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MrStygian
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PostSubject: Maseika Clan Maseika Clan EmptyWed 14 Sep 2011, 3:37 am

As rightful submitter of this clan, I am able to reject anyone's usage of this clan, unless permission is given otherwise by me CANTTOUCHTHIS!

Clan Name
Maseika

Clan Village:
Hidden Grass


Clan History

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Clan Abilities

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Clan Description

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MrStygian
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PostSubject: Re: Maseika Clan Maseika Clan EmptySat 17 Sep 2011, 6:44 am

Bumpity, please be gentle on the review. I would very much like this clan to mine, so if any mods have any questions, objections, or suggestions, please submit them as detailed as possible.
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Emperor of Rock
Konoha Nin
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PostSubject: Re: Maseika Clan Maseika Clan EmptySun 18 Sep 2011, 11:53 pm

Ehhhh where do I start... oh right. What?! Excuse me if I came as rude now because that wasn't my intention, it's just that the clans KKG is so far-fetched it's ridiculous.

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This bloodline not only makes them acutely aware of the alternate versions of themselves, but through certain techniques they can attune these variations to our reality, and make them part of our world.

This process has been refined, and trained, turning it into the dangerous taijutsu style. Through their manipulation of variations, hitting a Maseika is hard enough, but avoiding being hit is another feat all together.

So you can see the different variations of events taking place at some moment and not only that, you can attune them to our reality? What did you just try to say here? This to me looks as a perfect example of godmodding. No matter what you say you can see all the possible outcomes and practically dodge them with ease. So that's a gigantic no.


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Chakra constructs are highlighted when the doujutsu is active because they don't vibrate with the timeline. This makes genjutsu illusions especially easy to discern from reality.

Again, no. There is no easy way to notice a genjutsu. Not even Uchiha or Hyuuga can see a genjutsu easily.

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Present
The first stage of the Eiseikougan is fairly basic, but comes with it a devastating weapon. The Eternal Eye gives its user a perfect photographic memory as long as it is active. Not only will they remember anything they have seen, but their mind can play back anything they have directly witnessed in real time at any time. This allows them instant recall of objects, people, names, or anything else they may have noticed or seen. This takes little strain, but controlling this recall can be troublesome at times, it is also time consuming. The nature of the doujutsu also makes keeping time exact and perfect, as every moment to them is a unique perceived moment, with practice a Maseika can know the time of day off the top of their head. This costs 15 chakra points.

This whole part is pointless because we have a SC which gives you photographic memory. So remove.


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Past
At this stage of the doujutsu, the user has gotten a better control over their vision into the 4th dimension. The blurs of motion and change that was the world has now become less chaotic, the vague ghostly blurs gaining back a bit of their color. It is now possible for the clan member to look at an object, and watch it display its growth from its creation until now. This works especially well on plants and buildings, playing like a flip pad movie. But the more important ability is location recall. By using a single seal and concentrating on a location, the Eiseikougan can perform this technique. The area they are watching will play back its history from the last 12 hours like a movie. They will see all who passed by and all that was done there played back in an instant. This technique only extends to visual information though. This can only be used once by genin, twice by chuunin, and thrice by jounin in one thread. This costs 25 Chakra points

To me this is a a useless technique. Firstly because we don't have a time system and you could only see NPC's and inanimate objects that past the spot you are looking at. To actually see a PC that passed recently you would have to be in the same topic to see them. But I'm still going to deny this technique because a brain cannot handle so much information in just an instant.


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Future
The final stage of the Eiseikougan unlocks the most fearsome ability, the ability to see into the future. Though this ability is limited due to the chaotic and variable nature that is the 4th dimension, this skill is still powerful beyond belief. Doujutsu user’s may occasionally have abstract oracle visions of the future without asking for them, in fact that is what heralds the first signs of this level of the doujutsu, but these visions usually only apply to days or even weeks into the future, thus it makes it utterly useless in combat. In addition, with a strong focus of chakra to the eyes, a glimpse mere seconds into the future is created, or a slow concentration allows the Maseika to see glimpses in the future in a matter of weeks. This puts a horrible strain on the doujutsu that will cut its active post possible in half whenever used, and it costs 35 chakra points and if the chakra points permit, can only be used 3 times per thread. But by using this, lives have been saved, and whole travesties averted.

This too is a gigantic no. Why you ask? Because we do not allow future sight. Sure you might only see a second of the future that will happen in a week or month but still we do no allow that.

However to be honest, I'm actually liking the taijutsu style. Granted I haven't read the actual jutsus, but from the description it seems like a very well done style. However the problem with it is that it's relying on your Doujutsu which is denied. So what I suggest is to either drop the clan and keep the style for a normal char, join a new, already made clan or make a completely new clan that doesn't involve seeing in future.
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MrStygian
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PostSubject: Re: Maseika Clan Maseika Clan EmptyMon 19 Sep 2011, 7:47 am

Delete this thread. I'll keep the Taijutsu style, and I'll create something else. Thanks anyway.
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PostSubject: Re: Maseika Clan Maseika Clan EmptyMon 19 Sep 2011, 9:36 am

Archived.
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