Oran Clan

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Clan Name: Oran

Location: Hi No Kumi

Signature Traits: This clan is a rare and peculiar one whose survival has been extremely limited because of their Kekkei Genkai and its strain on the body. The average lifespan of a member of this clan is forty-five years old on average. An additional reason that they are very small in number, with only two or three families capable of existing at a time, is due to a 'curse' (the same one that fuels their Kekkei Genkai).

In terms of appearance, all members of this clan have bright red hair that is always straight. Its lengths are variable. Of a similar color are their eyes, though the eyes being red is due a specific type of albinism. Despite having albino eyes the rest of their bodies do not suffer this, and are a variety of skin tones and colors depending on the family in question.

Physically, they have strong and hardy bodies capable of taking great amounts of punishment. This is because their Kekkei Genkai is extremely cruel and demanding, and would be absolutely lethal without proper conditioning. As such the physical condition eventually became the norm of their biology. A side effect is that their body temperature is an average of twenty degrees hotter than that of a normal human body. They've adapted to this well, though there is still some concern regarding its affect on them.

In terms of a general personality, all members of this clan are loyal to their connections. Strangely the immediate family is often excluded from this in the case of the children, who typically separate from their parents at the age of ten to being training with the other families. By doing this they diversify their skills and increase their own repertoire of talents.

Most unique of all, when their Kekkei Genkai is active, it is possible for them to make hand seals with only one hand. This is not automatic and must be trained, but learning to do it during their Kekkei Genkai can lead to them developing this skill in normal situations much faster than most individuals can.

Due to their high body heat, the Oran clan has extremely high nutritional requirements. They eat more on average than a normal person, burn more calories than a normal person, and usually need more high-energy foods. They burn nearly twice as many calories than a normal person at rest when they sleep. As such, they have extremely strict dietary requirements.

They have a fairly uniform personality. Members of this clan are a stubborn and hard-headed bunch. Do not expect them to give up their beliefs and loyalties without significant proof, as they place an inexplicable amount of faith in those they trust. They prize friends more highly than family members, and to say the least of it is that it shows.

Rarely has a member of this clan become an outright sociopath or developed psychopathic tendencies. They have a strong moral compass, and while their doubts are often tempered by their loyalties they will never cross their personal "moral" boundaries.

They are also incredibly reckless, attributed to the nature of their Kekkei Genkai. Impulsive, brash, stupid-- fair enough terms to describe the way they act in combat. Their tough bodies can endure the abuse, though, and psychologically they are excellently equipped to deal with pain.

Kekkei Genkai: Their Kekkai Genkai, called Ao Jigoku no Otoko (lit Blue Infernal Man) is named after their Clan Jutsu and actually consist of three separate genetic traits.

The first is called Ao Faiyāchakura (lit. Blue-Fire Chakra). It is a specialized, potent Fire Chakra unique to the Oran Clan. Using it is extremely strenuous on the body, often to the point of being able to cause lasting damage if used before proper training. Its effect on normal Jutsu is not evident when applied. In fact, the only observable difference is that fire-based attacks turn blue (thus its namesake).

A curiosity of this chakra is that it damages the user as well as causes them to physically regenerate when expended in only small amounts. It also is used to enhance Taijustu to greater extremes, as well as further increasing endurance.

The second is called Bāsākābodi (lit. Berserker Body). Naturally, to deal with the heavy expenditure of chakra the Oran clan's bodies developed to be much tougher. They are as prone to cuts and stabs as any other human, but are excellent at withstanding blunt impacts such as punches or kicks. While young their bodies are quite small, but during their mid-twenties they begin to rapidly and easily develop large, muscular frames. With training, this increase in mass will have little impact on their mobility. In fact learning to manipulate their mass will allow them to move more creatively and overall quicker.

A peculiarity of this trait is that they do in fact become stronger as they take on more damage and stress.

The third is called Kanen-sei no sukin (lit. Flammable Skin). While in truth their skin is actually less flammable than the average person's skin, the Oran clan can focus their chakra into their skin, specifically, and cause it to become flammable. It burns slowly and painfully, but engulfs the body in a raging inferno. By using their chakra wisely, they avoid damage to their senses and internal organs.

History: The Oran Clan has never been a prominent Clan, though it was once a very large one. Present throughout the Hi No Kumi's history, the Oran Clan had never produced particularly excellent ninja. In fact, only a handful of them ever went on to become Ninja. They were a fairly average clan in every conceivable sense of the word.

One of the clan, Oran Yashin, eventually attempted to make a deal with an unnamed entity. His clan would be culled to only a handful of families and in exchange granted greater power. Upon hearing the cost of the deal, Yashin quickly tried to back out proving unwilling to pay such a cost. The entity however did not let him refuse, and proceeded with the killing of most of the Oran clan anyway.

The 'reward' was that Yashin and the surviving Oran gained an augment to their fire chakra specific to them. In addition, they also became much tougher. Their bodies were naturally structured to endure abuse, though not to the level they are at today. Initially, the handful of Oran that survived were unable to use the Chakra effectively and even with their tougher bodies were prone to injury. It became extremely taboo among the families remaining to engage in Jutsu that required fire seals, which even further limited their warrior potential.

They also experienced a heightened metabolism. The new chakra in their bodies affected their psychology beyond simply toughening their bodies. It increased their basal metabolic rate and raised their average body temperature to 118 degrees. The chemical and psychical changes that accompanied this ensured their survival at this high temperature and allowed them to function normally. Even so, the Oran clan became prone to easily overheating.

It was a few generations later that Oran Meika began to hone the unique chakra given to her clan. She developed her body better to be able to endure the strain of her chakra, which was soon used to great effect in small-scale territory wars. Knowing that in order to use its full potential her clan's body would need to be tougher she began to seek out the young and train their bodies. It has since become common practice in the clan to learn Taijutsu first before Ninjutsu.

As they developed their Taijutsu skills their bodies became stronger. They were able to better tolerate prolonged activity, and the threat of overheating during fights became minimal. It was only a few years later that Meika discovered another, previously unknown trait they possessed: their skin was remarkably inflammable. The Oran clan had, as a result of the curse levied by Yashin's Entity developed flame-retardant skin.

Yashin developed the primary technique that became the namesake of their Kekkei Genkai after this discovery. However, its extreme difficulty and strain on the body made its use once more taboo among the group. However, those few (very few) that became Ninja made great use of the technique though ultimately they remained relatively obscure within Hi no Kumi.

Clan Jutsu:

Name: Ao Jigoku no Otoko (lit. Blue Infernal Man)

Rank: A Rank

Type: Nin/Tai

Range: Personal/Close

Element: Katon

Description: The Ao Jigoku no Otoko (lit. Blue Infernal Man) are the three traits of the Kekkei Genkai working in tandem make up the entire technique. The user sets themselves ablaze, causing their bodies damage through the slow-release of their chakra. This same slow release heals the damage done by the burning, enabling them to burn as long as their Chakra holds out.

They gain greater strength as this process continues, essentially making them stronger overtime. The more they burn, the stronger they become. The more damage they sustain, the stronger they become. Those who make physical contact with them will be set ablaze momentarily, their skin combusting as well in the area that has made contact. Fire-based Jutsu will only empower them further in this form, as their fire Chakra will envelop and add those flames to their own. Even natural fire can be incorporated into this technique, further increasing the user's power.

It also becomes less strenuous and more effective to use jutsu that requires fire chakra, meaning that casting the weaker jutsu to heal also gives them a better punch. As an additional benefit to this form, its extended use can lead to the user learning to perform their hand seals with only one hand. The chakra is being manipulated in a such manner during this form that performing the fire hand seals is a vain action, and once this psychological bar has been overcome the individual can achieve focus required to perform single-handed hand seals. Truly, this form is a behemoth to face in combat.

However, the catch is thus: even with the higher than average body heat the Oran clan possesses, this technique can not be sustained for very long. At five minutes, performance begins to deteriorate due to heat exhaustion. At six minutes, motor functions begin to fail. At seven minutes, the heat will cause them to die as their brain begins to cook. Needless to say, this has a very limited operating time.

Chakra Cost: 20 + 5x = CP cost (where X = turns sustained)

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This clan, as a whole, is a bit short on the detail side, in my opinion. It wouldn't do you any harm to just improve on most parts, describe things more extensively, add more information, and so on. Just a piece of advice, as it could help people later improve on characters based on this clan, if they understand it better.

Anyway, unto the review

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Most unique of all, when their Kekkei Genkai is active, it is possible for them to make hand seals with only one hand.

There is already a Special Characteristic that allows characters to accomplish that. Since abilities on US cannot infringe upon the SCs, you can't really have this ability on any character unless they possess that specific Special Characteristic. So, you either have to remove that bit or mention that characters still need to possess the One-Handed Seals SC (which makes this little description of yours kinda useless)
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Their tough bodies can endure the abuse, though, and psychologically they are excellently equipped to deal with pain.

Just a passing mention, in case you're not aware. The case is the same as the above - clansmen will have the same kind of endurance and pain-resistance as those around them - unless they possess the endurance SCs to boost those traits.
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A curiosity of this chakra is that it damages the user as well as causes them to physically regenerate when expended in only small amounts. It also is used to enhance Taijustu to greater extremes, as well as further increasing endurance.

Please expand upon that segment. How much damage does it cause to the user? What degree of regeneration does it allow (mind you, regeneration is rather iffy to get here on US, so keep in mind that it may be required to be changed or removed)? How does it enhance the Taijutsu and to what level? And refer to above for the endurance portion.
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In fact learning to manipulate their mass will allow them to move more creatively and overall quicker.

Care to explain that portion? I don't quite get what you mean with the 'manipulate their mass' bit.
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A peculiarity of this trait is that they do in fact become stronger as they take on more damage and stress.

This bears explaining, as well. Everything that is a "power" that can be used in battle needs to be detailed and explained, so it's not left up in the air. How do they become "stronger"? Physically? In terms of chakra potency? And how much stronger do they get, relating to the damage they take? Try to be as explanatory on this kind of things as you can, please.
Kanen-sei no sukin - Regarding this, I say the same as the above. All of these "techniques" and abilities will need more stipulations, chakra costs, better descriptions, and all of those kinds of things. If you need help better understanding and putting yourself in the right context, you can always check the already approved/canon clans, to see what I mean.
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One of the clan, Oran Yashin, eventually attempted to make a deal with an unnamed entity. His clan would be culled to only a handful of families and in exchange granted greater power. Upon hearing the cost of the deal, Yashin quickly tried to back out proving unwilling to pay such a cost. The entity however did not let him refuse, and proceeded with the killing of most of the Oran clan anyway.

What kind of entity is this? I'm kind of reluctant to let Deity-related mentions or references to powerful entities as such pass by, as it could easily lead to everyone going around with god-given powers and things like that. Could you make it clear, on the clan's history, that this is not a fact and, rather, a myth?
"The new chakra in their bodies affected their psychology beyond simply toughening their bodies." - I believe you mean physiology?
"The chemical and psychical changes that accompanied this (...)" - Physical?
Considering you're saying that the clan members need to learn Taijutsu before they learn the clan Ninjutsu, does this mean that every Oran clan member needs to have Taijutsu as one of their specialties? If that's the case, you need to state it as such.
Ao Jigoku no Otoko (lit. Blue Infernal Man) - Considering that the damage they take is healed (which brings up the point I said before, regarding regeneration), how do they still increase their power? Because, technically, the damage they're taking is being healed, so the "berserker" boost they would get for being damage shouldn't apply, as they're actually healed and not damaged anymore, no?
Like I said before, the increase in strength, the regeneration, the damage taken, etc, all those things need to be further explained and put into parameters and levels, so they're better understood. Furthermore, being able to absorb Katon techniques does not sound that good to me, as that's something mostly only people with the Clan Master SC should be able to accomplish, in principle. Furthermore, to be able to just absorb Fire techniques regardless of rank would be a bit too much.
"meaning that casting the weaker jutsu to heal also gives them a better punch." - That sentence kind of confused me.
Finally, regarding the length during which this technique can be maintained for, could you convert the minutes to posts, please? Measuring something in minutes is rather vague and can vary depending on the situation, whilst having a post basis certainly helps with keeping things even.

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Still working on this? Asking due to archiving purposes.

Age : 31 Posts : 1900

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