Yasutora, Yuketsu (Kumogakure Genin)

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Basic Information:

Name:
Yasutora, Yuketsu
Secondary Title:
"Hot Lea"
Age:
14
Gender:
Female
Physical Appearance:

Yasutora, Yuketsu (Kumogakure Genin) ANBU-Jun

Yuketsu is a 5'2 tall young lady who has a sightly muscular body from working out a lot, with signs of curves from her chest as well body. She has sightly smaller hands than feet but that's because she is tightly gripping them together a lot, sometimes blisters from gripping them too much can be seen on them. She has a roundish face that goes down into a sightly pointed chin which makes her seem to look like she is a serious lady. Her eyebrows are usually raise up and is curl downwards usually on her face which makes her bluish color eyes that are round pop out even more. She has long purple hair that comes down over her shoulders.

Her hair is usually straighten with a bit of it being up in a small gathering with a red ribbon tie around it. This red ribbon is a luckily one too her, given too her by her mother so she usually tries to wear it each day. Her general outfit she usually wears under her cloak is a black spaghetti tank top with a black with a red rose on it over neath of it. She wears a black skirt with this strange top that she likes she wear and has on white tights with it. She wears a pair of her favorite black clogs with her outfit.

But usually, she will wear a white and red kimono into villages if she is send on any spying missions by her grouping. This will be so she wouldn't attract much attention too herself, she likes to disguise herself as much as possibly and puts her hair up in a pony tail when she goes into town leaving her red ribbon off. Long fitted white kimono with a red ruffles that is shown from the bottom of the dress. Her dress is seen to have a few black belt straps seen wrap around her waist.

She wears a pretty red wide sash ribbon around her stomach that gives her dress some style that she likes to wear of fashion as well some of her white dress places has faded red roses that could be seen. She has a black choke collar that hangs around her neck, it is use for keeping her calm so she doesn't go out on a rage. Her feet stays barefoot due to her liking the feel of the ground underneath her feet.

Personality:
Yuketsu is something of an enigma whose history and personality are only hinted threw her actions and quirks of her everyday life. An anarchist revolutionary and classical Byronic hero, well-versed in the arts of medicine, subterfuge, robotics, and others; she also has a vast literary, cultural and philosophical intelligence. Though she is vastly intelligent in these subjects, she is very uniquely quiet person that sees to never talk to anyone. At first glance at her she will appear to be nothing less but a clam, quiet person that rather be left alone. But, once you get to talk to her. She seems to become some what of a chatter box of knowledge and a dictionary of explaining on how everything works in the world.

She still terribly shy around the opposite sex, as his throat will dry up and her words seem to begin to get twisted up saying the opposite of what she truly means. Being calm and collective under any situation, Yuketsu has the knack of getting herself involved in every single possible situation of trouble out their you can think of. Even if she is standing in a crowd of people, trouble would be able to pin point her out and challenge her to a fight. Being somewhat of a kind caring person she won't help out anyone no matter the situation or cost, she has somewhat of a dark side that has never be seen yet by anyone.

Being a Hard working individual that wishes to be stronger in everything she does, but not in only physical strength but mental to. Yuketsu has gotten herself a obsession of always having a book in her hand's reading it every chance she gets, if she is unable to at least read his book once a day. She will snap, and go into a berserk furry of rage n' anger and will be un-approachable for the rest of the day. This is because of his OCD of always reading books, she is able to read six books previous book she had read and re-read them again subconsciously again the same time she reads another book in her hands.

It is cause of this gift she is able to quickly pick up things and take quick note of how they work, since her mind works at a unbelievable rate. Her ability has advance so much that she is able to fight in a combat situation and be able to read five books at the same time and still be able to perform actions, that are equivalent of an Olympic-level gymnast performing a gold medal routine while simultaneously beating four chess computers.

Being quite resourceful Yuketsu can use any form of item or information to her own advantage in any situation. Having a lot of good qualities, she also has a lot of bad qualities that may lead her to her downfall in the near future, if she is not careful on how she controls her emotions. Having the same level of stubbornness that her mother had, she will never accept defeat or acknowledge the fact that what ever she does will never have the impact he wants it to have.

Being deprived of any kind of human relationship, Yuketsu might grow a bit jealous of people from either their success, or relationship. It's cause of that she rather spend time to herself then bother with being with people to feel that emotion and having it ripped out of her when something goes astray. When she becomes enrage and angry she can go on a path of destruction destroying everything she hates and everything she loves to ash.

Catch Phrase:
"Too bad for you I didn't read my books today."

Clan:
https://ultimateshinobi.darkbb.com/t2971-yasutora-clan-complete

Rank Information:

Rank:
Genin
Village Affiliation:
Kumogakure

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main: Taijutsu
Sub: Ninjutsu
Elemental Affinity:
Main: N/A
Sub: N/A
Special Characteristics:
Sex Appeal: Yuketsu has this natural sexy appeal about herself that the opposite sex just can't seem to deny. Males usually fight and lust over her. Most will do anything just to get a kiss from her.

Brave: She is a very brave girl, never cowardly and always will stand up to a fight. She will do anything dangerous and never consider the risks of what it might do to her or end her life shorter than she fears.

Born Leader:
His personality brings him to be a decisive leader. He has solid goals and can quickly and accurately formulate strategies and plans to achieve a successful mission. In the case of disorganization, he can be counted on to take the wheel

Tank:
Yuketsu is a natural tank. Being a natural in the Taijutsu art Yuketsu's body is trained to it's best abilities to withstand damages of all sorts. Her endurance is about 25% more than shinobi or her rank.

Speed:
Despite Yuketsu's age she is very quick and lethal in his physial motions. Her speed is unmatched to those of his level and she can be a blur to the untrained eye. Threw vigorous training and tactical teaching his movements have become fluent and sharp. He can accelerate his run speed at a shorter pace then most people and at a greater ease. This by no means makes him a 'speed demon' but he is light on his feet. 20% average speed increase of Yuketsu's rank.

Skill Information:
Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.

Jutsu Template:
Academy Jutsu

Quote :: Name: Transformation Jutsu
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The Transformation Jutsu allows the user to assume the appearance of another person, animal, or object. This is one of the basic jutsu taught at the Konoha Ninja Academy. Fundamentally, all ninja know this jutsu. The transformation jutsu is considered to be among the more difficult E-ranked techniques, since it requires constant emission of chakra while mentally maintaining the form. On top of that, the user would be, most likely, interacting with the environment. This puts much mental strain on the inexperienced ninja.

Name: Clone Jutsu
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The Clone Jutsu creates intangible copies of the user. The clones are simply illusions and will dissipate when they come into contact with something. The illusions can be seen through by the Byakugan and the Sharingan. A person with normal eyes can also distinguish the clones from the original, since the clones will not disrupt the area around themselves with their movement (won't kick up dust, crush grass, etc.).

Name: Substitution Jutsu
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The Substitution Jutsu lets the user quickly switch places with another nearby object, such as a plant (normally a section of a log), an animal, or even another person within reach, leaving the opponent open to a counter-attack. Explosive tags can be attached to the replacement for an added surprise. Fundamentally, all ninja know this technique.

Name: Rope Escaping Jutsu
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The Rope Escaping Jutsu is a basic jutsu taught at the Konoha Ninja Academy. This jutsu allows a ninja to free himself if they have been tied up.

Name: Shadow Stealth Jutsu
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The Shadow Stealth Jutsu is the technique ninjas use to follow their targets covertly. The manner in which the ninja shadows their target can differ, from the basic hiding under a nearby object, to using a jutsu to turn oneself invisible. The skill and length in which one can stay hidden varies by rank and ability.

Name: Explosive Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The user will activate an explosion tag. Normally, the tag will be placed by them, so they know where it is and can easily activate it.

Name: Genjutsu Release (Kai)
Rank: E-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Genjutsu Release is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handsigns, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed handsigns, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.

Name: Body Flicker Jutsu
Rank: E-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This jutsu is a high-speed movement technique, allowing a ninja to move short to long distances at an almost untraceable speed. To an observer, it appears as if the user has teleported. A puff of smoke is occasionally used to disguise the user's movements. It is accomplished by using chakra to temporarily boost the user's reflexes. The amount of chakra required depends on the overall distance between the user and their intended destination.

Name: Tree Climbing Jutsu
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The Tree Climbing Jutsu serves a dual purpose. Taking part in the Tree Climbing Training helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed.

Name: Water Surface Walking Jutsu
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: A variation of the Tree Climbing Jutsu, the Water Surface Walking Jutsu allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water.

Clan Jutsu:

Quote :: Name: Chakra Blast
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Range: Close-Mid-Range
Description: This is the first techniques created by the Yasutora. Though it needs to be charged for a minimum of 3 seconds it is relatively powerful. This jutsu is a full chakra blast that has equal power of 10 direct punches to the chest. It's destructive power ranges out to damaging everything with 3 meters of the focal point of this attack. This jutsu can be used with body flicker technique.

Name: Chakra Flare
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Range: Close-Mid Range
Description: The user of this technique puts his hands over the face and generates a powerful flash of light that temporarily blinds anyone whose eyes come in contact with it. This jutsu leaves the opponent blind for 2 post.

Weapon Template:

Quote :

Name: Stored Senbon
Quantity: 15
Rank: D
Appearance:

Special Abilities/Characteristics: These senbon are stored in the body of Yuketsu. These senbon aren't special by any means. They are just kept within the stomach as a safe place and less baggage to carry.
Origin: These are just average senbon bought from your daily merchant. The poison from these are created by Yuketsu himself and lightly covered over each senbon.

Quote :

Name: Alienation Shiruken [Mexican Killer]
Quantity: 3
Rank: D
Appearance:

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Special Abilities/Characteristics: The is a family shikuren pass down through the generations. It has no more ability than a a boomerang otherwise a regular shiruken. Just a family item.
Origin: Created by her great ancestor, this weapon was passed through the generations and given to her by her father just before he died.

Quote :

Name: Fathers Mask
Quantity: 1
Rank: C
Appearance:

Special Abilities/Characteristics: A mask put on over the face to protect the wearer from inhaling "airborne pollutants" and toxic gases. The mask forms a sealed cover over the nose, mouth, eyes, and other vulnerable soft tissues of the face. Filters out up to C-Ranked air pollutants and gases. Also provides as a good face protector. Moderately Durable.
Origin: This mask is the last memory of her father. Yuketsu's father is a fallen member of the TSOKR for Kumogakure. Though he was a great shinobi Kekeusti didn't like the way some of the rules of the village were established. He was a rebel and sometime through the night Kekeusti would change uniform and and wear a mask to punish those that he felt needed. That being criminals, kid thugs or elders laws that rip off the poor. (Steals from the rich and give to the poor.) By doing this Kekeusti earned the title of "The Mist of Kumogakure" After his death during a suicide mission Kekeusti had a pre-made letter to his family revealing his secret to the ninja world.

Item Template:

Quote :: Name: Summoning Contract
Rank: N/A
Type: Other
Natural Abilities: This is a contract to summoning the snake species. Very popular within the clan of the Yasutora the snakes work as one to defeat their opponents and accomplish many task.

Background Information

History:
Childhood:
When Yuketsu was born into the house of the clan leader ( his father, Keketsu Sr. a jounin TTSORK) he was expected to be the best shinobi of the clan because he was thought to take the lead of the clan when his father had passed. When she was was just a baby years old her father put a seal on her stomach bonding her with snakes. He would do such a thing due to the fact he wanted the laws of the land in which he himself tried to change to be for the better. By sealing the snake contract within Yuketsu, Keketsu was installing his will into his only begotten daughter hoping that she would make a change to the ninja world. When Yuketsu became the tender age of (3) Keketsu put he very first kunai into her hand and made her and her elder cousin Torein fight. He also said that he would not call the battle until one has wounded the other so they can not continue or one has been killed. Yuketsu had never fought anyone before and when her cousin attack her she tried to run, but all the doors in the room had been locked. Yuketsu had no choice to but to defend herself. The battle only lasted 3 minutes and as Yuketsu removed the kunai from her cousin her mind and heart was broken as all of the clan members were. From that moment onward her whole life was about the training of the Shinobi arts. Her father taught him of observing the enemy, following their movements and memorizing their techniques, as well as focusing his chakra to extraordinary heights in the heats of battle. She also learned to use Ijutsu at exceptional heights for someone of her age. She was also put in rooms for long periods of time with only scrolls of shinobi knowledge and a fighting dummy. She was then told she could only leave when she could be tested on the scrolls and get every question right and if the dummy was so damaged from over use it could not be repaired. When she was 6 years old she was put into the Ninja Academy and told that she must be the best of all the students.

Academy Student Arc:
When Yuketsu first entered the academy she was thought to be a great kid, But when the students tried to approach her they where turned away by her impressive ability. All the other students shunned her and they feared her as well. To this Yuketsu showed no interest. She was given her mission, to learn all she could and to be the best the other kids did not matter to her and she would not fool them into thinking other wise except if it helped in becoming stronger than them. During practice the teacher had to spar and train with her seeing as all the other students refused and also because she was to aggressive to the students she did spar with and when they would finish the student would have many wounds to show for it. Yuketsu was almost kicked from the Academy because of this. Not because her strength would be later needed by the village. The teachers did not want to be the ones to tell him and her Father he could not attend the classes. When she graduated she was first in her class in Weaponry and Medical arts. But she was second in the arts of ninjutsu and Scholar academics. When she was given the tittle genin her father presented her with his mask which he had made plans on doing anyways but used her graduation as a cover up.

Genin Arc:
As a genin Yuketsu was under the great training of his fellow clan members as well as his own personal training he had three times a week. Although he had much to learn to reach his father's expectation of him and to be the clan leader, he shrived towards becoming stronger still and to not let anyone tell him any different. He would not end his desire to become the best. This sort of though lead him into becoming a key member of the Jikkenshai clan, beyond being just the Jikkensha heir. Yuketsu, even though being thirteen, showed he had an unnatural knack for interrogation, mainly through the means of torture. He seemed to know exactly what hurt the most, and how to make the pain feel like it will never... ever... end.

This ability lead him into becoming the last force in the Jikkensha's trials to get information from those they wanted. Yuketsu wasn't the person that anyone wanted to see a man go too, the teenage shinobi had a mind that blocked out anything he did during his sessions with his victims, something that meant he had no remorse, no guilt, not any shred of a conscious at all. He was simply a beast with a thirst for pain and screams. Yuketsu's victims usually ended up dead, torn to pieces and hacked a part bit by bit in his locked cell. The clean up crew eventually refused to enter the chamber, the blood just stained the walls to a point where it seemed even painting over would do anything for it.

This sadistic type of ability in the career of science meant the other interrogators began to be frightened of the shinobi, despite being a genin, Yuketsu was a blood demon in his torture chamber. This eventually gave the genin a small name among the people he worked with. The "Mad Scientist", this named slowly leaked out into the populace, and the stories along with it caused many nightmares.

Yuketsu seemed to keep his superior attitude for some time until - for awhile at least - it changed. Yuketsu met a fellow shinobi out in the village. Yuketsu, who caused a stir of things he had never truly felt before. The genin started to feel the need to impress someone other then his father. Felt a want of attention by someone besides himself. This changed Yuketsu in a way that he at the time did not first understand, but he would later on.

Upon the chuunin exams, Yuketsu did much worse then he expected he would have. The first round stopped as his time ran out, a rather unfortunate happening, though he somehow scraped by with some luck on his own part. This was the end of his lucky streak it seemed, as things would get much harder from then on out. The battle rounds sent hardships Yuketsu's way, as he fought a Konoha-nin that didn't seem to want to stay down. Kaito almost caused the end of Yuketsu, though the battle took its end as his opponent couldn't seem to hold on with all his blood drained from his body.

Yuketsu took a plunge in the next battle though, his wounds from his match against Kaito meant his downfall, and the genin took his defeat. Though, Yuketsu showed control and ability that it seemed the proctors did not find in anyone else. Yuketsu managed to scrap by in the exams, and took the title of Chuunin by mere spunk. Yuketsu didn't really like he way he got promoted therefor promising to be better prepared for the next time.

Role-Play Sample:

Quote :: Maraku was strolling along himself near the borders of Kiri. He was a few miles outside the Suna, where anything goes. He was getting tired of all of the stupid jokes, immaturity and drunken fools in there, so he decided to go for a walk to get all of the immaturity off his mind. His medium-length white hair fell onto his face in the cool breeze as the wind blew on the mildly cool day. His face was mostly hidden behind a dark blue make the he kept on for a secret idenity. The only thing shown was his dark green eyes and his hair dyed white. He had a forehead protector with the symbol of konoha the land land of great ninja. A pouch full of shinobi tools strapped around his right thigh. With a bodysuit made of pure rubber including shoes and all. He also wielded a blade of some sort ready for battle at all times. Thinking to himself now wasn't the time for a fight, Maraku headed his way toward the Kiri not to far away from the place he was standing.

Finally, somewhere where I can feel at peace and rest, he thought to himself. Maraku was born in Kirigakure, and hated the rain and water very much. He disliked how the water always kept flowing onward, no matter what disturbs it. You can throw a rock into a river, yet it keeps moving on. He just smiled as he saw the lake through the clearing of the trees. He walked down to the lake, and looked around the shore. He saw no one else hear at the moment, so he decided to jump onto the lake. He used the Academy Rank Jutsu to walk on the water just by giving out a small amount of chakra. He walked until he was in the very middle of the lake, which was about fifty meters or so. He smiled again, embracing the cool water breeze. He stood there, in a meditation-like trance, hoping to find peace in here.

Well it's quite quiet here I guess I'll just sit here and soak in the sun for a while. It was little hot but not to hot, perfect setting for a good fight. Maraku at the moment wasn't actually interested in fight. He was trying to look for peace. Mearly tired after taking out a few Suna's ninja on his well long enough walk Maraku suddenly had a thought. Hmm, Maybe I'll take on just one more person for the day. I may as well, It would be good for my training. Maraku started his walk back toward Kiri in hopes to find someone else willing to temp him for another fight. As he walked he seem to have a certain feeling that he was being watched. Stopping to secure his surroundings and noticed that the ninja was probably a genin or maybe a chunnin because of his lack of stealth. Come out you. Be a man, face me if u dare to meet defeated.

It was a while before Maraku got an actual reply to his threat. So in the time between his opponent on coming Mraku decided to take a rest within a cave not to far away from his current setting. Inside this cave was a wetness that no one could describe. It had a an eerie feeling as if so many had passed in it before. Not the place where Maraku actually wanted to stay but it would have to do because he was so far away from home. Maraku then stretched his arms prepared for a good rest. Even before so he checked his gear just once more to see if he had all of his ninja tools with him. Hmmm, Kunai, puppet scroll, shikuren, paper bombs, scapel, needles, thread,and sword all checked. I gues I can finally lay down now for a nap.

At this time it was just getting dark out. Their was still just enough daylight out to see everything that was needed to be seen. Maraku checked his surroundings to make sure their were no followers because of slight mishaps that happened earlier that day. Also for this Maraku decided to set up a few paper bombs attached to ninja wire onto a few trees of his surroundings. This way if anyone enters they will most likely be detected and he would be alarmed before his enemy had gotten to close. He then strapped a line of kunai at the top of the cave and a trip wire at the bottom in case of a sneak attack within the cave. Then Maraku walked over to a lonely rock at the edge of the cavern and laid there between the cave and the tress just outside. Hmph, I bet no one will sneak up on me now. If they do I am sure to capture them and make them pay for trying anything stupid.

Age : 26 Posts : 239

You still need a written description of your appearance.

Quote :: Belly Storage: Yuketsu can expand her stomach and throat, allowing for storage space for a few small items, by placing a shield of chakra around them they do not corrode. To release the items, she only as to create a handseal and then simply regurgitate them.

This sounds like the Akimichi Clan's Multi Size Technique, so I don't think so.

Quote :: Name: Steroids Serum
Rank: C
Type: Supplement
Natural Abilities: These are supplement pills that Yuketsu carry around. These pill further enhance the users body giving it the ability to perform at a greater level than a normal shinobi. This pill slightly increase the speed, strength and durability of the user.
*This steroid has to be taken 1 full post ahead of time before it works and only works for the duration of 3 post. If beaten either before or after the 4 post requirement these effects will not take place.
Speed increase: 25%
]Strength increase: 25%
Durability: This pill grants the user one last breath. With this one last breath Yuketsu makes his final move before he dies or faints.

Nope. This is sounds just like the Soldier Pill, which is a banned item. I understand that you die, but still, its too similar.

Quote :: Special Abilities/Characteristics: A mask put on over the face to protect the wearer from inhaling "airborne pollutants" and toxic gases. The mask forms a sealed cover over the nose, mouth, eyes, and other vulnerable soft tissues of the face. Filters out air pollutants and gases. Also provides as a good face protector. Moderately Durable.

If the eyes are sealed, how can you see? And I don't think a C-Rank mask should be able to block a higher ranked poison. Say that it can at least null the affect that is to take place.

Quote :: Name: Poison Senbon
Quantity: 25
Rank: D
Appearance:
Special Abilities/Characteristics: These senbon are all poison dipped in chakra. This poison is a low rank chakra absorber. Each senbon that lands target on the opponent will retract E-Ranked chakra from the opponent.
Origin: These are just average senbon bought from your daily merchant. The poison from these are created by Yuketsu himself and lightly covered over each senbon.

This is a chakra eating weapon, which is banned. Please remove.

Quote :: Name: Far sight
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: He will first close his eyes then reopen them. Once reopened she can see twice as far as before and can even make out small details in wider ranges. This is used to see father away and tell who or what is coming before it gets there.

How exactly does he do this? I can figure out why, but you should still state it, and how much chakra it takes each post to keep it up.

Quote :: Name: Chakra pool
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: A thick puddle of chakra will leak from his body but will not be seen from any one else. It will rest at her feet ten feet from her body. This pool is used in defense against close range attackers. When someone touches to pool they will become stuck and unable to move their feet or legs. As they are stuck the pool will begin to drain their chakra and give it to Yuketsu.

How do you get chakra thats being drained from them? And why can't anyone else see it?

Quote :: Name: Healing Serum
Rank: C
Type: Medicine
Natural Abilities: This is a low leveled healing serum in which Yuketsu made himself. This serum takes on the healing genin itself and speed up the process slightly. Thus healing the user in an adequate amount of time.
*This serum can heal all ranks injury's. The more deadly the wound the longer the serum takes.
S-Ranked injury = 8 post to heal: If not Dead
A-Ranked injury = 6 post heal: If not Dead:
B-Ranked injury = 4 post heal: If not Dead:
C-Ranked injury = 2 post heal: If not Dead:

I will allow this to heal up to C-Rank. A C-Rank serum is not gonna be able to heal a S-Rank injury just like that.

Quote :: Name: Sen'eijashu [Hidden Shadow Snake Hands]
Type: Medical
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: Yuketsu performs a couple of handseals which form a bunch of hidden snakes around his wrist which can then be released, usually after a punching motion. The snakes are used primarily to attack from a close to mid (1meter) distance and, being snakes, can inflict multiple poisonous wounds on the victim's body or hold them in place. These sankes also strike in all directions and 50% faster than the users throwing the punch. The Snake poison inhibits cholinesterase to make the prey lose muscle control for 2 posts.

You are gonna need a separate thing for Snake Summons, you can't just magically make Snakes come out of you without a contract.

Do you have permission for use of this clan?

Age : 32 Posts : 95

Quote :: Belly Storage: Yuketsu can expand her stomach and throat, allowing for storage space for a few small items, by placing a shield of chakra around them they do not corrode. To release the items, she only as to create a handseal and then simply regurgitate them.

I'd like to quote this is a characteristic of a snake in which my is based around and has nothing to do with the Akimichi clan.
* I did however forget to add my snake summoning contract. For it is added now.

Quote :: Name: Steroids Serum
Rank: C
Type: Supplement
Natural Abilities: These are supplement pills that Yuketsu carry around. These pill further enhance the users body giving it the ability to perform at a greater level than a normal shinobi. This pill slightly increase the speed, strength and durability of the user.
*This steroid has to be taken 1 full post ahead of time before it works and only works for the duration of 3 post. If beaten either before or after the 4 post requirement these effects will not take place.
Speed increase: 25%
]Strength increase: 25%
Durability: This pill grants the user one last breath. With this one last breath Yuketsu makes his final move before he dies or faints.

Quote :: Name: Healing Serum
Rank: C
Type: Medicine
Natural Abilities: This is a low leveled healing serum in which Yuketsu made himself. This serum takes on the healing genin itself and speed up the process slightly. Thus healing the user in an adequate amount of time.
*This serum can heal all ranks injury's. The more deadly the wound the longer the serum takes.
S-Ranked injury = 8 post to heal: If not Dead
A-Ranked injury = 6 post heal: If not Dead:
B-Ranked injury = 4 post heal: If not Dead:
C-Ranked injury = 2 post heal: If not Dead:

Ok, may I please let you know that these have been approved here before. I agree with the S-Ranked thing so I erased that part.
*Approved as in they have been seen and agreed upon. Not as is my character was approved.

Quote :: Special Abilities/Characteristics: A mask put on over the face to protect the wearer from inhaling "airborne pollutants" and toxic gases. The mask forms a sealed cover over the nose, mouth, eyes, and other vulnerable soft tissues of the face. Filters out air pollutants and gases. Also provides as a good face protector. Moderately Durable.

All Gas Mask have sealed eyes. However from the inside their is visibility. Works kinda the same as an interrogation mirror.
*I forgot to add that it only block up to C-Rank so I added that part.

Quote :: Name: Poison Senbon
Quantity: 25
Rank: D
Appearance:
Special Abilities/Characteristics: These senbon are all poison dipped in chakra. This poison is a low rank chakra absorber. Each senbon that lands target on the opponent will retract E-Ranked chakra from the opponent.
Origin: These are just average senbon bought from your daily merchant. The poison from these are created by Yuketsu himself and lightly covered over each senbon

Your right about this but however if you read carefully I never said the senbon were poison. The are actually dipped in a poison of my creation. Not actually poison on the own. However I did edit. YOU DID MAKE ME REALIZE I WORDED THIS ALL WRONG.
*Just a question. (Even if I do make these regular senbon. What will stop me from dipping them in poison just before a battle?)

Quote :: Name: Far sight
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: He will first close his eyes then reopen them. Once reopened she can see twice as far as before and can even make out small details in wider ranges. This is used to see father away and tell who or what is coming before it gets there.

Edited

Quote :: Name: Chakra pool
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: A thick puddle of chakra will leak from his body but will not be seen from any one else. It will rest at her feet ten feet from her body. This pool is used in defense against close range attackers. When someone touches to pool they will become stuck and unable to move their feet or legs. As they are stuck the pool will begin to drain their chakra and give it to Yuketsu.

Erased

Quote :: Name: Sen'eijashu [Hidden Shadow Snake Hands]
Type: Medical
Rank: C
Element: N/A
Description: Yuketsu performs a couple of handseals which form a bunch of hidden snakes around his wrist which can then be released, usually after a punching motion. The snakes are used primarily to attack from a close to mid (1meter) distance and, being snakes, can inflict multiple poisonous wounds on the victim's body or hold them in place. These sankes also strike in all directions and 50% faster than the users throwing the punch. The Snake poison inhibits cholinesterase to make the prey lose muscle control for 2 posts.

Summoning contract added

Quote :: Do you have permission for use of this clan?

Yes

Age : 26 Posts : 239

Quote :: Ok, may I please let you know that these have been approved here before. I agree with the S-Ranked thing so I erased that part.
*Approved as in they have been seen and agreed upon. Not as is my character was approved.

It doesn't matter if they were previously approved. Well, it does, but I'm checking your app and I have just as much authority as any other moderator. I would like the steroid serum removed because it is too alike to that of the soldier pill.

Posts : 2032

Also increase your age from 11 to at least 14.

- Those are not Kurotsuki Clan technique's? o.o. I am betting you are using poison based technique's from another clan you have made and just tried to adapt them to this character, yes? They do not fit with the clans style at all, have you even read the clan? The clan has stated that it has a high requirement level for entry. If you don't even follow the clan properly you wont be allowed in it sorry.

Age : 32 Posts : 95

I have am a member of your clan so therefore I thought your clan techniques were an automatic.

The techniques I have are my character own techniques..no kkg included ...they are jus medical jutsud

added the clan jutsu to the list....though the others were my characters person jutsu

Subject: Re: Yasutora, Yuketsu (Kumogakure Genin) Mon 27 Dec 2010, 1:29 pm

I'd like to see the appearance description expanded upon. Does your character wear different clothing depending on the occasion? i.e when expecting battle, formal occasions etc. Also, does your character have any physically distinguishing features? If so, what are they and is there a story behind how it got there? Also consider changing the part about having 'the palest skin' of anyone in Kumogakure. Instead say he has 'exceptionally pale skin' or something similar to avoid any kind of conflict over that sort of thing

Age : 32 Posts : 95

Finished

Subject: Re: Yasutora, Yuketsu (Kumogakure Genin) Wed 29 Dec 2010, 4:20 am

Quote :: Name: Nan Kaizou
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Nan Kaizou is a jutsu that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent. Yuketsu can extend his limbs as long as 2x his body length. This jutsu will last 4 post and then nullifies making the body back into normal. It also has an E-Ranked chakra usage per post.

This jutsu requires a body modification which your character doesn't have so you'll either have to remove it.

Age : 36 Posts : 1004

Quote :: Name: Nan Kaizou
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Nan Kaizou is a jutsu that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent. Yuketsu can extend his limbs as long as 2x his body length. This jutsu will last 4 post and then nullifies making the body back into normal. It also has an E-Ranked chakra usage per post.

Sorry but I took that off of my old app.... it's original creation has nothing to do with body modification....I Erased it though.

Quote :: Name: Poison Senbon
Quantity: 25
Rank: D
Appearance:
Special Abilities/Characteristics: These senbon are all poison dipped in a special venom made by Yuketsu. This poison is a low rank chakra absorber. Each senbon that lands target on the opponent will absord a source of E-Ranked chakra from the opponent rendering the chakra useless in battle.
Origin: These are just average senbon bought from your daily merchant. The poison from these are created by Yuketsu himself and lightly covered over each senbon.

Removed the absorption part

Also, those clan techniques are suppose to stay there due to my knowledge. Not that i can use them but seeing that they come with the clan I believe. However I erased those too.

Age : 31 Posts : 8965

-Chakra Absorption Technique is B-ranked, please remove.

-Alienation Shiruken, remove this. Your description has things most C-ranked weapons cannot do (ie, cut through hard woods like butter) Remove it.

-Belly Sealing, needs to be better described.

-Where is your contract with snakes?

-You sneak in mentions about overpowered poisons here and there but don't show the poisons anywhere. List all poisons or remove all mentions of poisons.

-Item Sealing; even this is a basic Fuuinjutsu, remove.

-Explosive Substitute Technique, way to similar to Shadow Clone Super Explosion, remove.

-Sex Appeal Characteristic, this WILL NOT allow you to godmod over male characters, NPC's are partially acceptable.

-ANBU Mask, property of Konoha, not a Genin. Remove.

-Far Sight, denied. Remove.

I think I was so strict because you didn't add a roleplaying sample, though you are well aware of the rules here. Be sure to address all my points as well as Shinji's, if you don't I'll assume your being sneaky again and punish your application. You need to note all poisons for poisons release, and I suggest you read the rules about them before you do so.

Age : 32 Posts : 95

Quote :: -Chakra Absorption Technique is B-ranked, please remove.

Removed

Quote :: -Alienation Shiruken, remove this. Your description has things most C-ranked weapons cannot do (ie, cut through hard woods like butter) Remove it.

Didn't erase but I did edit making them simple shiruken.

Quote :: -Belly Sealing, needs to be better described.

I don't have belling sealing but I do have a belly storage what do you mean

Quote :: -Where is your contract with snakes?

Added

Quote :: -You sneak in mentions about overpowered poisons here and there but don't show the poisons anywhere. List all poisons or remove all mentions of poisons.

Don't understand you because everything here is made up jutsu created by my charry. No weapon or item has poison (anymore). No KKG included, just a secret technique created by her.

Quote :: -Item Sealing; even this is a basic Fuuinjutsu, remove.

My character doesn't item seal where are you reading this from. I just stare small things like senbon within my stomach then spit them out when needed.
I would think of sealing as when chakra is being used to hide it away in a scroll or something. However this is just a characteristic of a snake in which my character has inherited. A simple punch to the midsection could possibly make her spit anything stored up.

Quote :: -Explosive Substitute Technique, way to similar to Shadow Clone Super Explosion, remove.

Erased

Quote :: -Sex Appeal Characteristic, this WILL NOT allow you to godmod over male characters, NPC's are partially acceptable.

Understood. Godmod is not something I do.

Quote :: ANBU Mask, property of Konoha, not a Genin. Remove.

Well if you would have read my history and the items history you will see that my character's clan is originally from Konoha. Therefore this will be an ANBU mask. However since you said so I changed it.....now it's just a mask her father wore.
Now my history is being altered.

Quote :: I think I was so strict because you didn't add a role-playing sample, though you are well aware of the rules here. Be sure to address all my points as well as Shinji's, if you don't I'll assume your being sneaky again and punish your application. You need to note all poisons for poisons release, and I suggest you read the rules about them before you do so.

1. Well, as for the RP sample I didn't think I needed one seeing that they are all over the sight. Most of you all know who I am so yea, that's the reason for that.

2. No, you were being strict on my app simply because I'm not exactly your favorite member on this site. In fact I just may be your least liked member of all. I like to speak my mind even when it's not the best for me to do so. I admit it I'm guilty I wasn't being sneaky so I don't see why you would assume that when I was just modding as the mods told me too. However this is just my opinion I'm not trying to start an argument or anything. I just believe I am entitled to one as well as you are. I expected this from either you, Z, Cara or maybe even Todd. (unlikely Todd though) Therefor this doesn't anger me at all I'll just modify and expect worse.

Application Edited to the Best of My Abilities

Age : 31 Posts : 8965

Quote :: No, you were being strict on my app simply because I'm not exactly your favorite member on this site. In fact I just may be your least liked member of all. I like to speak my mind even when it's not the best for me to do so. I admit it I'm guilty I wasn't being sneaky so I don't see why you would assume that when I was just modding as the mods told me too. However this is just my opinion I'm not trying to start an argument or anything. I just believe I am entitled to one as well as you are. I expected this from either you, Z, Cara or maybe even Todd. (unlikely Todd though) Therefor this doesn't anger me at all I'll just modify and expect worse.

What your practically doing is implying I acted once again biased toward you because you feel like I don't like you. That is your opinion, that is all it is; an opinion. Accusing me of being biased and strict people of how I favour you is rubbish.

-Belling Storage, sorry wrong name. I'm saying you need to describe it better, it needs to be elaborated on.

-Snake Summons, this isn't a special characteristic. There are templates to fill out, so please do so.

-Poisons, clearly you haven't read the rules. Poisons must be filled out with the poison template not just mentioned in descriptions of jutsu.

-Item Sealing, it's an E-ranked technique in your Academy Jutsu.

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I am still not comfortable with your "common" poison sub-expansion just off of the medical ninjutsu. Mainly because you are already part of a clan that specializes in this so why would you branch out with another style even though you are in the Kurotsuki Clan. It doesn't particularly make sense to me...

Age : 32 Posts : 95

I mean it's my character....even if I am a part of your clan why am i not allowed to have my own techniques

That's like me being in a fire based clan and saying I can't create my own custom fire jutsu

They have nothing to do with your clan so it shouldn't matter

Posts : 2032

Quote :: They have nothing to do with your clan so it shouldn't matter

This is exactly my point. The poisonous jutsu you created don't even coincide slightly with the style of poison from the Kurotsuki Clan. They are jutsu from another clan you wanted approved called the Doku Clan. Perhaps you are not right to be in this clan..

Age : 32 Posts : 95

I don't think you understand what I am saying

maybe my character is the Sinister one

not everyone in a clan is the same

everyone has their owns views and no matter what others say or do people will do what they please

If that means slightly altering a jutsu then so be it

These are just techniques that are not KKG related

it's nothing wrong with that

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

What you arent understanding is the way the poison of Todds clan works. The clan has a certain chakra nature that does not work with the techniques you described.

Quote :: 'Root Chakra' has the unique property of being able to absorb either the users or another targets ailments and store it within the clan members chakra. 'Root Chakra' is powerful enough to absorb any plague, sickness, disease, injury, poison or even fatigue and in advanced cases physical damage and store it within the clan members chakra. Once it stores the 'ailment' into the chakra network of the clan member it then naturally manifests the 'ailment' into a non-destructive form that will not harm the user.

Look at the bold portion. The chakra absorbs the poison. SO if your poison isnt clan related, it pretty much is absorbed and negated by your own chakra.

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

And as a note, since you wont see this is I edit my post above:

Quote :: Name: Kuchiyose no Jutsu - Summoning Technique
Rank:C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element:N/A
Description: A powerful jutsu, Ninpo Kuchiyose allows a ninja to summon animals, objects and the dead to fight on their behalf. There are many ways in which the ninja can sign a contract with a summon but it is usually done with the ninja signing a blood contract with the animal species. This allows the user to summon different size and skilled animals to fight along side them, or on their behalf

This does NOT count as a summon contract. You need to follow the summoning template in the creature section and add it to your application. You cannot just say, "Oh, I have a contract with snakes, and here is the summoning jutsu" but you need an actual contract made and summons available.

Age : 32 Posts : 95

Well I guess this is complete

Age : 32 Posts : 95

3 Week BUMP

Age : 31 Posts : 1118

Quote :: Name: Healing Serum
Rank: C
Type: Medicine
Natural Abilities: This is a low leveled healing serum in which Yuketsu made himself. This serum takes on the healing genin itself and speed up the process slightly. Thus healing the user in an adequate amount of time.
*This serum can heal all ranks injury's. The more deadly the wound the longer the serum takes.
A-Ranked injury = 6 post heal: If not Dead:
B-Ranked injury = 4 post heal: If not Dead:
C-Ranked injury = 2 post heal: If not Dead:

Quote:
Name: Pulse Decreasing Serum
Rank: C
Type: Medicine
Natural Abilities: This is a poison serum created my Yuketsu that lowers whoever is injected pulse rate so low that it's nearly impossibly to be detected except by medical best medical ninja. This serum will last 2 post and the person injected doesn't have the ability to do anything. It's as if the injected person were a dead body.

Serum is denied. A serum may 'help' your healing a bit but your talking about something that can substitute that of a medic. It doesn't make much sense and given those results from a C rank formula doesn't make much sense either. Please Remove.

Pulse Decreasing Serum would have to be denied. You are tai/nin specialized in the poison is C Rank. Although it has its simplicity, a person of your specialties would be unable to produce a powerful indicator such as that. I'm going to ask you to remove it.

Everything else is fine.

Age : 32 Posts : 95

erased

Age : 31 Posts : 1118

Approved.