Rigid's New Pole

Age : 29 Posts : 463

Name: Six
Quantity: 1
Rank: B
Appearance:

Six is just a double-ended Glaive. The blades have a nice pattern on them which makes Six look beautiful. The pole in the middle is very hard break due to the material that it is made from, the material that is used is mostly used for katana's. The material can get chipped and such from it being used to block things, also the material can be broken by a chakra infused weapon. Also there is a strong chakra foam is wrapped around the whole pole to act as a grip aswell ,which allows the chakra to go in but not come out so it doesnt back fire on Rigid. The foam was made by a shinobi with the Raiton element himself, he made this due to the problem that he would get shocked by his own element while in battle, which he did not want to do. So he made this foam from loads of different material, this would allow the Raiton element to go in with out it coming back out, hitting the user. The foam has two layers, the top layer which is on the outside is a foam which allows the element chakra to be absorbed and the second layer is a foam which repels the element chakra. Also the foam is all over the middle bit of the weapon, this is the little metal rod which holds the two blades on it.
Special Abilities/Characteristics: Rigid can put his element of Raiton into the blades. This forms little electric lines flashing on them. Also the electricity will damage who ever it hurts more then just a normal chakra weapon. Also where ever the blade hits and cuts, the electricity gets into the blood stream and it makes that limb which the blade cut un-usable for one post, what causes this is the electric hits one never in that limb and then from there on it goes through the entire nervous system which is in that certain limb.
Origin: Rigid made this himself with different material from different weapons. He got the two blades from two knives and he got the pole from a pike pole which he retrieved from a dead enemy. Rigid then put his chakra into the weapon. He calls it six due to it being the sixth weapon he has got.

Age : 30 Posts : 1236

You can most likely tone this weapon down to a B rank due to its simplicity.

However, I'd like to know what the material of the pole is made from, as it is near-indestructible and what form of insulation does it possess so that YOUR character doesn't get electrocuted whilst using it. A bit more detail would be nicer and how exactly channeling your electricity through 'Six' will affect someone's 'limb' if you strike them. Does it attack the nerve endings, or is there some form of other work; need to specify.

Do that and it should look good.

Age : 29 Posts : 463

Done I think

Age : 30 Posts : 1236

Better. But not quite. Why can't you be electrocuted when you channel electricity through 'Six'. There needs to be some form of insulation required so you don't get hurt by it. Please specify, other then that a Katana is made from "Tamahagane" which consists of combinations of hard, high carbon steel and tough, low carbon steel. Just for your information, you may or may not want to add that.

Get those done and it should be good. Hopefully.

Age : 29 Posts : 463

Done ;P

Age : 30 Posts : 1236

Sigh. Define and elaborate more on this chakra foam for me dude. How does it let electricity travel only one way. Youre going to have to tell us a bit more as to where this foam is positioned and what not. Just put more detail and description into it please. Very Happy

Then we'll see how we go.

Age : 29 Posts : 463

Age : 30 Posts : 1236

Looks good. I don't want to be a pain but could you please go through, correct your grammar and make it sound more free-flowing; it seems highly distorted and a pain to read. Structure your sentences properly and I'll approve. ;D

Age : 29 Posts : 463

Sigh, I think I have done it now.

Age : 29 Posts : 463

24 hour bump

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

Ok, to summarize:

- Dual Bladed Halbred
- Shaft made of metal equivalent to Katana metal
- Special foam throughout the entire weapon.
- Said foam allows chakra to go into the weapon, causing it to be chakra infused, but not come back and strike at the user.

Now, looking at that,the problem I see is if you infuse the weapon with lightning based chakra from the outside, because you stated the foam is inside, you would shock yourself before the chakra went into the foam. So what I would do is have the foam surround the shaft as a type of grip to prevent this entire situation. When you do that, you can apply chakra to the weapon through the foam and cause the bladed edges to gain lightning affinity. Of course thats all an example. I dont rememeber if you actually do have Raiton as an element or not.

Age : 29 Posts : 463

Edited

Age : 31 Posts : 8965

This is a double-ended Glaive by the way. Smile

Might wanna edit that in through it, as it's not just a pole.

Age : 29 Posts : 463

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Subject: Re: Rigid's New Pole Mon 17 Jan 2011, 8:26 am

Archived due to inactivity.