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PostSubject: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyThu 29 Jul 2010, 2:45 am

Basic Information:

Name:
Kaneo Taru
Secondary Title:
Bui
Age:
18
Gender:
Male
Physical Appearance:
Face Shot
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At first glance, Bui would strike someone as a charming and handsome young man, his near perfectly angular face gives him a young yet mature look, which only adds to his smile and pearly white, but slightly sharpened, teeth. He has a slightly long but straight nose that matches the angular effect set by his jawline and chin. His face is completely free of all blemishes or scars, showing only smooth and soft flesh on his well framed face, though despite this, Bui has a slightly pale complexion that catches light in interesting ways.

His eyes are a bright and deeply colored sapphire blue, each always lit up by the light around him in a way that makes his eyes dance and shimmer that add to the kind and charming effect given off by the rest of his face. If one were to really stare deep into Bui's eyes, the shining reflection and handsome appearance will fall away, revealing a cold and harsh look behind the animated mask set by his seemingly "nice" features.

Bui's hair is a fair blonde, its color changing slightly lighter during the summer and darker to a degree during the winter seasons. Though always Bui has it cut to mid length, there it stays in this cut fashion. Although Bui never tends to his hair in any way, it somehow always spikes itself in a neat pattern on the tops and sides, leaving the sideburns, bangs, and back to straighten out and even more neatly frame his cheeks and face. The handsome face of Bui's features, to those who know him, are all to misleading, as Bui's true personality is nothing like what his handsome smile and sparkling eyes may lead many to believe.

Bui has even set and firm shoulders, the slightly pale skin if bare, reveal a cut and strong set of muscles that hint at his training with swords and weapons. Following along the his arms, the rest of Bui follows suit of his shoulders, his muscles strong and toned, more pronounced around the forearms then the rest of his arms, all attributed to his focus in kenjutsu. if one pays attention, they can see Bui's veins slightly bulging out when his arms flex and move during battle or his periodic training sessions, although they are by no means highly accentuated on his skin, which is a sure sign of over building of the bodies muscles.

Bui's chest, like the rest of his body has no scars or other blemishes that would hide or effect his pale but smooth flesh. His pecks are slightly firm, as well as sides, and his abdomen, which shows a lightly cut six pack. Though like his arms, Bui's torso and chest are almost always covered by some type of clothing, blocking any view one might have

Personality:
Bui does not like to beleive he can be beaten in anyway shape or form, anything at all. He beleives himself to be better than most of his opponents. However, he does break this rule when mentioning Monki. He enjoys playing with his foes, and has several quotes that go with that such as, "Ah man, I'm really itching to play with you. And we should play slowly, or the game is not as fun." He seems to enjoy fighting and torturing his foes as well as taking on as many as possible. He seems to be the smartest member of the Tetsuo clan, seeing as how he is able to figure out the weak point of his and it's exact location and how to use this as an advantage. He also seems to be more cautious, allowing his jutsu to distract opponents while he sets up traps and fires ranged weapons at them. Finally, he seems to have a bit of a sense of humor, stale as it is, he has several quotes that show this like, "Ehh, he damaged several of my internal organs, but, I can still move."

Bui is a dark hearted person who has forsaken all others for the survival of themselves and the greater good. He is a double and triple crosser who weilds the ultimate Tetsuo's techniques. Born in an age of darkness and violence, the only way he sevived was blending in and not being noticed to strike at the hearts of those who whish him dead. His only two true friends are misery and lonliness. The sometimes have a short temper but is easily resovled at the sight of blood.

Bui is a evil-natured, quiet, and eager shinobi, believing that a person becomes truly strong when they have something truly important to fight for. Bui fully takes advantage of his talent for battle and incredible abilities, he applies these talents where ever possible, using his chakra and abilties for the smallest of tasks. When forced to face an opponent, Bui does all that he can to inflicting great harm, though he would rather make the battle last longer by using smaller, weaker jutsus and attacks to harm. He will only use his more powerful jutsu's when in a tight situation or if he is out matched.
Catch Phrase:
Life is not an Option

Clan Information:

Clan Name: Taru (Tar)

Clan Location: Anywhere

Clan Traits:
Earth Affinity:
All Taru have an affinity towards the Earth element.

Body of Tar:
When a Taru is born, the baby is taken to the clan elders who then perform a series of rituals and operations on the child for a total time of 3 days to turn the infant's body from a normal human's to a body composed of a tar-like substance (much like Suigetsu’s water body). This is shaped and hardened to mimic the human body and its anatomy. Despite being made of tar, Taru can still bleed like a normal human, the only difference being that their blood is black rather than red (i.e they have black haemoglobin rather than red). A passive ability that is as simple as breathing for this clan, this trait grants them several abilities:

- Defense: Since they are made of tar, they cannot be killed/hurt by attacks like Taijutsu, Kenjutsu etc, since the attack will simply sink through them and break them or turn them into a pile of tar. Taru CAN be killed/hurt by Ninjutsu or Genjutsu of any kind, they cannot be killed by attacks that focus on hurting the body with blows (Taijutsu, Kenjutsu etc).

- Regeneration: Since they have formed their body from tar, they can regenerate their body parts with ease. Therefore, if their body is severed in two or hit so hard that they turn into a pile of tar, they can easily grow back into their former appearance. The time taken to regenerate is based on the rank of the attack, with attacks of the same rank as the user being fixed in half a post, while attacks 1 rank above the user’s rank taking 1 post, 2 ranks above take 2 posts etc. If an S-Rank Taru is hit by a S-Rank attack of Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, etc. it will still take 1 post to regenerate. An important note is that the body part can only be regenerated if the tar is within a 20ft radius. Any tar beyond that point cannot be used to regenerate body parts. As they can regenerate lost body parts, the tar from their body can also be used to attack or defend, but the user might be in danger of using up all their body tar and killing themselves. Since this is not a passive technique and is a jutsu, it costs chakra to perform.

- Body Manipulation: Using their ability to control and shape tar into different forms, Taru are capable of changing the appearance of their body. They can change a limb into a sword, or grow wings, even manipulate their body mass. Taru of a high rank such as A/S-Rank can change their entire appearance to appear as another creature.

Kekkei Genkai:
Tar Element
The Tar element is an advanced form of the Earth element that creates a black, ooze-like substance that has a sticky nature to it, similar to slime or glue. The following list details the elemental superiority or inferiority of the Tar element as opposed to the five basic elements:
- Tar is strong against Water.
- Tar is weak against Lightning.
- Tar is neutral against Earth, Wind and Fire (attacks of the same rank will cancel each other out).

As they can harden the tar to different extents, their attacks can be lethal. They can control any tar around them, even tar from their own body, though this will have to be grown back with more tar. The tar is controlled using various hand gestures, and relies completely on the clan member’s use of his or her hands; if the clan member’s hands are unusable, then they cannot control the tar. The tar can be made to grab something, create stairs or buildings, and many other things. Taru who are skilled enough may even alter their body mass by changing the amount of tar their body is composed.

The Tar element is known to be quite sticky, capable of restricting movement to a great level. The tar can be cut with sharp objects; however the rank of the object must be equivalent to the rank of the clan member for it to work. Blunt objects rarely have any affect on the tar.

Secret Clan Jutsu:
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Name: Tar Creation
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: A Taru will cause tar to seep out of the ground around him. The technique can create up to 15ft of tar per post, and requires a D-Rank amount of chakra per post. One of the most basic and most fundamental clan jutsu, this technique is used as a source of tar for the clan member’s attacks.

Name: Tar Mastery
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This skill allows Taru clan members to manipulate tar. The tar can be made to attack or defend in any way. Using various hand gestures, the Taru can control the tar. They can even lift the tar into the air to use it more effectively. The Taru can control any tar within his controlling area. The area varies based on rank, with C-Rank having a 10 meter radius, B-Rank having a 20 meter radius, A-Rank having a 30 meter radius, and S-Rank having a 50 meter radius.

Name: Regeneration
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Since they have formed their body from tar, they can regenerate their body parts with ease. Therefore, if their body is severed in two or hit so hard that they turn into a pile of tar, they can easily grow back into their former appearance. The time taken to regenerate is based on the rank of the attack, with attacks of the same rank as the user being fixed in half a post, while attacks 1 rank above the user’s rank taking 1 post, 2 ranks above take 2 posts etc. If an S-Rank Taru is hit by a S-Rank attack of Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, etc. it will still take 1 post to regenerate. An important note is that the body part can only be regenerated if the tar is within a 20ft radius. Any tar beyond that point cannot be used to regenerate body parts. As they can regenerate lost body parts, the tar from their body can also be used to attack or defend, but the user might be in danger of using up all their body tar and killing themselves. Since this is not a passive technique and is a jutsu, it costs chakra to perform.

Name: Tar Hardening
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This jutsu allows a Taru to harden the tar he uses. Taru of different ranks can harden the tar to different extents. C-Rank can harden it to the strength of iron, B-Rank can harden it to the strength of concrete, A-Rank can make it strong enough to withstand even the toughest of Kaguya attacks, and S-Rank can make it as hard as diamond. Whatever the rank of the Taru, the jutsu is still a C-Rank one.

Name: Tar Tendrils
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: A Taru will gather extra tar to his back, which he will convert into four 10ft long tentacles that can be controlled like extra appendages. The tentacles are no harder than normal tar, however the same defense rules apply here as well. Due to the stickiness of the tentacles, a Taru can bind his opponent with these tentacles and hold them in place.

Name: Tar Spew
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: The Taru will gather Tar Chakra to his mouth, and will then squirt out a stream of sticky tar at a high pressure aimed at the target. The tar stream will be at such high pressure that it will be capable of breaking through wood. The maximum range of this jutsu is 5 meters, and if the stream of tar hits the target, it will cover them entirely and will restrict their movement because of its stickiness.

Name: Tar Finger Bullets
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: The Taru will fire a barrage of finger-sized bullets made of hardened tar at the target using the tar from his fingers. The Tar Bullets will be launched at a high speed and will be capable of travelling a foot into a thick tree.

Name: Tar Balls
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: A Taru will gather some of the tar around him and form a few baseball-sized spheres of tar that will float in the air around him. With a flick of his hand, the Taru can send either one or all of the Tar Balls flying towards the target. If the Tar Ball hits the target, it will pop and cover them in sticky tar which will restrict their movement. Any attack higher than C-Rank will enable the target to escape the sticky coating. Any Lightning attack will have the same effect. Jutsu requiring movement to break free such as the Hyuuga clan’s Rotation cannot be used when covered in the coating.

Name: Tar Sculpting
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: A technique which allows a Taru to shape tar into any object he wishes, whether it is a weapon or simple furniture. The object created will be as hard as the clan member can make it and will function just as well as its real version. Whenever the clan member wishes it, he may turn the object back into tar. Because of the versatility of this technique, it is often considered a clan favorite.

Name: Tar Clone
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: This technique allows a Taru to shape tar into tangible clone of himself composed of tar. The Tar Clone can interact more with the environment since it is tangible and is capable of performing a limited number of jutsu (2 C-Ranks, 3 D-Ranks, and 4 E-Ranks). When the Tar Clone is hit, it will burst into a shower of tar and cover everything within 5ft of it in sticky, black tar which will restrict movement.

Name: Tar Barrier of Protection
Rank: C-A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: Using the tar around them, a Taru will form a dome-like barrier of hardened tar around them, which will block incoming attacks. The size of the dome varies from rank to rank, with C-Rank being able to create a dome 5ft in diameter, B-Rank being able to create a dome 8ft in diameter, and A-Rank being able to create a dome 12ft in diameter. The Tar Barrier will only block attacks of its rank and lower, with the exception of Lightning attacks, which can only be blocked when they are two ranks beneath the rank of the Tar Barrier (A can block C, S can block B). The Taru can either for a full dome of tar to block attacks from all directions, or a half dome to block attacks from a particular direction.

Name: Advanced Tar Clone
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Ooze
Description: An advanced form of the original Tar Clone, the advanced version also creates a tangible clone composed of tar. However, this clone cannot perform any jutsu and is restricted to simple non-chakra-based attacks. Due to its malleability, when a physical attack such as a Taijutsu or Weaponry attack lands on the Advanced Tar Clone the blow will sink through the clone rather than harm it. The Tar Clone will last until it is struck by a chakra-based attack of any type other than the ones it is immune to (i.e Taijutsu, Weaponry, etc.).

Name: Mass Alteration Jutsu
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar/None
Description: This jutsu enables a Taru to alter his body mass using tar. The Taru can decrease their body mass by removing some of the tar from which they are made, thus reducing their body mass and granting them more speed, but decreasing their over-all strength (stat percentage increase and decrease is proportional to the percentage decrease of the body’s mass). Similarly, the Taru can fuse more tar into their body to increase their body mass and therefore gain an increase in their strength but a decrease in their speed (stat percentage increase and decrease is proportional to the percentage increase of the body’s mass). An example would be is if a Taru adds 10% to his body mass he gains a 10% strength increase but a 10% speed decrease.

Name: Tar Sinkhole
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: The Taru will first use the Tar Manufacturing Jutsu to create tar beneath the target, which will be as soft as quicksand and will therefore cause the target to sink into the ground. The target will sink so deep into the ground that the pressure of being trapped so deep within the earth and the stickiness of the tar will leave them incapable from freeing themselves. This jutsu can only be used after the Tar Manufacturing Jutsu has been used, and since such a large amount of tar has to be created, this jutsu takes some time to set up (2 posts).

Name: Tar Cocoon
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: The Taru will cause tar from the ground to rise up and cover the target’s feet, stopping them in their tracks. The tar will them rise up and cover their entire body, preventing them from moving at all. The Tar Cocoon will be very thick, so it will be difficult to break it. Lightning Jutsu of any rank may break through this Cocoon, while Taijutsu attacks of A-Rank and above can break through this Cocoon. This jutsu is used to set up the use of Tar Constriction.

Name: Tar Constriction
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar
Description: After performing Tar Cocoon or the Tar Sinkhole Jutsu, the Taru will perform a clenching motion with his hand which will cause the tar around the target to constrict so tightly that it breaks the target’s bones and internal organs, ultimately killing them. This jutsu cannot be used in the same post as Tar Cocoon or Tar Sinkhole.

Name: Shape-Shifting
Rank: A-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Tar/None
Description: This jutsu allows the clan member to change the appearance of his body either by shifting the arrangement of the tar on their body or by using tar from a source around them. Using this jutsu, the clan member can do a variety of things with his body, such as changing the appearance of a limb or even the entire body’s appearance. Some common changes to their body are listed below:

- Wings: By using all the tar from their arms, a Taru will form large wings of a wingspan of 10ft, whether bat-like or bird-like is the Taru’s choice. The wings can be used to deliver large gusts of air or to blow back weapon attacks. They can also be used to increase the Taru’s jumping height by 50%, and can also be used to slow down a fall. When used in conjunction with the Mass Alteration Jutsu a Taru can make himself light enough to fly using the wings, though this will result in the Taru losing 60% of his body mass and strength. Does not require an alternative source of tar.

- Weapon Arms: This allows the Taru to change one or both of his arms into different weapons, such as a axe head or a sword’s blade. Weapons such as weapon launchers can also be made. These will not launch real weapons like kunai or shuriken, rather hardened tar versions of them. Does not require an alternative source of tar.

- Beast Limbs: A Taru can change his hands or feet into animal appendages, such as claws or talons. They will function just like the real versions of them, though they are made of tar. Does not require an alternative source of tar.

- Enhanced Limbs: Using a source of tar, a Taru will gather tar to his limbs until they are much stronger. When the limbs are at their strongest, they are capable of kicking/punching through a 3ft thick steel door.

- Demon Form: This allows a Taru to change his over-all appearance to match a demon with some or all of the above body improvements (wings, claws, stronger limbs etc.). To do this, a Taru must use a nearby source of tar to alter his appearance. This is the part of the jutsu that is S-Rank. An important note is that the Taru must choose how he wants his appearance to look like e.g whether he wants wings with high speed, or enhanced limbs with great strength and so on. This form can only be maintained for 5 posts; after that, the Taru will be low on chakra and will be in danger of dying or fainting from chakra over-use.

History:
The Taru clan began with four brothers, all four of whom, had the ability to create a tar-like substance. These four brothers, known at that time as “The Four Tar Pits”, were well-renowned as great and powerful shinobi. They were neutral to all countries, and their strengths were often requested by other villages. One particular request was given by small village to rid their village of a tyrannical leader. The four brothers were reluctant to agree to this request, but after seeing the state of the village and the treatment it received from its ruler, they agreed to fight against the tyrant and free the village from his rule.

Gathering a few followers and several allies, the four brothers began their assault on the tyrant’s fortress. They rebellion easily defeated the guards and first wave of defense, but they received a grim surprise in the form of the second wave of defense. The tyrant was revealed to have made dealings with demons and other form of dark creatures, and he sent them out to rid him of the rebellion. A great battle ensued between the tyrant’s demonic forces and the rebellion led by the four brothers. After severe losses on their side, the rebellion managed to come on top of the battle, though they just barely managed to do so. The cowardly tyrant committed suicide before his attackers even reached him, and from then on the village was free from such tyrannical rule. The four brothers, due to unanimous request, took up the role of the village’s leaders and protectors.

Many years passed, and by then the four brothers had married and left behind children, all of whom possessed their ability to create tar. These children further spread the ability through their offspring, and soon an entire clan of tar-users was living in the village. This increase caused the newly-named Taru clan to migrate from the village to other parts of the world. To this day, the Taru clan resides in all four of the Four Great Ninja Countries, as well as in a few Smaller Countries as well.

Clan Details: OPEN

Rank Information:

Rank:
Jounin
Village Affiliation:
Kumogakure

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main: Weaponry [Kenjutsu]
Sub: Ninjutsu
Elemental Affinity: I don't want any
Main: Earth
Sub: N/A
Special Characteristics:
Mischevious: This character is unpredictible and intentions cannot be read by anyone. Usually works alone but uses others when the time is needed. [Kabuto]

Battle Enraged: While usual a pretty calm and collected guy in person bui becomes a battle enraged best when in a fight. His attend is to kill and kill wuickly.

Gigantism
Standing well over several feet tall, the character is a giant. His huge, powerful frame is source of awe among his fellow men, who pause to stare as they pass him on the street. Though very strong, the wear on his body will certainly age him unnaturally and his life span is half what it would be normally. Furthermore, the character must eat twice as much as men of lesser stature and will also have a hard time finding clothes that will fit him without the services of a skilled tailor.
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20% strength increase

Ambidextrous
The character is equally adept at using either hand. Although ambidexterity is rare at birth, it can be learned. Most duelists spend their whole lives refining this talent

Hidden Chakra: Born with a massive chakra capacity. However Bui isn't able to control this chakra like he would like to. Trying to use this massive amount for too long (5post) has a great strain on bui's body. It will drop bui on his knees rendering him useless for the 2 next post. However the chakra is so great bui becomes resistant to physical damage. Bui wears is armor to nullify and hide this chakra.
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15% chakra increase

Increased Speed: Because of his muscular build and Armor he posses bui's body became naturally a temple of speed. He is slightly faster (When is armor isn't on)
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15% speed increase


Chakra Radar
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The Tetsuo can sense different types of chakra of different shinobi within a 50m radius. The farther the shinobi is, the weaker the sense is. The closer it is, the better. This Sense is not visual but it's a
chance the Tetsuo has for sensing who and where the opponent or ally is.
D-Ranked: At this rank shinobi are allowed a 5m Radius of sensory within their body range. This ability will last for 2 post before it fades away and is useless. Ability can be activated at will but not deactivated.
C-Rank: At this rank shinobi are allowed a 10m Radius of sensory within their body range. This ability will last for 3 post before it fades away and is useless. Ability can be activated at will but not deactivated.
B-Ranked: At this rank shinobi are allowed a 20m Radius of sensory within their body range. This ability will last for 4 post before it fades away and is useless. Ability can be activated at will but not deactivated.
A-Ranked: At this rank shinobi are allowed a 40m Radius of sensory within their body range. This ability will last for 5 post before it fades away and is useless. Ability can be turned on at will but not deactivated.
S-Ranked: At this rank shinobi are allowed a 50m Radius of sensory within their body range. This ability will last for 7 post before it fades away and is useless. Ability can be activated at will but not deactivated.

Skill Information:
Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.

Jutsu Template:
Basic Ninjutsu
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History:
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The Tetsou Clan used to be a rather unknown and lonely clan, living in the mountains in the southern Lightning Country all by themselves, only descending into the civilized world now and then to serve as mercenaries. On the southern cliffs of the mountains, the clan used to live in self-dug caverns and tiny villages, built in such a way that they caught the least sunlight as was possible. After all, the less sunlight they had, the stronger they were and the more easily they were capable of training.

Name of Jutsu: Chakra Blade Jutsu
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element Affinity: N/A
Description: By focusing a good deal of chakra into their right hands and extending its shape beyond her finger tips, Bui is able to create a narrow, triangular shaped blade from raw chakra. The blade is about 18 inches long, and because it is made of chakra it has incredible cutting properties, and is capable of rending flesh with almost no resistance. It requires a huge amount of chakra control and capacities to be able both create the chakra required to physically manifest as the blade, and to contain and shape it into the blade shape. This jutsu requires one A rank of jutsu to activate and shape, then one D rank per post to keep it active.
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Kenjutsu
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B-ranked
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Medical Jutsu
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptySun 08 Aug 2010, 5:45 am

ok ready to be approved
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptySun 08 Aug 2010, 7:19 am

You're allowed two categories under the weaponry specialty.

RyuKage wrote:

Hidden Chakra: Born with a massive chakra capacity compared to that of the 3 tails bijuu. However Bui isn't anle to control this chakra like he would like to. Trying to use this massive amount for too long (3post) has a great strain on bui's body. It will drop bui on his knees rendering him useless for the next (2post). However the chakra is so great bui becomes resistant to physical damage. Bui wears is armor to nullify and hide this chakra.
15% chakra increase

You defiantly can't have massive chakra capacity compared to the three tails.

RyuKage wrote:

Name: Zecke [Tick]
Type: Taijutsu
Sub-type: Älter-Ritterlich Kunst
Stance: None
Rank: E
Elemental affinity: N/A
Description: An offensive skill requiring no stance. It is simply an overhead strike that uses the flat of the blade to deliver blunt damage without the intent of causing death. The purpose of this is to knock someone unconscious or to strike a foe with their back turned.

Name: Eisen Pforte [Iron gate]
Type: Taijutsu
Rank: E
Elemental Afinity: N/A
Description: It is known as an Iron Defense for it's versatility for blocking all manner of swords and strikes. One commonly uses the flat of the blade to deflect on coming attacks while using as little movement as possible.

You have these both labeled as taijutsu, despite being in your kenjutsu list.

RyuKage wrote:

Name: Manipulating Precision Blade
Type: Kenjutsu
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: A variation of the Manipulating Attack Blades, this allows a Kenjutsu user to control their sword from up to twenty meters away with great precision as if they were holding on to the handle with both hands.

Seeing as this is a variation of the Manipulating Attack Blades technique, which is considered Puppetry here, you will need to remove this.

RyuKage wrote:

Name: Wameku Chijou Satsu No Jutsu (Translation: Screaming Ground slicer Technique)
Rank: C
Jutsu Type: Kenjutsu
Elemental Affinity: N/A
Description: This attack is done by releasing 1/3 of the chakra reserves in the chakra diamond that has either been pushed through strikes, or stored there by the wielder of the blade. Using a high arch rising crescent strike where the tip of the blade starts on the ground and then rises up rapidly following a crescent arch. While rising from the ground bui himself releases Chakra. This causes a screaming almost wailing sound from the air being cut and being moved through by the rapid moving speed of the attack. This will cause a gash in the ground to appear easily giving away the direction of travel of this attack. Because this attack relies on speed to hit its opponent it often times can be dodged. However if one is unlucky and is actually hit by this attack a large gash will appear where the attack landed. The range of this attack is about eight meters away, but some have been known to stretch it ten meters with adding a bit of their own chakra. At Chuunin, and Jounin ranks this attack gains substantial speed, becoming harder to dodge even if you can perceive its path.

Seeing as this puts chakra into the weapon, the weapon would have to be B-Ranked, which you cannot have because you are a genin, so please remove.

RyuKage wrote:
Name: Sanjou Rasen Kiritsukeru no Jutsu
Rank: C
Jutsu Type: KenJutsu
Elemental Affinity:N/A
Description:The user of this technique does three slashes in tight pattern that will cover about 3 inches squared in a perfect triangle, while doing these strikes they release small amounts of chakra from the tip of the blade causing small chakra burns. This attack does minimal damage, but is the base of quite a few techniques in the future. (There isn’t a need for superior chakra control to do this due to the fact that chakra release is control through Bui himself, all one has to do is mold a small amount of chakra to the blade and it will release it.)

Seeing as this puts chakra into the weapon, the weapon would have to be B-Ranked, which you cannot have because you are a genin, so please remove.


RyuKage wrote:

Name: Power
Quantity: 1
Rank: C
Appearance:
Kaneo Taru Bui%3B_Axe
This weapon are approximently 15ft long with a 40in blade. Increadibly large for a sword it weights 300 posund.
Special Abilities/Characteristics: N/A..... Bui normally fights melee-style using a enormous battle axe, about five times the size of his own body. The axe itself is actually formed when Bui gathers his chakra in his right hand, which then solidifies into a weapon...... These weapons are highly durable and are nearly impossible to break. Along with it's extremly desnse for this blade can cut through the thickest armor without dulling.
Origin:Kaneo got this weapon from his dad Bui Sr. which raised him since he was little. His dad, Bui Sr. always knew that Kaneo wanted to be a strong Kenjutsu shinobi. Later Bui Sr. died on a mission, the sword was alone, and since Bui Sr. didn't had any other relatives the sword was personally given to Kaneo by the kage. Kaneo mastered his Kenjutsu art and went and passed the academy with only Kenjutsu and Ninjutsu. He realized his dad wanted him to be a great Kenjutsu ninja and that's why he gave him the sword. Since that point on Kaneo started training to be a Kenjutsu master. And hopefully be one of the Great Seven Swordsmens.

Chakra conductive weapons are B-ranked.

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You also need an rp sample.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptySun 08 Aug 2010, 8:01 am

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Name: Wameku Chijou Satsu No Jutsu (Translation: Screaming Ground slicer Technique)
Rank: C
Jutsu Type: Kenjutsu
Elemental Affinity: N/A
Description: This attack is done by releasing 1/3 of the chakra reserves in the chakra diamond that has either been pushed through strikes, or stored there by the wielder of the blade. Using a high arch rising crescent strike where the tip of the blade starts on the ground and then rises up rapidly following a crescent arch. While rising from the ground bui himself releases Chakra. This causes a screaming almost wailing sound from the air being cut and being moved through by the rapid moving speed of the attack. This will cause a gash in the ground to appear easily giving away the direction of travel of this attack. Because this attack relies on speed to hit its opponent it often times can be dodged. However if one is unlucky and is actually hit by this attack a large gash will appear where the attack landed. The range of this attack is about eight meters away, but some have been known to stretch it ten meters with adding a bit of their own chakra. At Chuunin, and Jounin ranks this attack gains substantial speed, becoming harder to dodge even if you can perceive its path.


Seeing as this puts chakra into the weapon, the weapon would have to be B-Ranked, which you cannot have because you are a genin, so please remove.

RyuKage wrote:
Name: Sanjou Rasen Kiritsukeru no Jutsu
Rank: C
Jutsu Type: KenJutsu
Elemental Affinity:N/A
Description:The user of this technique does three slashes in tight pattern that will cover about 3 inches squared in a perfect triangle, while doing these strikes they release small amounts of chakra from the tip of the blade causing small chakra burns. This attack does minimal damage, but is the base of quite a few techniques in the future. (There isn’t a need for superior chakra control to do this due to the fact that chakra release is control through Bui himself, all one has to do is mold a small amount of chakra to the blade and it will release it.)


Seeing as this puts chakra into the weapon, the weapon would have to be B-Ranked, which you cannot have because you are a genin, so please remove.

*I edited these juts but they aren't pushing chakra through my blade. I am actually pushing the chakra through my character's kkg. The blade isn't conductive at all and is only form by fusing my chakra with a pen thus making it's massive form.
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Can be edited for jounin. ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptySun 15 Aug 2010, 4:07 am

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Name: Spirit sword
Quantity: 1
Rank: A
Appearance:
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Special Abilities/Characteristics: Said to be the legendary blade of the Seven Swordsman Kuwabara, Spirit sword is a blade is matched by no other. The blade is different from most other weapons in its special ability to take its wielder's chakra and mold it into destructive more forms. It is usually used in situations where massive destructive power is needed, or against much larger (and physically stronger) foes. When the wielder's chakra envelopes the a hostsuch as a sheath , the chakra has a dusky yellow color, which can also serve as a source of light. Spirit Sword can also be split into two separate blades for a dual-sword fighting style, although its other abilities would not be active in this form. This sword is also able to create a massive prismatic blade, of pure Chakra, which also generates a unique, almost-electrical, aura that crackles around his entire body and improve both his offense and defense.

Bui normally fights melee-style using a enormous battle axe, about five times the size of his own body. The axe itself is actually formed when Buy clicks his pen in his right hand, which then forms into a weapon...... These weapons are highly durable and are nearly impossible to break. Along with it's extremely dense for this blade can cut through the thickest armor without dulling.
Origin:This is Bui's signature attack, where he creates a sword made of his Chakra Energy. Its strength depends on how much chakra Bui uses. It is first used in the chunin exams when Bui holds a piece of a broken sword from a special spiritually-powerful wooden sword used by Musashi, his first opponent. The broken piece helped this weapon to emerge when Bui got desperate. After the tournament is over, Bui does some training and learns how to manifest it at will, no longer needing the broken sword piece. Since Bui is trained as a swordsman, he has the grace of Hiei's sword strikes[seven swordsman], and swing rather similar to him.
Spirit Sword Kenjutsu:
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Name: Power n Rage
Quantity: 2
Rank: B
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Special Abilities/Characteristics: Both of these sword are really sharp and rather dense among most. They are conductors of chakra. When both are fused together they form one A ranked weapon named Spirit sword.
Origin:Kaneo got this weapon from his dad Bui Sr. which raised him since he was little. His dad, Bui Sr. always knew that Kaneo wanted to be a strong Kenjutsu shinobi. Later Bui Sr. died on a mission, the sword was alone, and since Bui Sr. didn't had any other relatives the sword was personally given to Kano by the kage. Kano mastered his Kenjutsu art and went and passed the academy with only Kenjutsu and Ninjutsu. He realized his dad wanted him to be a great Kenjutsu ninja and that's why he gave him the sword. Since that point on Kano started training to be a Kenjutsu master. And hopefully be one of the Great Seven Swordsmens.

]Name: Battle Axe
Quantity: 1
Rank: C
Appearance:
Kaneo Taru Bui%3B_Axe

Special Abilities/Characteristics:Bui normally fights melee-style using a enormous battle axe, about five times the size of his own body. The axe itself is actually formed when Bui clicks his pen in his right hand, which then forms into a weapon...... These weapons are highly durable and are nearly impossible to break. Along with it's extremely dense for this blade can cut through the thickest armor without dulling.
Origin:Kano got this weapon from his dad Bui Sr. which raised him since he was little. His dad, Bui Sr. always knew that Kano wanted to be a strong Kenjutsu shinobi. Later Bui Sr. died on a mission, the sword was alone, and since Bui Sr. didn't had any other relatives the sword was personally given to Kaneo by the kage. Kaneo mastered his Kenjutsu art and went and passed the academy with only Kenjutsu and Ninjutsu. He realized his dad wanted him to be a great Kenjutsu ninja and that's why he gave him the sword. Since that point on Kaneo started training to be a Kenjutsu master. And hopefully be one of the Great Seven Swordsmens [/quote]

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Full body shot with armorKaneo Taru Bui_in_armor
Name: Battle Armor
Rank: A
Type: Suppressor
Natural Abilities: Normal armor usually protects the fighter from his opponent's attacks, but Bui's actually acts as an inhibitor for his true power, and thus protects his opponent from himself. This Armor actually resist Bui's Full chakra potential and slows down his natural speed in motion. This armor also provides a natural defense for Bui as is decreases C-Ranked physical type jutsu 60%. B-Ranked is decreased by 40% though if hit 3x this armors breaks. It also has a slight protection againt A-Ranked but only 20% however is armor will no longer be useable. D-Ranked and below will have no effect at all.

Background Information

History:
Academy Student
There once was a clan in the Kumogakure Village, a clan that was very well known and known as one of the best. Tetsuo was the clans’ name and this clan was stationed near the cave enterance. Not many could travel through the village without seeing a member of this clan training. The clan was very prosperous up until the time of the nine tailed attack.

Bui’s mother, father, uncle, aunt and three cousins were the last of the clan. Bui was the last one born and was only an academy student at the time of the attack. After the attack, Bui lost his brother. His mother took over his training, but along with the training began more life learning lessons about women. In the first year of his training he learned a lot about the clan. He was taught that the clan was not only very quick learners, but chakra manipulation was their strongest skill. The clan learned jutsu that was taught specifically to the clan. Each art mimicked a god in which they worshipped when fighting.

Bui was the youngest clan member to be taught the clan's Ninjutsu. His mother had learned the arts and was the holder of the scrolls, in which the clan jutsu secrets were held. By the age of seven, Bui had begun to learn one of the many art forms of the clan. At the age of seven he had joined the Academy. Bui was made fun of because of his inability to really mold chakra too well. This like all things began to pass as he learned to mold chakra. This was something of a shock to his mother, as the clan was built to mold chakra. Bui wasn’t the first, but he was the first member in the clan that couldn't mold a bit of chakra. His mother couldn’t teach him anything about molding chakra, but that was what the Academy was for and that’s what he used it for mostly. Projectile weapons were a hardship for Bui. Hand held weapons were nothing to him and came almost like second nature.

Bui was ten years old and had already mastered the basic ninjutsi art styles he was taught in three years. This proved to his mother that he was a pure genius. Bui was going to graduate a year early, but he decided against it since he still had trouble with the chakra molding portion of his training. In the next year he had begun training for the next level of ninjutsu art styles he was beginning to learn.

Bui had grown so much since he was a child; had gotten stronger in his ability to mold chakra and his skills in Weaponry were above the bar for a kid his age. He graduated out of the Academy at the age of eleven. He didn’t get a Genin team until the age of thirteen, by this time Bui had mastered two of the many clan ninjutsu arts.

Genin:
Bui kept to himself from day one, his personality now well developed, he loved causing damage to others. The elders of the village had fears that he may of been put in some brainwashing genjutsu when he was kidnapped that made him feel urges to hurt others, but nothing could be proven, it just seemed to become Bui' nature instinct.

In his early years as genin he had been put into a squad with two other male shinobi, he didn't even find out there names for he didn't find it a necessary piece of information to learn, just just called his sensei, sensei. No names needed to be exchanged between him and the others. He was a complete misfit. Bui was not put into the chuunin exams, his sensei kept holding him back until Bui was sixteen and decided to leave the squad and become a solo genin, much to the disapproval from many other leaf shinobi.

Bui was finally granted permission to enter the chuunin exams, being that he became a master of sound jutsu due to his air tubes, he could use them perfectly.

The written test was easy for him, getting in the top five percent of all the genin. It seemed plenty of shinobi had doubted Bui' witty side, for he actually was a strategic and intelligent boy, especially since he had more experience than the other shinobi that were partaking in these years examination.

The chuunin exams were rather easy for Bui, he shined mostly in the tournament round, the final deciding round. His first opponent was a fellow leaf shinobi, Initake Inahara. The boy was no match for Bui, he dodged around almost the whole match, getting no chance to become offensive. Bui' air attacks were too much for the boy to handle as Bui almost killed him, the boy was destroyed in under five minutes and was placed in the hospital for more than a week.

Round two of the exams seemed a little bit more frustrating, not because of a tough opponent, but the fact that his opponent, Shibito Daichi, was a human puppet and therefore almost impossible to kill unless you would pierce his heart. At move one, before Bui knew of Shibito's trait of being a human puppet, he had him at point blank, with a kunai to his throat, telling him that if he refused to withdraw he would slit his throat. But the boy had some speed, just as Bui slashed with his kunai, Shibito had used the replacement jutsu so all Bui slashed was a log of wood. But not long after that, Bui hit the boy was a extremely class and powerful air blast, ripping the boy in half. But being a human puppet he would not bleed to death from such an injury. The boy struggled as Bui continued to hit the boy with offensive maneuvers, Bui managed to even quickly temporarily destroy the boys puppet. But the boy still fought his fate, trying to still win the fight and even getting a hit on Bui. Which just infuriated the blue eyed monster even more as Bui forced him into the wall of the chuunin exam stadium, beginning to crush him. Bui once a entertaining crowd favourite, now was shocking the crowd as he persisted in hurting Shibito, even when the match was one. Bui was ready to make the fatal attack, before the proctor entered the field and demanded Bui to step down, so he did.

Semi Finals, Bui had made it quiet a distance from the kidnapped academy boy. But his secret was only known by few, for he tried to cover up his past. Now his opponent, a fellow leaf shinobi like his previous two victims, Maraku Kitsuki. This boy happened to be a teammate of Bui' last fight, Shibito. So Maraku was out for revenge, bad mouthing Bui from word go. Which amused the monstrous shinobi. The two engaged in a emotional and physical battle as Bui hit an early lead, hitting Maraku with many attacks. After a long dragged out battle, something snapped in Bui' mind. He had no intention to continue fighting, without any word or any other action. He left the stadium, not to see on how the chuunin exams would finish.

Even after his gruesome battles and disrespect to fellow shinobi, the proctors still decided that Bui had the ability that they were looking for and therefore was up ranked to Chuunin.

Chunnin exams:
As a Chuunin, Bui began to branch out in his personality behind her mother's back. They still trained and transfered their emotions through battle, but Bui became better at hiding his feelings, even in battle. His mother knew what he was doing, but she had what she wanted from Bui at the moment, so she left him alone to do what he wanted now and again. He developed a like for women and men, but he preferred women. He started to slowly emerge from his shell due to the fact that he lead his own team. His subordinates liked him well enough, and made it their mission to have him open up completely. As Bui became more and more social, he developed an insight into the human psyche and body language that was helped by him insight into body movement. He saw that the type of people he wanted to be around were straight forward with their movements and speech. They werent shifty like the liars in the village.

He branched out as far as to start dating. Asuka was furious. Not only was he developing bonds with people like he had originally intended for him not to, but Bui was dating a female. He dated a member of his team named Katsumi. They liked each other, and trusted each other, so the relationship was bound to happen some time or another. Katsumi was older than Bui, but Buii was the higher rank and the leader of the team. This fact would typically effect most relationships, but Bui and Katsumi got along perfectly. Asuka demanded that Bui stop seeing this woman and threatened to have her removed from bui's team. Bui was mad at this and challenged his mother to a fight. He wanted everything settled in one go, so he arranged everything perfectly. At age 14, Bui was challenging his mother for leadership of the clan, promotion to jounin, and control of her life. Asuka, confident in her ability to beat his daughter accepted the challenge.

Bui removed his weights that had been stepped up since making chuunin and prepared for the battle. Little did Asuka know, Bui stepped the weights up to Asuka's level a while back and had been training in her own style, using the second part of the Shihōin KKG to enhance its effects. Asuka powered up and ran his chakra through his body and prepared for battle. Bui used his own Angel's Visage and prepared for her new style... Shunko. The battle was fierce. Both were extremely powerful. The battle arena was filled with craters and destroyed surroundings. Both stood looking at each other tired from the battle. Asuka charged with one of the final forms of her style and slid a powerful fist which tipped Bui's shoulder before he could get all the way out of the way. His arm was broken, but her spirit was not she focused some chakra into his hand and prepared to use a move he hadn't really practiced yet. Asuka attacked again and brought her arm in for another lightning fast attack. Bui slid her hand under Asuka's and used his new skill. Reversing the flow of chakra in her hand, Bui stopped all movement of Asuka's hand. He had no idea what was happening. Bui jumped into the air and powered up a final attack. Asuka went to dodge, but some of the debris of the area tripped him up. Bui brought down a super powered heel that would have connected with his lower body if he had been able to move, but instead, it connected with her head. Bui watched as Asuka fell, the white glow in her eyes faded, and the light of life faded as well.

Bui had defeated his mother and accidentally killed her as well. Despite what she had done to Bui, he still loved her. She was his mother. Bui was promoted to Jounin and given leader of the clan, but it all felt hollow to Bui.

Role-Play Sample:
Maraku already at the sparring area had been practicing all morning long with his new weapons. Maraku figure more he practiced the more accurate he would become in his bouts. Maraku was already a fairly decent standing amongst the best in his academy class. Maraku took pride at becoming the best shinobi he could possibly be. He had made a promise to himself that he would never lose to a shinobi without taking them out along with him. For this reason Maraku was a war-hawk and trained massively to become better than anyone that stood on the battle field as he.

Maraku had already broken a sweat from battling a few shadow clones made by his sensei who was watching him train within the arena. However this wasn't nearly enough. Maraku want the fight to be a real fight. He wanted to feel real pain. For this would give Maraku the real joy he has been missing. Maraku was never truly happy unless he could see the pain within a fallen shinobi's eyes as they prepare themselves for their deathbeds. Hmph, This is really getting boring now. I think I'll go look for myself a real fight. Just as Maraku would would say those very words another genin shinobi made their way into the sparring area. Maraku could only hope that this person was looking for a fight along with him.

As the fellow shinobi walked into the sparring area Maraku couldn't help but notice that the guy reminded him of himself. Being that this guy had some of the same feature as Maraku suck as his spiked hair. He also had the same pale look upon his face as if something was missing in his life. His eyes were filled with anger and hatred giving off a dark black scowl as he look around the arena. Besides the fact that this guy was slightly smaller, he was a lot alike Maraku physically. Even thus Maraku didn't care. He just wanted to see the pain in someone eyes as they suffer under his arsonal of weapons.

After scanning his opponent Maraku would then check himself to see if he was all set and ready for battle. Though he did have all of his weapons at the moment he was a little short handed on his explosives. He only had twenty paper ball bombs left. Though he did still have is occasional explosive kunai and explosive tags, he was concerned because the paper balls bombs were his favorite weapon. His fog gun was still attached onto his right arm and it was still in full effect. Maraku's Rose Whip was attached onto his left hip connected to his ninja belt. Maraku then checked his ninja pouch on his left thigh and noticed he still had his fingernail shards and they were prepared to claw through anything that were willing to try them. His Ninja boomerang was connect to his right hip and it was ready for action also. The only thing left was his fan. Maraku reached backward searching for his fan upon his back to feel that the fan was still there. It was then Maraku knew it was time to battle. If not he could at least try to tempt the guy to fight him.

Maraku would then look around the arena and he noticed the he had basically destroyed mostly everything within it. Very few trees were still standing and the ground had craters from the earlier explosive. Maraku thought to himself, Man I really did a number on this place. this place looks like a junkyard now that I'm done using it. What if this guy doesn't want to fight because of the layout here. Even though Maraku would then make way walking upon his opponent.

As Maraku approached his opponent with a straight face and stood before him he made a statement and asked the guy a few questions. Hmph, you look weak. What is your name boy? I notice that you wear a different headband from me to. What village are you from? Why are you here? I hope you don't think a little man like you could possibly get much stronger than you are right now. You'll probably make it to chunnin one day at best. Maraku than let out a small sigh letting his opponent know that he was worried about him not even the least bit. Now don't take this the wrong way but I don't think someone of your caliber can't beat a ninja of mine. Besides that I think that your to scared to find out what your true capabilities are. Why don't fight me right now. Prove to me that your better than what I see with the naked eye. Right now my eye sees nothing more than mere death in you near future. Maraku then stood there staring in the eyes of his opponent waiting for some kind of remark given back toward him.


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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 1:21 am

Done....erase the inbetween stuff so that my app can conect will ya
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 6:37 am

I asked for the clan but Ulkira still hasnt approved...however i did ask adam and he told me to m Ulkira. Ulkira is inactive but I still ant to use this this.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyTue 17 Aug 2010, 7:08 am

- Your approved for jounin so you need to change your rank from genin.

- Also you need to supply an RP sample.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyWed 18 Aug 2010, 6:15 pm

BOOM goes the dynamite
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyWed 18 Aug 2010, 6:24 pm

Todd wrote:
- Your approved for jounin so you need to change your rank from genin.

- Also you need to supply an RP sample.


Please, until you finish your history and RP sample, do not Bump your application.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyWed 18 Aug 2010, 6:40 pm

bump
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyWed 18 Aug 2010, 6:45 pm

Your still missing a Jounin Arc.

Also, your RP sample is not even close to what a Jounin is required to do. It is 305 words long and full of grammatical and spelling errors. Please improve it.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyWed 18 Aug 2010, 6:56 pm

Done, and no it doesn't need a jounin Arc. My character has just been promoted to jounin at the end of this chuunin arc. I'm only 18. I'm creating my story as jounin as I RP.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyWed 18 Aug 2010, 7:09 pm

Hmm...Ok....

Your RP sample is still full of spelling and grammar mistakes, and it is still not long enough. Your applying for Jounin, so you need a really good sample and it has to be 450 words long, or more.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyWed 18 Aug 2010, 7:19 pm

ok this is about as long as i can get them. An average post for me will be 500words. What else do you want from me I'm not the best with grammer. I'm a high school dropout for pete sake. Btw all of these samples are my old work so things will be better now.
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptySat 21 Aug 2010, 3:24 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptySun 22 Aug 2010, 2:58 am

- You don't have medical jutsu as a speciality so you would need to remove your med jutsu.

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Hidden Chakra: Born with a massive chakra capacity compared to that of the legonadry Swordsman Kisame. However Bui isn't able to control this chakra like he would like to. Trying to use this massive amount for too long (4post) has a great strain on bui's body. It will drop bui on his knees rendering him useless for the next post. However the chakra is so great bui becomes resistant to physical damage. Bui wears is armor to nullify and hide this chakra.
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15% chakra increase
A chakra increase like this isn't necessary and not exactly clan related. Kisame had a chakra reserve relative to a tailed beast you and are saying your character is compared to that which is quite unrealistic especially for an A-rank jounin. You either remove it all together, OR tone-down the description (all the legendary Kisame stuff because he is a canon character) and you can achieve this 15% more chakra when you obtain S-rank. Cool?

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Mute
Due to physical or psychological infirmity, the character has an inability to speak, though he may have a limited ability to grunt. Providing the character is not a psychological mute, his speech functions may be restored to a limited degree
This would make this somewhat difficult in a village setting. The fact that you cannot speak and would just grunt? that isn't very efficient for missions and being a jounin within the village.

- With Light you had some difficulty with RP samples. You would need to sustain a general level of good RPing as a jounin, so please keep that in mind. ^^

- The only concerning factor is the approval for the clan? have you got permission yet from Ulkira?
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyFri 27 Aug 2010, 7:34 am

Bumpsy

However Hidden Chakra wasn't ever a clan trait of mine. It was always a character trait so I don't see a real problem with this ability.

I have seen other jounin app's that don't have certain abilities but they are allowed to use them why can't I use med

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https://ultimateshinobi.darkbb.com/character-applications-f11/shitsumei-ibuki-wip-t1802.htm

https://ultimateshinobi.darkbb.com/sunagakure-shinobi-f23/senju-isamu-sunagakure-jounin-t1830.htm

https://ultimateshinobi.darkbb.com/kumogakure-shinobi-f21/hougaku-tensei-kumo-flashf-t1104.htm
These are just the one that were recently approved not counting the old app's. Also if it wasn't for my birthday I would have approved before all of these so please I beg of you don't pull that mumbo jumbo that they were all approved before a rule was set in place. TEEHEE

and I deleted mute also edited Hidden chakra

I believe Ulkira is now inactive
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PostSubject: Re: Kaneo Taru Kaneo Taru EmptyFri 27 Aug 2010, 8:11 am

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I have seen other jounin app's that don't have certain abilities but they are allowed to use them why can't I use med. These are just the one that were recently approved not counting the old app's. Also if it wasn't for my birthday I would have approved before all of these so please I beg of you don't pull that mumbo jumbo that they were all approved before a rule was set in place.
You might want to read this rule HERE it will explain the reason why you cannot have medical jutsu if it isn't your speciality. So in the future I do know what I am talking about. ^^

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Hidden Chakra: Born with a massive chakra capacity. However Bui isn't able to control this chakra like he would like to. Trying to use this massive amount for too long (5post) has a great strain on bui's body. It will drop bui on his knees rendering him useless for the 2 next post. However the chakra is so great bui becomes resistant to physical damage. Bui wears is armor to nullify and hide this chakra.
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15% chakra increase
This still does not do. Using your chakra capacity for 5 posts doesn't make sense in the context of role-playing. You are using your chakra reserve constantly while performing jutsu, thus, it is hard to measure if you are using it to your capacity and whether it is going for 5 posts or more, so please remove that. Place that it can only be unlocked when obtaining S-rank (with the new ranking system that will be introduced it is very achievable for you). Also, immune to physical damage? this is a big no no so please remove that. Physical damage to me isn't taijutsu it is physical form thus it incorporates ninjutsu, damage that targets your body physically. There is hardly a relationship between a larger chakra capacity and immunity to physical attacks so please remove that.

- Yes it does seem he is inactive at the moment. There has been debate among the site about using a clan from a now inactive member of the site. It is an issue being debated at the moment. Try to get in contact with him if you can. ^^
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