Karite Noroi - [Reaper's Curse]

Kurotsuki Hijutsu:

Alright, reading this was already an ordeal, responding to it is likely to be even worse.

General Concerns: I have to warn you now that there is a strong likelihood that this clan will not be approved without a minimum of serious nerfing in regards to the general clan abilities, the traits and of course the techniques and even then it is likely a stretch. With that said, as far as general comments or issues go, your entire set of clan techniques need to be coded and/or the code needs to be fixed.



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'Root Chakra' has the unique property of being able to absorb either the users or another targets ailments and store it within the clan members chakra. 'Root Chakra' is powerful enough to absorb any plague, sickness, disease, injury, poison or even fatigue and in advanced cases physical damage and store it within the clan members chakra. Once it stores the 'ailment' into the chakra network of the clan member it then naturally manifests the 'ailment' into a non-destructive form that will not harm the user.


I'm not even entirely sure where to begin with this ability. As an 'all encompassing' clan skill, it grants far too many abilities to begin with, disregarding the fact that none of them are explained. Firstly, things such as plagues and sicknesses do not make a common enough appearance in the role-play setting that they could be used or manipulated in such a manner without a need for some form of regulation or system based control and not only that but they are broad descriptors that could be anything from Ebola [a virus that has no real 'cure'] to something as simple as the common cold. Such things could scarcely be internalized and returned for combat intentions without some form of regulation and balance control.

Further, how does one absorb six out of seven of the proposed categories (mind you expressing the ability to absorb both injury and physical damage is rather redundant given that they are essentially synonymous ) with mere chakra at all. To a degree [and a limited one at that] you can remedy these six categories through the application of Medical Ninjutsu, but even that has its own set of limitations as seen by the fact that Itachi was afflicted with something that one might assume was similar to Tuberculosis and presumably could not be cured, which implies that even more serious illnesses are beyond the scope of healing provided by Medical Nin. How would one even begin to absorb fatigue or a physical injury of any sort. Fatigue is by definition is a lack of physical energy, you cannot absorb a lack of something and considering one can only 'fix' fatigue by replacing energy, the concept of absorbing such a thing makes no logical sense. With that being said, I don't really feel the need to elaborate upon the principle of absorbing physical injuries as largely the same principle applies. If I have a cut on my cheek and you absorb the injury, would you then take away flesh from my body as absorbing applies or simply expend energy and repair my injury? The latter of which is essentially the principle of your standard Medical Based Ninjutsu.

Beyond that, things such as diseases, plagues or illnesses have a variety of causes, the main culprits stemming from bacteria, toxins, viruses or a cancer induced bodily immune response and anything else I might have failed to mention. Each of these culprits has its own specific criteria and manners of detriment to the various systems of the body and as such I fail to see how an unexplained capacity of chakra would allow you to absorb and subsequently remove every element from the variety of sources listed above.

Continuing on to the only semi-legitimate and regulatable function of this clan. The absorption of Poison. In the Manga, as I recall the Delicate Illness Extraction Technique was the only Medical Jutsu within Canon that was shown to be able to remove poison or toxins from the body, with that being done through the application of a water-based medium to collect the substance of the poison and pull it from the body, rather akin to sucking the venom from a bite. I do not believe that even Karin's Heal Bite (arguably the most powerful or one of the most powerful Medical Based Techniques shown in the Manga) was able to remove a poison as it merely revolved around expending a vast amount of her natural energy to rejuvenate the body and energies of whomever bit into her flesh. Without such a medium to bind the poison or toxin to, I fail to see how you are simply able to remove it from the body of your target, furthermore without a physical form of access to the area of infection.

To continue I must elaborate my issue with the entire premise of your absorption mechanic as I understand it. You are able to absorb a poison or toxin (I am disregarding the others given the various complications I mentioned above) which is by obvious description in one of the various states of matter into your chakra system, the same chakra system that is a system of energy, not physical matter. As I understand it, you can convert your chakra into a physical substance through application of a medium such as Earth, Water, Mokuton, Crystal, all of which largely require some form of said substance nearby to create; or an energy such Wind, Lightning or Fire. However, I do not believe that the reverse is possible. One cannot take earth into their chakra system and expect it to retain its original properties, nor would one be able to take a poison or toxin into their chakra system and expect the properties to be retained. As you continue to expand on the principle below...



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It will then slowly be released into the tissue and blood of the clan member. Over time as more and more ailments are absorbed it causes their chakra to become toxic in nature. Though this cannot harm the clan member long term, while the process of the transferal of the 'ailment' is in place, for that period of time they gain the pain that the target was in, thus feeling how they felt.


I feel I must disabuse you of the the notion that the blood and tissue systems of the body intersect with the chakra system in such a manner that such a transition would be possible assuming you could absorb the matter through the transference of energy in such a way. The Tenketsu intersect with the physical systems of the body on the same map as the systems of the body, which is why Jūkenpō is capable of causing damage to the physical body and organs even though it's primary target is the focal points within your energy system, but there's no evidence to show that the systems intersect in such a way that a substance would be able to naturally pass from one to another. It's the same principle as to why a poison does not effect your chakra circulatory system, but rather effects the physical systemic areas of your body. To allow chakra to transfer to the physical realm of the body, one must focus and by and large apply hand seals as allowing such an interaction between the physical world and chakra itself is the basis of Ninjutsu entirely.



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But with this it has given way for members of the Kurotsuki Clan to manipulate and control their chakra into a 'Toxic Release' converting it, that grants the user the ability to produce and control different types of poisons and toxins, as well as grant immunity to all poisons and poisoned based techniques (for obvious reasons).


Although I do understand how such an element might be a key aspect to a clan such as this, I must inform you that such a thing will not passively be allowed. Initially it circumvents and even surpasses the Poison Immunity Special Characteristics, which even at maximum level only protect against A - Rank Poisons.



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Due to the unique ability of the clan with their 'Root Chakra' and the dangerous practices within the clan, members are brought up with an inhuman tolerance to physical pain. Because they absorb others 'ailments' and feel the pain associated with it, members have grown with the ability to numb physical pain whenever they feel it as they come into contact with pain. The more 'ailments' they have absorbed the more tolerant they will be naturally. This means that usual physical damage, say, in a battle wouldn't be as effective against Kurotsuki clan members as they are more tolerable to this. The extent of this tolerance only goes to physical pain. Hence, members of the clan have a mandatory need for the Endurance Special Characteristics.


Although the requirement is noted, I should mention that such an endurance cannot exist without the SCs, thus if the SC is not taken the clan trait is essentially non-existent.



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Due to the unique nature of the clan members chakra many Kurotsuki Clan members become talented medical ninja and they possess a long history of medical knowledge. Throughout the clan the elders pass down their knowledge to the younger clan members and the ability to heal another is passed on. Due to Kurotsuki Clan members extensive knowledge and understanding of medical ninjutsu it costs 10% less chakra for them to perform medical ninjutsu.


Given that there is already an SC which allows for a hefty percentage reduction to medical techniques, I cannot allow you to gain a further possible reduction.



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Due to the unique nature of the clans 'Root Chakra' members of the clan can produce a 'Toxic Release' which is commonly known as Karite Noroi or Reaper's Curse. This allows clan members the ability to produce and control various types of poison and toxins. The types of poison and toxins they can produce can vary in strength and forms, which can be as simple as breathing out minor poison gas, or as complex as being concentrated and corrosive indigo-colored liquid produced directly out of their own body. This is due to the absorbing and storing nature of the 'Root Chakra' as it manifests every disease, poison, sickness etc individually compounding each together making a variety of deadly outcomes for the 'Toxic Release' though they all have the same poisonous affect.


Given that I have already by and large addressed a number of issues regarding the 'Root Chakra' conceptually the KKG of the clan is dependent upon a possible resolution of said points. Despite my initial issues with the specification in regards to the absorption, I feel the need to point out that once again the logic in regards to absorbing various poisons, toxins, illnesses or what have you would not necessarily create a more toxic element. The entire premise of modern medicine is largely based upon using something that is normally toxic in some circumstance to cure an illness by means of interaction that yields a positive result.

In that regards, I am not fond of the ability to passively have absorbed such detrimental elements to create this far worse Toxin based techniques and the only foreseeable way I see myself allowing such a thing is if the said elements were gained through IC PC vs PC interaction (which means that you could not simply interact with NPC elements.)



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Thus, If a victim is affected by just one type of poison produced by the user, it can usually be easily cured, given the right antidote and medical expert. However, if they suffer an accumulation of different types of poison at the same time which happens with the Kurotsuki Clan's 'Toxic Release', producing an appropriate herbal antidote becomes incredibly difficult if not impossible. Any rash attempts to cure such ailments can hasten the death of the victim. The only cure for an effected target of a clan members poison is the blood of a Kurosuki or a to use medical ninjutsu technique focussed around chakra. An equal poisoned based medical technique to that of the 'Toxic Release' will be able to stop the spread of the poison throughout the targets system.


Your logic here is flawed entirely. If you previously say that "they all have the same poisonous affect" you are now contradicting yourself by implying that you can inflict upon a target "an accumulation of different types of poison" through usage of the Toxic Release. If all elements of the toxic release have the same poisonous affect, then inflicting the same technique upon the target once more you would simply be administering a higher dose, which by general technique standards would mean a higher rank, meaning that an equal rank antidote would cure you of said affliction regardless.



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Ultimately a clan members poison is only as deadly as what they themselves have been subject to. Depending the amount and level of ailments the clan member has absorbed and stored the more deadly and varied poison that person may possess. This offers a large range and skill level of poisons which can be a simple mild poison gas which the clan member breathes, or a complex poison which has multiple effects on the targets system. Due to the varied range of poison and toxins a clan member can possess the affect of the poison it will be described in each individual jutsu.


Once again you inflict a contradiction in terms. Either they all are 'of the same poisonous affect' or there is a variety of different possible poisons and subsequently a variety of different affects upon a target. In the later case it would allow you a wider base of ability, on top of the already present absorption ability, granting another powerful path to the clan.



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With this unique skill clan members become immune to all poisons or anything that is detrimental to the clan members body. Members of the clan can release the 'Reaper's Curse' ability through any outlet in the human body. This is due to the manifested ailments being stored not only in the chakra system of the clan member, but also their tissue and blood.


See my initial series of points in regard to integration with the chakra system and/or the physical systems of the body.



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The poison generated from the users body is powerful enough so that it seems to have an advantage over most of the basic elements when confronted technique to technique with them. But the Fire Element has some neutralizing effect against the liquid poison the clan member is able produces. Obviously organic materials such as plant, wood etc are extremely susceptible to the poison, but certain non-organic materials, such as wax, tar etc are resistant to most of the poisons the clan members produces. The special Kinjite poison that talented Kurotsuki Clan members can produce, however, is so potent that it is able to bypass even non-organic substances such as wax and easily through iron and stone.


So, by your description the poison created by your clan has an advantage over essentially all elemental compositions beyond fire. Whilst I agree that fire would be able to burn and subsequently consume the poison, I do not believe it should be able to (nor would I allow it to) overpower essentially all other basic elements. Depending on the state of matter that it occupies, wind could disperse it, water could blow it away, so on and so forth.

Further, I must note that although Mokuton technique (or any other plant based techniques) might be indicative of organic matter, inflicting the poison upon them would serve them no real detriment as they are by and large fueled by the chakra of the user.

In regards to the special poison being able to bypass non-organic substances, I find myself a bit confounded on how this would be possible without the application of an acidic nature which would be another elemental category all together.

Given the hefty nature of my review of this concept I will not be going over the Jutsu at all until my issues with the clan conceptually are resolved entirely.