liquid is orange and seems to give off a strange odour that can put people to sleep, or make them drowsy enough. The effects of the poison change if its in a liquidated state. Instead of killing or rending the motor functions useless, it makes the person see things that aren't there.

Gaseous State: The Gaseous state of the poison can be inhaled by anyone who is 15 feet of ground zero. The effects of the poison are as followed: the lose of function in your arms. Then, the lost of function of your legs. Allowing a opportunity to kill.
Poison Effect(s):
[ Post 0 / Turn of Infection/Injection]
[ Post 1 / Effect: Lose the movement of your arms]
[ Post 2 / Effect: Lose the movement of your legs]
[ Post 3 / Effect: Poison wears off]

Item Template:

[quote]Name: Shikkan no Chiyu (Cure of Ailment) also known as Potensharu Anrokku (Unlock Potential)
Rank: C
Type: Medicine
Natural Abilities: Kaosu created his own medicine. It cures the person who takes it of ailments that have been put on them by poison. The poison it can cure is limited, it cannot cure poison that kills within 3 days. It also has the ability to enhance the takers abilities by 25%, but they must imput chakra into the medicine for it to work like that. It takes 2 days for it to cure the ailment(2 topic). The enhancement will last for 1 hour (2-3 posts).

Background Information

History:
~Birth - 5 years old Arc~
Kaosu was born on the third day of the 11th month. He doesn't remember much of his childhood. But he does remember that it was around this time that his father died of a strange illness at the age of 41. He doesn't remember his fathers face, but he remembers his fathers strong, fearless, overwelming voice of courage. He isn't allowed to speak about him with his mother, she would break into tears even at the name of him. Kaosu was kidnapped when he was 4 years old by a runaway ninja.

Kaosu didn't know what was going on, but all he could do was cry and wish to be with his mother again. The search for the kidnappers and Kaosu was 2 months, and still no one has seen either of them. They suspected the kidnappers have killed Kaosu and fled from the Wind Country. But little did they know, was that the kidnappers lived right next door to Kaosu's home. It wasn't until a Chuunin walked by and heard the crying of Kaosu.

The Chuunin peeked through the window of the basement and saw Kaosu, tied to a post with a giant scar, running from his left shoulder, down his left side. The Chuunin, who was nervous as hell, broke the window, and called for help. Then he slid through the freshly broken window, and quickly ran over to Kaosu to cut him free. Once the Chuunin did that, he helped Kaosu out the window and told him to run towards the ninja Academy to get help. Once the teary eyed Kaosu turned around to say thank you. The man who kidnapped him, had stabbed the Chuunin in the back with a long katana and staired at Kaosu for a minute.

Then Kaosu quickly ran towards the ninja academy, like what the chuunin had told him, and called for help. When Kaosu got help, the Jounin and Chuunin who went to help their fallen comrade, discovered a dead Chuunin, and no signs of the kidnappers.

~Genin Arc~
Kaosu was cleaning the basement of his house from what his mother told him to do. He was putting things into boxes and moving them to the side, then he came across a wrapped up object. He couldn't tell what it was, but from the shape, it was a puppet or something like that. He unwrapped it and saw that it was a puppet. He looked around the room and then at the wrapping paper. It had a name writing on it. "Nyu-Ketsueki". He rested the puppet on the wall and sat down leaning against some boxes. Stairing at the puppet.

He didn't know that there was something like that in the house. He heard that his father made puppets for the village, but he didn't know he kept one for himself. He didn't even know what kind of ninja he was going to be yet. Kaosu remembered the Chuunin who saved him, he had a puppet on his back. Then he remembered the man who kidnapped him, the man had a scar over his left eye, forcing it to stay closed.

Then he decided, he was going to be a Puppet master, and a healing expert. He went to tell his mother, and he brought the puppet with him. He sat across his speechless mother, who was stairing at the puppet and told her. "I'm going to be the greatest puppet master ever, and be a medical genius!" he proclaimed, and then he left, training ever since.

Role-Play Sample:

Spoiler:

Rp sample from Mura and Armada

Posts : 1084

Longer appearance and personality is needed.

Also, please use the correct puppet template.

Quote :: Name: (Your puppet's name)
Rank: (The rank of your puppet)
Description: (Describe how your puppet looks. Please give at least 1 good paragraph on this)
Body Slots:
Slot 1: (Where is this slot? What weapon is in it?)
Slot 2: (*)
Slot 3: (*)
Slot 4: (*)
Slot 5: (*)
Slot 6: (*)
Slot 7: (*)
Slot 8: (*)
Slot 9: (*)
Slot 10: (*)
History: (How did you create/obtain your puppet?)

Name: (The name of your weapon)
Rank: (The rank of your weapon, should be equal to or below puppet rank)
Element: (What element is your weapon, if any)
Description: (What does your weapon do, how, why, etc)

Age : 32 Posts : 41

I added more personality and description on how he looks.

and I fixed the puppet

Posts : 1084

Kaosu wrote:: Name: Nyu-Ketsueki (New Blood)
Rank: C
Description:
Body Slots:
Slot 1: Right Hand, Poison chain that has hooks going around it.
Slot 2: Left Hand, Poison spike.
Slot 3: Mouth, releases poison gas
Slot 4: Elbows, Kunai
Slot 5: Feet, long cords to wrap around the opponent.
Slot 6: Neck, Poison senbon.
Slot 7: Stomach, cords to immobilize opponent.
Slot 8: Eyes, Senbon
Slot 9: Finger, metal dust
Slot 10: Heart, Self-Destruction
History: Kaosu's father made Nyu-Ketsueki for battle, but shortly after he finished making it, he died of a illness that struck the Village. Kaosu's mother thought that it was because of the puppet that her husband died, so she was planning on destroying it, but instead, she hidden it away for years until her son, Kaosu, stumbled upon it. Now he owns the puppet and won't let it go.

Name: Dozu no Shikon (Fang of Poison)
Rank: C
Element: Wind
Description: The katana in Nyu-Ketsueki's right hand is covered in poison, and with the wind element it has, it can launch the poison into the air towards the opponent. The force of the slash causes the wind to travel far and fast, poisoning the opponent. The poison paralyses the targets nerves, making them unable to move or react to Kaosu's further attacks.

Poison will need the poison template.

Quote :: Poison Name: What is the name of your poison? If using a Japanese also provide an english name as well.]
Rank: What rank is your poison? E to S]
Poison Description:
Solid State:
Liquid State:
Gaseous State:
Poison Effect(s):
[ Post 0 / Turn of Infection/Injection]
[ Post X / Effect]
[ Post X / Effect]
[ Post X / Effect etc]

Age : 32 Posts : 41

Edited and such

Age : 30 Posts : 1701

Personality and Appearance needs to be longer. That is, make them full paragraphs

No auto cures for Genjutsu/ninjutsu/Poison-

Quote :: Name: Shikkan no Chiyu (Cure of Ailment) also known as Potensharu Anrokku (Unlock Potential)
Rank: C
Type: Medicine
Natural Abilities: Kaosu created his own medicine. It cures the person who takes it of ailments that have been put on them by either Genjutsu or Ninjutsu, or even poison. It also has the ability to enhance the takers abilities by 25%, but they must imput chakra into the medicine for it to work like that. It takes 2 minutes for it to cure the ailment(1 post). The enhancement will last for 1 hour (2-3 posts).

Age : 32 Posts : 41

personality and appearance are 3 paragraphs.

and I fixed up the cure thingy ma jig

Posts : 1084

Correct me if I'm wrong, but I can't notice any change with your Shikkan no Chiyu medicine.

Also, you can always learn techniques, but are you sure you don't want to squeeze in a few elemental or medical ninjutsu in your app?

Age : 32 Posts : 41

I changed it from 1 hour cure, to 1 day cure, so its not a insta cure, and I'm good with what I have. It really enhances the part of character development

Posts : 1084

Oh, sorry. I must have missed that.

Anyways, almost done --

Kaosu wrote:: Name: Nyu-Ketsueki (New Blood)
Rank: C
Description:
Body Slots:
Slot 1: Right Hand, Poison chain that has hooks going around it.
Slot 2: Left Hand, Poison spike.
Slot 3: Mouth, releases poison gas
Slot 4: Elbows, Kunai
Slot 5: Feet, long cords to wrap around the opponent.
Slot 6: Neck, Poison senbon.
Slot 7: Stomach, cords to immobilize opponent.
Slot 8: Eyes, Senbon
Slot 9: Finger, metal dust
Slot 10: Heart, Self-Destruction
History: Kaosu's father made Nyu-Ketsueki for battle, but shortly after he finished making it, he died of a illness that struck the Village. Kaosu's mother thought that it was because of the puppet that her husband died, so she was planning on destroying it, but instead, she hidden it away for years until her son, Kaosu, stumbled upon it. Now he owns the puppet and won't let it go.

I would just like the metal dust an self destruction to be explained a little more. Can the dust be used as a distraction? Does it do nothing? Does the self-destruction explode like a paper bomb or does it fall apart? After you explain that, I'll approve you.

Age : 32 Posts : 41

alrighty...I fixed it up..hopefully, this time it works out ^-^

Posts : 191

A C-rank puppet cannot have that many slots and weapons: maximum of 4, please.

Age : 32 Posts : 41

where does it state that?

Posts : 1084

Hmm... Kaosu has a point Jsalos. I can't find any rule about that in either the guides or staff lounge. I'm pretty sure his slots are fine, especially since none of them aren't exactly Over-Powered.

Kaosu wrote:: Self-Destruction: The Heart area in Nyu's body has a bomb in it. The bomb is made of 25 paper bombs, with a explosion field of 25 feet. The self destruction destroys the core of Nyu, but right before the explosion happens, the limbs fly off to about 30 feet away.

Lower the paper bombs to about 10-15. Lower the explosion a little, too. Maybe 15 feet. Since those are lowered, the limbs should fly off to only about 20 feet. Edit that, then you'll finally be approved. Very Happy

Age : 32 Posts : 41

mmk...its done~

Posts : 414

Quote :: He can hear a twig break about 3 kilometers away.

I don't even think Kiba could hear that far away, reduce it.

Age : 32 Posts : 41

It never states how far Kiba can hear o,o

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Sorry, I must have accidentally looked past that... It is rather high, Kaosu. Mm, 3 kilometers equal 9842 feet. I'd say the highest you can hear would be 75-150 feet around you.

Age : 32 Posts : 41

nyah o,o didn't know it was that far >.<
well, edited (hopefully for the last time)

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

Ibara no Suna (Thorn of Sand): Losing control implies that they would still be moving be moving but the target wouldn't have any control over how or where. I'm not sure if thats what you meant but if it isn't you should re-word it.

Shikkan no Chiyu (Cure of Ailment) also known as Potensharu Anrokku (Unlock Potential): There is no cure all for every poison. And remove the gen/nin thing, curing gen with medicine isn't exactly as easy as C-rank and the nin thing doesn't make sense.

Age : 32 Posts : 41

Z wrote:: Ibara no Suna (Thorn of Sand): Losing control implies that they would still be moving be moving but the target wouldn't have any control over how or where. I'm not sure if thats what you meant but if it isn't you should re-word it.

It is what I meant, so do I still have to reword it?

Z wrote:: Shikkan no Chiyu (Cure of Ailment) also known as Potensharu Anrokku (Unlock Potential): There is no cure all for every poison. And remove the gen/nin thing, curing gen with medicine isn't exactly as easy as C-rank and the nin thing doesn't make sense.

okay, I changed it to only curing certain poisons

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

Yes, you'll need to re word it. Body parts can lose control in a lot of ways that range from violent spasms to small uncontrollable twitches.

The amount of time it takes to kill isn't really a classification for curable poisons, to cure a poison you'd need to prevent it from spreading or destroy it with some sort of anti bodies depending on how the targeted poison works.

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

While I'm here I mine as well look over some other things to help get this app approved faster.

Your Special Characteristics should be labeled and be detailed to a point that everyone knows how it was developed and what the extents of the characteristic are. Hearing a twig snap from that far away isn't a very good statement to describe an ability's extents because hearing something from X distance all depends on how many other variables are involved ( like other noises.). Sensing someone from 1-2 feet is hardly a SC, sensing beyond human capability would be KKG. But you also have to remember that the human body has a number of odd abilities. When someone is looking at you your body actually tells you via small shocks, which is why when someone says they're being watched, they're probably right.

For your puppet, I would like to see more detail on its weaponry. Example, you say it has a chain but there is no length given. We can't just assume that it is X length, it needs to be stated. When you say poisoned I would like you to state with what poison. This may not seem important now, but later on when you have multiple poisons we need to know what poison your puppet wields. When it says kunai/senbon/shuriken, how many kunai? Give the explosion a radius, makes things easier to understand.

Puppets can not use jutsu or utilize chakra by themselves, they are simply tools controlled by a puppeteer, not another person.

Why does your poison vary in rank?

Reminder: We hold people to post as their RP samples has shown. We use RP samples as an example of an average post from you, telling us what to expect.

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Seeing how this hasn't been touched in awhile, I'm archiving this. Just PM me if you it unarchived.

Archived.