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| Basic Information:
[list]Name: Initake Nai
Secondary Title: Keeper of the Dead
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Physical Appearance: Initake is very stocky. He stands barely above 5 feet tall, maybe 5'2 or 5'3, and weighs about 150 pounds, a very stocky person. He has muscular legs, but that is pretty much the only thing about him that is muscular or toned. His stomach; fat. Arms; kinda flabby. He may seem like someone that is weak, but he is actually quite strong for his measly stature. He can run very quickly, do to his leg strength, an is frequently weight training.
He has poor posture, and most of the time, people mistake this for a hunchback, but it is not. It is merely him being too lazy to stand up straight. He has large hands and feet, used for various things that they could be useful for.
He has gray eyes, with a small tint of blue in them, for they seem constantly foggy, and not a soul in this world can find out why. His eyes are bulgy, and it always looks like that creepy guy staring at you from across the room, that is what it feels like. He has long black hair, parted to the right, with bangs that go over his right eye, which, if he ever fixed his hair, has a large scar on the far side of it, extending to his ear. His skint one is fairly light, though not quite albino, but definitely a substantial amount lighter than others.
He has slight facial hair, which covers most of his face. He has a scruffy beard, extending from his sideburns down to his chin, making a full blown beard of awesomeness. It is rough to the touch, but in some places, it is very smooth, not that anyone would want to feel his beard. (-_-)
He wears a dark black robe most of the time, representing his religion. The robe has a hood, to cover his face, for his religion requires any followers to do this. The robe goes all the way down to his feet, though at the collar area, it has a few buttons, and he leaves them unbuttoned, only to reveal which is usually a light blue (cyan) or white shirt. He wears sandals, which are higher than most, to make him seem taller.
Personality: He is quiet. Barely ever talks. He chooses to ignore people most of the time, regardless whether they are talking to him, or right up in his face yelling at him.
Too bad, you wouldn't get in his face and yell at him. He would hurt you if you did that, and no one wants to get hurt. If you try to yell at him, or harm him in any sort of way, he will end your life, regardless. If eh actually was wrong, well that is a different story.
He is very loyal to friends, family, and his fellow shinobi. He has much honor in what he does, and takes pride in what he does. He does everything with a sense of urgency, as if it is the last thing he was going to do, which in some cases, it might as well may be.
But being too proud is not his only flaw His type of religion he had chosen after his coronation of being a necromancer required him to be cursed with the personality of the Seven Deadly Sins. Pride, Lust, Gluttony, Wrath, Greed, Sloth, and Envy. Each and every one of them are strong within his soul, and they can never be released from him, as long as he walks the earth.
He has no sexual lust, he just has a strong desire to do anything and everything. He has a lust for life. He wants to see everything, do everything, and frankly, accomplish everything he possibly can, and to him, this doesn't seem a problem, but to some, this may seem as so in some areas.
You can tell by his looks that he is a glutton, for he may even eat during training if he was hungry. He isn't hungry ALL the time, just most of it. And when he really is hungry, he eats everything, sometimes even other people's food, though he tries to limit himself on this, for he knows possible consequences.
His wrath is eternal. He gets fumed over simple things, such as something being thrown at him or someone pulling a prank. But if it was meant to cause harm, he guarantees, that you're dead.
He has some bad greed problems. Due to his small size, he makes the perfect pickpocket, which could be just a cause of Greed. He wants everything that could be of use to him, and some things that couldn't, so he could sell them, to assure that his hunger for greed will be fulfilled.
He is very lazy. The problem with Initake is getting him started on work. He gives you hell on starting it, but once he gets started, he goes on forever. He won't stop until the job is done, and then some. Otherwise, if it does not have to be done, he will either do it discontentedly, or just sit on his lazy ass and do nothing.
He is a very envious person, and this ties to the rest of the 6. He envies people, and has a lust to be them, or do what they do, but he frequently is not like that, and he sometimes lets Greed get in the way, and get more than that person, and sometimes even wrath, for he could easily get ticked by this.
Catch Phrase: "May death come to all; by me."
Rank Information:
[list]Rank: Konohagakure Jounin
Village Affiliation: [strike] Konoha
Special Information:
Character Speciality:
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub:
Elemental Affinity:
Main: Katon {Fire}
Sub: Raiton {Lightning}
Special Characteristics: The clan can not only raise and manipulate the undead, but they are also masters of disease and pestilence, for the dead are automatically assumed to associate with that. The undead that they raise can sometimes have a mind of their own, but are very weak. They sometimes can even raise the undead to decay the enemy; this is one of their more advanced abilities.
Skill Information:
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Item Template:
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Background Information
[list]History:
PREAMBLE
Initake was never really the one to stand up. His parents were the same way. He was also stubborn,; some say that is what kept him from excellence. Some say it was his diligence and his work ethic. They didn't know the half of it. They did not know who he was; what he was. They only knew his name. And they had assumptions ' A Monster, just like his old man! ' They would assume, but he was determine to prove them wrong, though he fought everyday. They saw him as nothing but a menace. He knew he was more, destined for more. This became evident soon. And he was determined to show all of this.
PRE-SHINOBI LIFE
Initake walked among many people in his life. When he was a young child, about the age of four or five, he was condemned to a life on his own. Some criminal organization had taken over his own village, and he was forced to migrate, for he and a couple others were the only to escape. He was forced too migrate to Konoha, where he had, along with the other people whom had escaped the gory invasion, made a small, makeshift community on the west side of the town, clearing some of the forest. They had taken in some of the wolves, and with the Yukigakure hunting way of life, they had inhabited the way to treat animals, when they weren't killing them for survival. They had taken some wolves for pets, and trained them, and eventually the wolves became domesticated guard dogs.
Although Initake was still part of his small makeshift village, he owed his alliance to Konoha, for they had allowed them to come in. He was forever in their debt, and he would do anything to try to become one of their shinobi. For, now he was 8, and he had to decide soon whether or not he wanted to join the academy. If he did, he would have to decide soon. And begin training. He was not in the worst shape he could possibly be in, but certainly not the best, either. If he wanted to do this, he had to do this now. He had to train. Now. He looked upon the elite shinobi in the village for help, for he knew some of them, and the ones that he did know, were always very friendly.
He looked upon a chuunin, whom had failed the Jounin Exams, so he knew he was good even to make it there. He knew exactly what this man was good at, for he had seen him practice. He would make his move later in the week, he had some business to catch up on right now. Sleep.
He saw the Chuunin munching on some ramen near his village, and he decided to go in. He had gathered some ryo, from a couple yardwork jobs for people around the village, so he figured he would eat something, too. He looked up at the man. He had gulped, and the Chuunin, named Ryonami. Ryonami had looked down at Initake. He knew he was going to ask something, Initake was very inquisitive at his young age. Ryonami thought he heard wrong when Initake asked his question. He thought he was joking. His exact words were "Well, Initake, you see, I would, but as of right now Konoha is in danger of Akatsuki invasion..... sorry if I had to mention that." Ryonami knew of Initake's past. It had to be said. Initake was once again on his own.
Training
Initake spent a few hours every day training. He broke a sweat in not even 2 minutes. He was doing, just right now, physical training. He had no idea of his real power at 10, and he frankly did not know what he was capable of physically, as in the effort he can put in. He had put forth some results; but overall, not much came out of it. He was able to lose some weight, but he didn't do much. He had no idea why, maybe it was what he was doing when he WASN'T training? He had no earthly idea.
Miraculous Happening
When Initake felt he was ready for the Academy, he was hesitant to begin there. He was only 9, and people usually started there at 10 Or 11. He wanted to begin there already, but he wanted to find something out about himself first. Most kids going into the academy knew about their clans, and bloodlines, while some abilities for some of them had already kicked in. He knew nothing, already at a strong disadvantage.
He was, one day, just before his tenth birthday, about a week before, had seen something strange. He knew little about this, but he knew it couldn't be good. He saw a man in a black robe, with red clouds on them, following him, but whenever he turned around to see if he still was, he would slip either into the shadows or behind a tree. He idn't know who he was... but he remembered something. OH SHIT!..... THOSE WERE THE ROBES THE PEOPLE WERE WEARING WHEN THEY ATTACKED OUR VILLAGE! Initake began to go into full sprint. He did not want to get tangled with any of these people. Suddenly, he was on the ground, pinned by some smelly, rotten thing. The man soon approached Initake, calling off the thing he sent to pounce.
"Well, son, do you remember me?" Initake looked confused.
"I Know it has been a while, since you have last seen me, but I figured I would leave for your own protection." Initake shook his head violently, screaming "NO! YOU'RE A LIAR! YOU'RE NOT MY FATHER!" The man just smirked. Ten he said something witty.
"Then how would I know the address of the house you lived in, or your mother's whole name?" Initake now knew well enough to not test him; and now he began to believe him. The man reached out a hand, willing to help him up.
"Initake..... If you wish to know anything about yourself, or anything about what happened that night....Follow me, I can provide enlightenment."
Initake's father led him into Konoha, being sneaky, taking side roads, where civilians would only flee, instead of actually doing something about him. He led him down the stairs on a side street, and into a small building, into the back room, down a ramp, and into a series of tunnels, mall edged with stone, looking like an ancient place. Initake's dad led him into a small, tightly compressed room.
"Well, son, do you wish to know something about yourself?" Initake nodded, he never really spoke much.
"Very well. First off, you have come from a bloodline of Necromancers; controllers and manipulators of the dead and disease. If you do not remember, you come from a smaller village to the far north, called Yukigakure. There, our family rests in peace, thanks to this organization i was drawn into, more like forced, but that i another day." Initake just stared in astonishment. Then he spoke. "Why have you waited so long to tell me this?! Why couldn't you take me with you when you left?! SO many questions have bothered me about this for FIVE YEARS, dad! You could have stood up and been a man at least after we arrived here, I wouldn't have as much anger as I DO NOW!" Initake stood, but his father restricted him by putting a hand on his shoulder, and making him sit.
"I understand your anger, son, but there is no need to be hasty. You will learn in due time. First, we must decide the fate of your abilities...."
THE DECISION
"you see, son, this decision of your lifelong dedication to necromancy is most likely the most important you shall make in your life." His father placed three cards down on the table. "Now this is kind of like a game of tarot. I flip the cards, read your palm, and determine what you SHOULD do, now what you choose is entirely up to you." He flipped the first. It showed a vial of poison. "Master of pestilence. You will be able to control all sorts of diseases, and be able to poison, mute, blind and deafen any person." Another is flipped, it shows a gravestone. "Undead mastery. You will be able to re-animate any sort of undead, and have them obey your every command, and some may even be smart enough to do things on their own." Initake grins, he was thinking that one. The last.. It showed three different skulls. "Finally. The three presences. Undead, Disease, and Destruction. Normally, you are only able to use one presences ability at once, if you choose this presence, you are able to use all three at once, regardless of presence, the presence just allows the abilities of those presences to become stronger. So, son, what'll it be?"
Initake thought long and hard about this. He was considering all of them. He eliminated the Presence Mastery, that would make them weaker altogether, though more balanced, and he wasn't sure about Disease or Undead Mastery. He liked the idea of becoming master of diseases, but he liked the idea of re-animating life, as well. He was decided. Initake pointed at the Undead Mastery Card. His father nodded. "So much like me..... It is hard to imagine me not being in your life so much..... Anyway, time for your insertion." Initake's father drew out some of his chakra, and into Initake, infusing it. He was now, after a slightly painful, yet quick transition, a necromancer. He looked up at his father, now his voice deepened, and sounded slightly paranormal, and somewhat demonic. It got quieter, with a more whispering sound to it, and it got more raspy, more gruff. Puberty, the other way! "Thank you, father. I appreciate this. Now, I am afraid, you must leave." Initake's father agreed, but spoke once again. "With this new power, bestowed upon us is a curse. Re-animating the dead is considered one of the greatest sins. We are now Keepers of the Seven deadly Sins." He then leapt up the stairs, and left.
ACADEMY
Initake spent little time as an Academy Student, he found that the "curse" that was bestowed upon him was actually helpful. The Sins seemed to appear at the right time, he always had the right time to be angry, proud, and a glutton. And the teachers saw this, but knew nothing of his curse. They saw him as a very respectable young man. They were going to pass him without final exams, because his instructors all saw him excelling in every sort of ability. He mastered the clone usage early, but Body Flicker was his problem. He had no idea why.
He spent most of his time in his quarters, either studying, or sleeping. When he was training, which is where he spent the rest of his time other than sleep, eat, study or class, which was about..... 5 hours every day, he tried to get used to some of his newly found techniques in necromancy. The students found this weird, for they had never seen anything like this before. They had little to no knowledge about his abilities, which was common. And he liked being the center of attention, especially when it came to his talents.
He graduated soon after he had shown the main instructors, in private, what he was capable of, defeating one chuunin instructor. Everyone was impressed, especially the Headmaster.
GENIN/CHUUNIN
Initake stood as his own graduating class. He liked it. Graduation class: population: Initake Nai. He spent the beginning of his genin time helping by doing good deeds around the village. Maybe this would get him more noticed than he already was. This could get him, potentially, quicker to getting a team. And it did. Two weeks later, he was assigned to a team.
He spent a few months on his team. He thought himself more powerful than his sensei. His sensei was a Hyuuga, and therefore, is extremely powerful. They were on a mission to Suna, with one of the most dangerous roads in the known world having to be traveled. They defeated many enemies, thanks to Initake's countless uses of his undead as distractions. They delivered these documents, and in due time. They had made it back to Konoha within a few days, arriving just in time for the Chuunin Exams.
In this Exams, the genin of a village have a chance to prove their new, or even old skills they can perform, in an attempt to obtain the higher rank of Chuunin. Initake easily passed the written exams, and made it to the second round with ease. The second round proved difficult, but, with his seemingly limitless amount of undead, he powered his way thru by doing nearly nothing himself, which proved good. He then was in the semi's.
His undead began to grow stronger, being able to sustain more damage, and being able to provide a great distraction, while, Initake, using his vast amount of intelligence, dominated most of the battle with nothing but intelligence. He had some fascinating strategies, and some great tactics, and his stun abilities proved to be his opponent's downfall, for he was an Inuzuka, and used Tai, so slowing him down was his main priority. He was now guaranteed Chuunin. He was in the Finals.
He was considered the underdog, his opponent was a Nara, shadow manipulator. This was going to be an interesting battle, he knew, because all of his Necromancy Abilities, that required physical touch with the opponent, was used through shadow. Most of this match was going to be a stalemate, he felt. So, he did not, for the most part, depend on his necromancy. He used his elemental abilities, using the elements of Fire and Lightning. This was not the best strategy, considering that they create light, which creates shadows. He thought he was doomed. He depended, then, after he realized this, on his Genjutsu. He made it seem like it was dark. In his opponent's mind, it was nighttime, with no light whatsoever, which means no shadow. Perfect time to strike. He distracted him by summoning two undead, on both sides, and having them press, as he slowly approached him from the front, and by the time his opponent realized he was doing so, he had a lightning bolt being shoved into his lower stomach at point-blank range. Initake was now Chuunin.
As Chuunin, he spent most of his time outside the village, as an ambassador. He frequently traveled, with another Chuunin, to other allied villages, to deliver things, or to provide reinforcements during an invasion. Surprisingly, there was more violence in the world than he had anticipated. He had been sent to Suna, Kiri, and sometimes Kumo, to try to patch some things together. They had done this numerous times, and had been known as ambassadors. They, upon returning to Konoha, eventually, had both received Jounin.
JONIN
he had not much time as a jonin thus far, but he is looking forward to all the experiences he may have at this elite rank. he knew his powers would flourish, knowing that he had nearly unending amounts of chakra and power now, so he knew he had to work even harder to sustain this. He is not one to have a team, he is going to be the casual village jonin, working for the village, being somewhat of a guard. he sees this as an opportunity, as of right now, to better himself.
Role-Play Sample:
{from a recent topic on Ingoo.}
Initake was taking his time getting out of bed. He looked at his clock. 11:00? Crap! I really need to set that damned alarm... he thought to himself, as he jumped ot of bed, and hopped in the shower, as he turned the heat up higher, just to mainly amuse himself with all of the steam coming out of it. When he was finally finished, he quickly changed from his bathrobe, to his ninja attire, wearing his headband with pride. He slipped on his sandals, and his usual clothing and set out.
He walked out of his home, out to the small side street, nearing the woods and the beach, for he has constructed his house all alone purposely, for he was barely ever in the mood for urban living. He jumped into a tree, and began to make his way down the small hill that lead to the beach. As soon as he arrived there, he felt the sand squish under his feet, so he placed his sandals in his backpack. What a beautiful day, it's days like these that distract me from life's boring moments....; wow, I am easily amused.... he thought to himself once again.
He saw a couple ninja sitting on a bench, conversing. He walked behind the bench, and when he got near them, he jumped, and perched himself on the top of it, nearly knocking it and the ones sitting on it over.
" Hello boys, I take it you two are genin, because you two seem fairly new to these parts, I haven't seen your faces around here before." He just continued to sit there, and smile at the young men.
" Are you two in need of a team, if so, I could suit your needs, for I am a jounin looking for a team as well."
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|  | | Pattycakes
Age : 30
Posts : 1701
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Tue 02 Mar 2010, 2:09 am | |
| has your clan been approved?
Gennin/chuunin should be a bit longer ^_^
Your RP sample is just 50 words under par for Jounin...Can you post larger, when approved? =]
Finish jutsu and all that. |
| | | | Tony
Age : 28
Posts : 701
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Tue 02 Mar 2010, 10:11 pm | |
| | Of course i can post longer, just idk if sometimes, if i post some above par and some under par, would it even out, or do they ALL have to be par or over? And, you should recognize my clan, you recognized it on US 1.0. IF it isn't approved, i could get hage or someone to approve it, or at least check it, the rest is no problem. |
| | | | Caranore
Age : 35
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| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Wed 10 Mar 2010, 7:13 pm | |
| All clans, regardless, need to be placed under clan applications for approval there.
All posts, SHOULD be over par, but we know that there are some days that it doesnt happen. But Jounin word minimum is, i believe, 350 words. |
| | | | Tony
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Posts : 701
| | Subject: Fire Ninjutsu Thu 01 Apr 2010, 12:14 am | |
| [list]Jutsu Template:
[quote]Name: Lesser Torch
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Fire
Description: The user of the jutsu performs a few hand signs, and lights a small fire on their index, ring, and middle fingers, which could be used for light, done for damage, though it would be very light damage, or possibly to warm something up.
Name: Bowling Ball
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Fire
Description: The user creates a ball, like a bowling ball, with three holes in it, like a normal bowling ball would have, and this is one of the only ways to destroy it by any other sort of ninjutsu besides water. The ball rolls on the ground, incinerating the ground as it goes along, and upon impact, it slightly burns the target, and sends them flying into the air, stunned until they hit the ground.
Name: Lesser Sea of Flame
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Katon
Description: The user does about 3 hand signs, and then bobs his head, looking at the ground when tus jytsu is in use, a sea of flame then bursts from him, out of his abdomen, and pretty mu8ch everywhere else. This technique has a 30 foot width, and 20 feet of forward and backward space. It can move in waves, with occasionally bursts off of the side, and can travel at 20-30 MPH, if it catches the enemy, the enemy is instantly knocked down or burned, either one can take affect, but one of them has to, though neither are for very long or serious.
Name: Fire Barrier
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: The user can cast a barrier around him, that is lodged in the ground, and cannot be moved. It stays there for around 50 seconds (around 5 posts). When up, the user s not susceptible to anything but water and wind jutsus. Theonly way to destroy this barrier is by a water jutsu, or a B Rank+ Wind Jutsu, or just to wait it out. The user also regains some chakra and energy over time while the barrier is in effect, but this ca only take place if withing 1 foot, and only works for the caster.
Name: Fire Bubble
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: The user creates a bubble similar to the barrer. This bubble is ONLY suscepitble by a water jutsu or 3 kunai. (or more obviously). And is destroyed after a minute and a half (around 13-17 posts). Can regain chakra and energy if concealed withing the bubble, and can also be destryed by a sword cut. Bubble can change places if it is still existent, an if the user has enough chakra, although the changing place of it takes up 2X as many chakra as to summon he bubble.
Name: Fire Wall
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: The user creates, after a series of hand signs, a nearly inpenetrable wall. The wall is up for 10 secondsonly, and protects the user from the front and sides only, anc an only be penetrated by a jutsu of one rank higher or more, and that only applies to wind and water.
Name: Fire Aura
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: When this presence is cast, the user if surrounded by a slight barrier of fire chakra that lasts for 5 mins. When this is in effect, all fire jutsu being cast have a less chance of being dodged, faster cast, and execution, and does 5% more damage. The only flaw to this is that, once again, it is easily destroyed by a water or wind ninjutsu. Also, if the user is stuck by a sword, then the sword gets fire sent up it's blade and burns the enemy, and does half damage to the user of the jutsu. If struck by kunai, the user of this jutsu takes half damage, and then kunai is then repelled back at the thrower at half of the speed, but is not fire like enchanted.
Name: Fireball
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: Basic Fireballl technique, the user, after a couple handsigns shoots a fireball out of their hands and is thrown at the enemy. Is one half inch in diameter.
Name: Ash
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: This jutsu does exactly what thename implement it to. When this block of fire chakra, not just fire, but fire chakra, making it less vulnerable to the outside effects, strikes the target, the user, started from it's fingertips begins to disintegrate, but the block travles at only 10-15 MPH so, it is easy to dodge.
Name: Basic Fire Rain
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: The user shouts a loud incantation to the skies, as they begin to rain down. This rain is of a 100 foot distance, and can be extended upon movement of the user. The user is impervios to this jutsu, and when the target is hit, a 2nd or so degree burn is intact, and the burn lasts around 20 secnds. The rain lasts 1 minute, and can burn the ground if needed, and the distance of this jutsu, as in the radius/circumference and all that can be chosen by the user, but is not aable to be changed while the jutsu is already in effect. Can also be used as a shield, for the user can surround themselves in this rain, though if this is the case, it takes more pwer to focus it to one spot, and lasts then only 10 seconds. The larger the area, the weaker, but the less chakra it costs, the smaller area, better effect and chance too hit, more chakra.
Name: Burn
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: This jutsu is very simple yet kind of hard to execute. It can only be used on projectiles, which is the difficult part, meaning that you have to have great reflexes to use this. Whenever a projectile is thrown at him, of ANY kind and of any rank but S, he can burn it midair, without any effort, and all it takes is 2 hand sgns.
Name: Heat
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: This jutsu is performed after around 5 hand signs, and can be used in a couple of ways. The first way is that the user uses this jutsu and makes the heat in the air SEEM alot hotter than normal. It is the same temperature, but it seemes hotter. The user, if the have their fire aura or over 60% percent chakra, is impervious to this jutsu. The second way ios the user direct all of the heat from this jutsu and chakra to the insides of the opponents body, an makes them overheat, to nearly 5 degrees higher, it would be nearly impossible to live from that, although if the user is withing 30 feet of that person and uses the second effect, it costs 2X as much chakra, which would be around 15-20% chakra. Also, if they do use th second way, then the user loses the same amount of heat that the other gains, ONLY if it hits.
Name: Melt
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: The user is able to melt things. If harder than a soft metl or hard wood, it can be burned. If wood is being burned, than it discntegrates, but the smoke and ash get n both the peoples' faces, making it harder to see. If it is metal, a softer metal, such as gold, it melts, but since it has to be by touch, both the people get a slight burn and damage done.
Name: Scorch
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: The user grabs ahold of another ninja or person, and then concentrates much of their fire chakra into the hand holding the other person. When this fire chakra becomes very hot. Unbearable. He then courses the chakra thru their body, overheating them and burning them from the inside out.
Name: Fire Twister
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: The user does three hand signs, alternating sides with the hand signs each time. A large twister of fire is then formed. At it's fattest point, it is five feet in diameter, which is at a point of 35 yards in the air. The fire chakra changes direction so quickly that any water ninjutsu would dissolve. A strong wand ninjutsu may be able to move it. ( S Rank + ) Should one be caught in this jutsu, they would be instantaneously trapped. The twister closes in around them, and when they touch something living on the inside of it, it implodes, creating an explosion with a distance of 40 yards. ( Object must have a puklse and a chakra pool )
Name: Fire Tower
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: A solid block of fire chakra is created at 15 meters high, 4 meters long and 5 meters in depth, after 5 hand signs. This tower may only be fell by the user, ad when a clone of some sort is made, another block is made, and if one is destroyed, the effect of the block is the same as well. If this is fell, the block makes a giant explosion, nearly 50 yards, and creates a puff of smoke, 20 meters high, 4 meters long, 5 meters in width, and lasts for 3 posts, and has the same effect as the Hidden Mist Jutsu.
Name: Greater Sea of Flame
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Element: Fire
Description: Same effect as Lesser Sea of Flame, except the width is extended 20 feet, and the backward and forwards range is extended 30 feet, and it travels about 15-40 MPH faster, making it much harder to escape.
Name: Volcano
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Element: Fire
Description: The user kneels, and compacts themselves. They then spring up into their normal position, with their legs spread slightly farther than shoulder-width apart, and arms spread wide open, and massive amounts of fire spew out of their mouth, and begin to fly high in the air. The fire then scatters, about 20 feet in each diretion, and falls quickly, scorching the ground upon impact when it hits, and hitting anyone in the air, burns them, bringing them directly to the ground. Requires but 5 hand signs.
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| | | | Tony
Age : 28
Posts : 701
| | Subject: Lightning Ninjutsu Thu 01 Apr 2010, 12:41 am | |
| Name: Bolt
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Lightning
Description: The user performs three hand signs, and faces their hands upwards, in a cup, and speaks a short incantation and after this is done, lightning blts come down from the sky, for some of the chakra is released from his mouth as he speaks this incantation, and mix with the oxygen and clouds inthe sky, making it lightning. For a genin, three bolts of lightning are used along with this jutsu, and increase by two every rank of this jutsu. So, for this jutsu, 7 bolts would come down, at the speed of light, as all lightning does, and shock the opponent, electrocuting them on the spot. They would not instantly die, for the lightning never hits the target head on, it usually hits their foot, arm, or something like that, and even if it does hit, it never hits a vital organ or vein.
Name: Lightning Sphere
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Lightning
Description: The user performs 4 hand signs and then releases a ball of lightning chakra at the enemy, and if it hits, it hurts them, and has a small possibility of paralyzing them for one post.
Name: Lightning Blend
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Raiton
Description: (this one i am also not sure if it is a whole different ability, but i am putting it down as this, will fix if i have to.) This allows the user of this jutsu to make any of their lightning projectiles invisible. Any stationary lightning jutsu will remain visible. Due to the 5 second incantation, the user speaks the words of invisibility. This allows the lihgtning to become less visible to the enemy.
Name: Turret
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Element: Raiton
Description: This allows the user to be able to throw lightning bolts at amazingly fast speeds, and after 5mins he runs out. Can be mobile while throwing and still get same power, and also heat seek, heave to do some weird maneuver in order to avoid these lightning bolts.
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| | | | Jsalos
Posts : 191
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Thu 01 Apr 2010, 1:37 am | |
| | Please fix your coding, you have TONS of problems, furthermore, all jutsu need to have the words 'Name, Type, Rank, Element, Description' all in bold. |
| | | | Tony
Age : 28
Posts : 701
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Thu 01 Apr 2010, 2:38 am | |
| | Can do. Otherwise? |
| | | | Uchiha Osore
Posts : 1044
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Thu 01 Apr 2010, 3:33 am | |
| | Is this for Kiri or Konoha Jounin? Your app says Konoha, the title says Kiri. |
| | | | Tony
Age : 28
Posts : 701
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Thu 01 Apr 2010, 2:56 pm | |
| | Kiri. I had originally made the app for Konoha, but i has recently been closed. So i am gonna change it for now. |
| | | | Uchiha Osore
Posts : 1044
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Thu 01 Apr 2010, 2:59 pm | |
| | This is far too low quality for a Jounin application, its full of grammar errors, incorrect usage of punctuation marks, short and dull sentences, your RP Sample isnt even at the Jounin word count minimum, and you have serious errors with the coding as has been pointed out. As the man currently in charge of what comes into Kiri, pick another rank that isn't Chunnin or Jounin. |
| | | | Tony
Age : 28
Posts : 701
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Thu 01 Apr 2010, 3:22 pm | |
| Look, I know my grammar is not the best, but does the really matter all that much? Sorry if I sound like i am being a crybaby or a douche, but seriously? As long as you get what I mean, it should be fine and not matter. Is that good enough grammar for you? I SAID I WOULD FIX THE CODING, but I am working on something else atm, so if you actually noted that I was, (my clan) it would be done already if i wasn't. And just because I copied and pasted that RP Sample from another site, doesn't mean I can't do better.
Also, if the Jounin Word Count Minimum is 350, that's 48 words below that. Yes, it is a moderate difference, but nothing too much to handle in a post. 350 can be achieved easily, and 48 words, if needed, can be added. |
| | | | Uchiha Osore
Posts : 1044
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Fri 02 Apr 2010, 1:07 am | |
| Yes, it matters quite a bit, making excuses for your own inability is simply admitting that you have such an inability and expecting it to be overlooked. I don't overlook things like that, and I'm aware of everything, I know you said you'd fix it but you put it up for evaluation like that so thats what I'm judging you on. When it comes up for consideration, your judged based on what it is then, not after edits.
Your RP Sample is reflective of your general RP, and if your general RP is below the measly 350 word requirement for the rank then you're not suitable for the higher ranks of Kirinogakure, its that simple. If you intend to do better, then you need to post such, but that won't net you the rank either way.
So yeah, seriously, change this to another village that will accept your quality of RP for a higher rank or adjust to Genin. |
| | | | Tony
Age : 28
Posts : 701
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Fri 02 Apr 2010, 4:15 am | |
| ok then... i don't see how this arguement makes any sense whatsoever.... Just to let you know, I do vary my posts based upon Rank. But apparently, it makes no sense to argue any further.... so I guess that I will change to genin....
And by the way, next time you wish to criticize someone, make it not me., Cuz I do NOT find your form of criticism to be the most friendly. If it is supposed to be constructive, then you need to work on that yourself, otherwise, find another fucking ninja. If you don't think I can do better, then oh well. Cuz I know I can. |
| | | | Tony
Age : 28
Posts : 701
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Fri 02 Apr 2010, 4:18 am | |
| | Oh, I forgot, delete topic. |
| | | | John
Age : 31
Posts : 2547
| | Subject: Re: Nai, Initake. Keeper of the Dead [Kirigakure Jounin] (Done, Clan in the Works.) Fri 02 Apr 2010, 4:28 am | |
| I'll move it just in case you need some info on it later.
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