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| ![Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] 7200-110](https://i.servimg.com/u/f75/18/09/10/50/7200-110.jpg) Sitorm, Anthossit.THE INFO.
Name:Anthossit, Sitorm
Nickname:Anth
Age:15
Gender:Male
Appearance:A 5'9 Strapping Young lad With dark hair and Charcoal eyes, He sports a red jacket and a bracelet made of shark teeth. He is good about changing the color of his shirts, he has a shirt for every day of every week and cleans whichever ones he isn't wearing. Though it is hard to tell if he does this with pants because he doesnt have as many varieties. He wears a black leather belt with enlarged loops wher he stores tools for Mortis, The Family Puppet,since the are enlarged he also hangs the Kunai and Shuriken pouches from them with brown string. This is not his only means of weaponry, however, and has two pouchs on the backside of his waist and a small mini pouch brandished on the side of his upper calve.
When on his more relaxed days he sometimes sports a black flat rimmed fedora, it seems to be the one thing that he wears on a whimsy the Hat isn't tattered but it isnt far from it the hat is obviously old though he refuses to buy a new one. Last but not least are his green alligator skin boots like his hat the boots have obivously seen better days but he keeps them shined and looking as good as shoes with thier track record could. His boots are heavy most don’t understand why he has them, being that they give him a slight disadvantage in the stealth category. He also has an old military backpack just in case Mortis runs out of tools in between battles his backpack was his fathers so it includes old battle scars but it is a dark green he added a star to it.
He usually let's his fingernails grow because his nails are kind of sharper then the normal persons are, he usually has his right eye covered with his hair. His Charcoal grey eyes tell a history of fear and redemption now a uncanny joy however a deeper look reveals a deep seeded hatred, he has a wrap around his right arm and left leg. He has his headband tied like a bandana, with black leather gloves that have holes on the knuckles to quote increase the ferocity of his punches but they are secretly just a fashion choice . His nails are kind of sharper then the normal persons are, he always has his right eye covered with his hair.
Forehead Protector:Anth Wears His Headband Tied on his head but Backwards
Personality:Anth is a very happy go lucky guy he tends to look on the positive and is one who would rather be depressed and pick up someone elses spirits. He is very set in his ways and has extreme distaste for anything that strays from the status quo, he Loves the way his life is going now and will stop at nothing to keep it the way it is. It is hard for Anth to become close to someone but after he does, he will stick with you to the end which he will ensure that his end is before yours. He loves joking around unless the situation calls for a more serious attitude he jokes to cheer people up, when most times he needs cheering up himself but he's a mostly selfless guy. Anth has been seen in his free time playing with academy students or cleaning the local lake, he only acts surious during his training attempting to perfect his newest jutsu. He takes his training very seriously, and when interrupted by what he considers to be useless nonsense he becomes very angry, he only does it because he feels he must perfect his Jutsu to help him protect his friends.
Maybe the only thing he feels is almost as important as protecting the world around him is that he makes sure to make a lasting impression on those around him, so that he will not be forgotten. He is very dedicated and will rarely quit, but only if continuing could bring more harm then giving up. He is very friendly and wants to be liked by everyone, this sometimes leaves him disappointed as he has been told by everyone you can't please every person, he absolutely refuses to accept it in any way shape or form he therefore tries to change his personality to best fit the person he is around. More to make those around him comfortable then anything, his pure attitude of trying to help everyone around him usually leaves Anth exhausted and not to much caring about his own appearence.
Clan:N/A
Nindō:Whatever Will Be Will Be. Anth takes life as it comes never trying to alter the way the world works He is very set in his ways and likes everything to stay status Quo.
THE NINJA.
Origin:Mizu No Kuni
Affiliation:Kirigakure
Rank:Genin
Specialties:First:Kugetsu Second:Taijutsu
Elemental Affinities:Main:Katon Sub:Fuuton
Combat Style:Anth uses His Puppet Mortis to double as a copy of himself making the opponent think he specializes in clone jutsu or something similar, if he is in a situation where he cannot summon Mortis he prefers to use Taijutsu to exclusively conserve chakara for when he is able to summon Mortis. If the opponent sees through the ruse of Mortis being a doppleganger Anth prefers to use Mortis upclose in a mix of taijustu and weaponry. Since he is a Puppetry user even when using Taijutsu he tries to refrain from using chakra, he also protects his wrists as to not damage the summoning pads to summon Mortis. His main source of strength and his best position to attack from is far away from the opponent with Mortis doing most of the heavy lifting depending on the number of enemies and thier rank, he may also use taijutsu just to conserve weapons in Mortis. If at all possible Anth tries to prevent being in a situation with little chakra because he won't be able to use Mortis for long and in that situation Anth usually has to choose between trying to use the last of his chakra for Mortis or using taijutsu.
Special Characteristics:
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Name: Increased Chakra Capacity
Rank: C
Type: Chakra Based
Physical Requirements: N/A
Training Requirements: A 600 word training post is required to gain this special characteristic.
Description: Through extensive meditation and physical training the ninja's chakra capacity increases by 20CP.
THE BACKGROUND.
History:- Spoiler:
There are certian members that excel among others All of these exceptional members are marked with a small burn into thier back however in the Generation before the current one these children thought it was unfair to be treated differently though the differences were not that drastic, in fact the difference were in thier favor the actual problem was they were ostricized by the other children the Special children however began to resent them back and resenting the adults for not stopping it. They grew up mostly as troublemakers the mark on thier back identifying them as trouble makers in turn the entire village began to reject them, the special children grew not only to resent them but to outright hate them finally as they became adults and tensions boiled to a level just below violenece the Special children decided to Fragment and become a new branch making their own clan. The left from Konoha and moved to Mizu No Kuni Naturally attracted to the Hidden Village within they lived as a mercenary corps using the Talents that once shuned them to sustain them, however with them being few in numer the flood of requests for cheap mercenaries left them spread thin usually handaling each job alone coupled with the feeling of being outsiders to all around them the feeling of lonelness crept up around them without them noticing. they figured the way to destroy this lonely feeling instead of connecting with each other, they crafted Ninja Puppets loyal companions that were with them through thick and thin helped with the depression. As they handeled more and more requests they rose thier price and the floods of requests slowed down they got used to life in Mizu and for a time they were happy......For a Time. The children that hated thier siblings didn't forget them just because they moved to another country they hired mercenaries that had worked before with the Special Siblings to eliminate them all, they came in the night to cath them by suprise and even though they did the battlefield made it look otherwise every special sibling had taken at least one of the Hired Blades with them , by the end of it thier were puppet part and blood strewn everywhere more so then the bodies. And in a Hidden backroom under a blanket silently crying and having witnessed the bloodshed sat a 3 year old boy the sole survivor of the slaughter, The Reletives acting oblivious came to observe the carnage the authorites however had failed to mention the boy that survived and so they were forced to take him back to Konoha the Boys name is Anthossit and he is the last of the special Sitrom.
Childhood
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Seeing as he wasn't wanted there it was easy for anyone to belive that Anth didn't have the best Childhood, He was stuck with the Worst jobs and hardest jobs and if he complained the would claim that he's special even though Sitorm didn't know that had any meaning. Plus the Kids Called him worst it seemed odd to Anth though that they would talk bad at him and spit insults towards him though they never actually hit Anth it was almost as if they were afraid of him , at first Anth like the invinciblity the thought that they could say what they wanted but would never come near them. Eventually however he began to fear himself what was it that the kids didn't want to be near him, why whenever he yelled back at the adults there was just a glint of fear in their eyes what made him so different what made him so.........special?
Teenager/Present
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The week leading up to Anth's birthday everything seemed to be going his way the kids were being nicer to him, adults let him skip a day of chores. It was nice but after 8 years of treating him as sub human it should have made him secure but it only made him suspsucious, one day after school on the trail home Anth saw two of his cousin walking ahead he wanted to join them but they would just shoo him away, he did however over hear thier conversation "Can you belive it how could the adults keep a secret from us like that?" Anth had a sinking feeling they were talking about him. "I know we could have totally used the whole dead parents line Anth got glassy eyed his parents had died in an accident they tormented him about it but this seemed different more serious. "I Mean not really an Accident when a band of Hired blades charging in and slitting thier throats. Everything stopped time slowed down Anth Struggled to breathe he knelt and set his backpack down bracing himself on a nearby fence and sat his head spinning, he was told they died in a boating accident his brain was racing his face was hot and pulsing he was confused and sat looking excatly as he felt after a few minutes the confusion faded and it was replaced with rage. This was all another way for them to try and crush him to stop him from achieveing success if your parents were murdered it messes with you he thought they want to drop it all on me when i feel that everything is finally getting better he boiled with anger, he wanted to slaughter them all gut them with thier own knives but he couldn't he wasn't near strong enough besides he had a better idea. He Picked up his Bag and walked home wiping his eyes ready to implement his plan of Vengence using the one tool he had that they didn't. Fear.
15th Birthday
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They all sung to him Half heartedly in the snide way they did whenever they had to put on the Facade that they cared he blew out the candals and then the Head of the clan said that he had to make an announcement Anth tried to look interested and Then Boom. He dropped the news even know they tried to hide it Anth noticed a few smirks among his cousions but he sat unphased and simply asked "So can we eat the cake now?" Everyone looked Taken a Back there was even an audible gasp Anth had to look down to hide his smirk "So is that a yes on the Cake?"
When Anth picked up the knife a few of the adults stood back he simply cut the cake and Ate feeling better then he ever had
He Now had a Renewed Vigor He Didn't have to worry about any of his Clanmates cause they all stayed out of his way all the better for Anth he could focus on school, Graduating with honors not that anyone at home cared he now set himself a new goal, Find who ordered the death of his parents and end them this would be even easier because as is customary with his clan along with graduation he got his Puppet Mortis together they would Avenge his Parents. But he couldn't excatly avenge his parents in the outside of the village they were killed in, plus he would want to be back where it all began when he ended it. So he packed up and moved back to the misty country Mizu No Kuni.
Roleplay Sample:- Spoiler:
Stone walls, hanging chains, a cold and gritty floor . . . thick memories like a torrential raging flood overwhelm me. I would have you know; however, this time around I am aware, so very much aware of the reasons for my imprisonment. These reasons you will soon discover, but in the first confinement, the one holding my king’s fury, I knew nothing—no causes, no answers, no justifications. And it is there that lay the beginnings of this dark and ominous anger within me.
I feared death then for naught, yet now death is certain. This I know. Here in my foreboding cave--this cell--the sounds come to me from above. Chanting crowds call in unison, filling these lower chambers with the rhythms of insistence: Death to the apostate! Kill him! Kill him! Crucify him on the rail! Hang him! Drawn and quartered! They call, and I know the calls are for me. Fatefully, it appears that the maddening fear of age-long
freedom’s loss has again come, and this time definitely. Even so, to the Jhemani a man without freedom is a punishment death is heir to.
Thinking back to that time before: I remember, hanging in my chains, hearing the horrible screams of terror gushing like blood from the castle walls . . . screams they were, not for me, but screams of hurt, of an anguish that only death could cure. When the sounds came no more, a dark and gloomy silence followed—a thick silence unlike any I had ever experienced. It covered me as if a cold pail of confusion and scorn had been hurled across my face—a waste that dried into a callous film of resentment from which flakes of sadness soon would fall. I struggled to accept my reality, my injustice, but it came not easily. Yet the ever present why could not be satisfied. The quiet—thick as earth’s black ooze—hard-pressed me, and I began to lose any sense of proportion.
THE ARSENAL. Jutsu
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Academy - Spoiler:
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Element: N/A
Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread.
Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand.
Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu.
Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed.
Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: NA
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Genjutsu
Range: N/A
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others.
Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Puppetry - Spoiler:
Name: Soushuriken no Jutsu - Manipulate Shuriken Technique
Rank: D
Type: Puppetry
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m), Far (10+)
Element: N/A
Description: After hurling his/her giant shuriken, the user can control their path and movements by using wires which run from the shuriken itself back to his arm. Because his/her opponent will think they are normal shuriken, they will be off guard about their ability to redirect themselves.
Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Kawara Shuriken - Roof Tile Shuriken
Rank: C
Type: Puppetry
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: This jutsu is similar in principle to Manipulating Attack Blades, but uses spinning tiles instead of regular weapons. In addition to being able to control the tiles remotely, the user can pressurize the tiles with chakra to make them far stronger than normal and capable of dealing the same damage as regular shuriken.
Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Kugutsu no Jutsu • Puppetry Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to use a puppet to attack from afar in battle. This is done by using chakra and forming them into strings which are then emitted from the fingers to the puppet. Should the user’s hands become disabled, either through physical injury or chakra impairment, this technique becomes neutralized.
Chakra Cost: 5 (2 Per Post)
Name: Soushuuha - Manipulate Advancing Blades
Rank: C
Type: Puppetry
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Mid (5m - 10m)
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to hover multiple kunai in the air with their chakra, and direct them to an opponent. Using this technique, the user can unleash a torrent of kunai much more quickly than if each one was thrown individually. By using the Puppet Technique with this jutsu, the user may control discarded or already used weapons.
Chakra Cost: 7
Kiri Specific - Spoiler:
Name: Tsunami Yajirushi - Tsunami Arrow
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m)
Element: N/A
Village: Kirigakure.
Description: The user begins the technique by jumping, performing a spinning drop kick aimed at the chest of the target. Given the force that comes with the kick along with the spin, extreme pressure is placed on the chest and the rotation is enough to push the target back a few meters, causing a mild brush burn on the chest area.
Chakra Cost: 5
Taijutsu - Spoiler:
Name: Dynamic • Entry - Dainamikku • Entorii
Rank: D
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: This jutsu simply appears to be a flying jump kick, often performed on the face of an enemy, while dramatically screaming the words "Dynamic Entry".
Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Konoha Reppuu - Leaf Violent Wind
Rank: D
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The move here is a simple rear spinning low kick, but a strong enough user can send a large adult flying as if they weighed nothing. The goal is to throw the enemy off balance, and deal damage to the lower half of their body.
Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Konoha Senpuu - Leaf Whirlwind
Rank: D
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A taijutsu where one launches a succession of high kicks and low kicks. Firstly, the opponent's evasion margin is restrained upon seeing the high kick, thus augmenting the chances for the low kick to hit the mark.
Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Konoha Kage Buyou - Leaf Shadow Dance
Rank: D
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: Konoha Kage Buyou is a Taijutsu technique that is used to position a ninja's opponent into a vulnerable aerial position. The ninja will first quickly appear below their opponent, then with a switch upper kick they will launch their target into the air. The ninja will then jump into the air to "shadow" the target with the target's back to their chest. This move is used before preforming "Omote Renge - Front Lotus" or "Shishi Rendan - Lion Combo".
Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Dynamic • Action (Dainamikku • Akushon)
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The user flips towards the opponent and attacks with a series of punches and kicks.
Chakra Cost: 8
Name: Konoha Dai Senkou - Leaf Great Light Rotation
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The user charges at their opponent and unleashes a powerful lateral kick aiming at the head that will spin his or her opponent away. This technique can certainly cause a head ache.
Chakra Cost: 8
Name: Konoha Dai Senpuu - Leaf Great Whirlwind
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A series of kicking attacks, starting from a low kick and linking into a middle kick and high kick then finishing off with a heel drop. As the rotation speed picks up the user gains buoyancy, which they use to shift into gradually higher attacks.
Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Kurotchishotto - Crotch Shot
Rank: D
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m)
Element: -
Description: Kurotchishotto is a humiliating taijutsu technique. By appearing in front of the opponent, the user will charge a small amount of chakra towards their dominant leg. Performing an upward kick at the opponents crotch area, they will be able to force them up into the air by a metre where a second attack could take place. If the victim was a male, a great deal of pain will be dealt after the kick has been made.
Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Konoha Shoufuu - Leaf Rising Wind
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: This jump uses the entire body as a spring by amassing power in the legs before kicking upwards. Because the power of the kick from the ground is instantly converted into a blow, the enemy hit with this attack will be launched high into the sky.
Chakra Cost: 5
Name: Shishi Rendan - Lion Combo
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The user first uses the "Konoha Kage Buyou - Leaf Shadow Dance" to manuever his/her opponent in a vulnerable aerial position. While shadowing his/her opponent, the user will attempt to strike them from a vulnerable angle. If he/she is unable to make a clean strike, he/she will strike anyway as a feint, to draw his/her target's attention and defense to one area. The user can then strike the undefended area and begin knocking them downwards towards the ground. As the enemy falls back to the earth, the user will deftly rotate his/her body around to deliver a full force kick to their chest.
Chakra Cost: 7
Name:Mortis
Rank:C
Appearance:Mortis is a tall lumbering skinny puppet made out of a wooden plating with a metalic inside, but on the outside Mortis resembles a skeletal figure that is related with the Angel of death, he also has a black robe with a mane of fur around the crown of his head said cloak covers all of its features other then its head his eyes are pupilless with just the whites staring at Anth's opponets it also has two gold flames around its eyes in a goldish hue, merely for visual preference and fear, and other than that simply resembles an oversized skeleton. His arms are skinny and box like and his hands are white. The chakra strings that connect Mortis to Anth jut from each joint in his arm and at his neck to activate his head modification.
Body Slots:
Slot 1:
Name: Ninjato
Rank: D
Slots Required: 1
Type: Swords
Description: Short and straight, this blade takes a similar form of a katana, but without the curvature in the blade. With the blade measuring no more than one and a half feet, and a square guard on top, this weapon has been popularized by many ninja, especially the ANBU, hence the name. The Blade that Mortis is equipped with is hidden within his arms and when his hands unhinged it is propelled to the wrists and used as a normal sword it can also be shot at opponet but there is not another one so this is usually not used by Anth. In addition the blade cannot be fired faster then a kunai thrown by the average shinobi
Slot 2:
Name: Senbon Launcher
Rank: C
Slots Required: 1
Type: Exotic
Description: Usually hidden on either of the user's forearm under loose cloth, this launcher can be used to send needles at their opponents at higher speeds with better accuracy. Up to five needles can be launched at once, resulting in deadly surprise. The Senbon launcher is hidden inside Mortis' head and is reloaded by Anth opening the front of his head and loading them manually, this is a long process to go through and is almost impossible to do in the middle of battle this causes Anth to use them sparingly usually in 3-5 shot bursts.There is a total of 30 Senbon stored in Mortis' head at a time located on a spool where Mortis' tounge would be Anth must place each individual senbon in at a time.When he does do it it takes Anth about 3 posts outside of battle and 5 during. Since the senbon come from the head and are fed down threw the arms there is no specific number that each arm fires and it
is solely dependent on Anth's decision
Slot 3:
Name: Hand Augments
Rank: C
Slots Required: 2
Type: Modification
Description:
The hand of Mortis' left hand unhinges at the wrists to let contraptions hidden within Mortis' arms become open to the outside
Slot 4:
Name: N/A
Rank:
Slots Required:
Type:
Description:
Slot 5:
Name: Head Rotation
Rank: C
Slots Required: 2
Type: Modification
Description: The head of Mortis can spin 360 degrees and stop in any direction however when aiming upwards and attempting this can sometimes cause jamming
Slot 6:
Name: N/A
Rank:
Slots Required:
Type:
Description:
FACE CLAIM.
Character Claim:Anthossit
Source:Google Images 
Image URL:https://i.servimg.com/u/f75/18/09/10/50/7200-111.jpg
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|  | | Emperor of Rock
Age : 32
Posts : 869
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Sat 02 Feb 2013, 5:47 pm | |
| Appearance has coding problem and it's too short. So is personality.
You have puppetry as skill yet you have no puppet at all.
You cannot have Medical or Genjutsu justsus yet so please remove them.
You are allowed to start with 15 jutsus without counting the Academy ones.
I suggest reading the Rules and Guides thread and follow them while making the character. |
| | | | Kite
Age : 34
Posts : 1209
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Sat 02 Feb 2013, 11:38 pm | |
| I'd also suggest looking at our other character apps to get an idea of what you'll need. Don't hesitate to PM me or any of the other creations mods if you have questions.  |
| | | | Thantosis
Age : 27
Posts : 16
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Thu 07 Feb 2013, 11:16 pm | |
| | rdy |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 30
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Sun 10 Feb 2013, 1:50 am | |
| - Quote :
- NameAnthossit Sitorm:
A little typo there, might wanna fix that.
Personality should be longer.
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- Elemental Affinities:Main:Kanton Sub:Fuuton
Katon, not Kanton.
Combat style needs to be longer, even if just by a little bit.
You only have 12 jutsu that I counted, and you're allowed 15. It's not required, but if you want you can add a little more there.
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- Name: Konoha Dai Senpuu - Leaf Great Whirlwind
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A series of kicking attacks, starting from a low kick and linking into a middle kick and high kick then finishing off with a heel drop. As the rotation speed picks up the user gains buoyancy, which they use to shift into gradually higher attacks.
Chakra Cost: There is no chakra cost listed on that, so you need to put that in there.
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| | | | Thantosis
Age : 27
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| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Wed 13 Feb 2013, 7:29 pm | |
| | Butt Rape.............I Mean bump |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 30
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Fri 15 Feb 2013, 10:14 am | |
| - Quote :
- Slot 1:
Name: Ninjato The hand unhinges, and the blade shoots out like it's spring loaded, correct? And then, once the blade is out, you can also shoot the blade? Please specify that it is not faster than a normally thrown kunai by your average shinobi; sound good?
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- Slot 2:
Name: Senbon Launcher So the launchers are on the hands, but the main compartment is in the head, correct? and it reloads through the head - and this is something that the puppet does by itself? You're going to need to clarify that a bit more. Talk about how it is reloaded, how long it takes in posts, and what must be done. What is more, you mention that the senbon launcher shoots about five senbon in total - are you talking about five from each arm? If so, clarify that. Lastly, you're going to need to just blatantly tell how many senbon you're able to fire IN TOTAL. So, if a pack of the senbon had thirty senbon in them, that would mean each hand could shoot (in total) fifteen senbon in three bursts of five each. You're going to need that kind of clarification; sound good?
All of your Kirigakure specific jutsu need to be removed, seeing as they're ninjutsu, and you can own ninjutsu seeing as that's not a specialty of yours. So you're going to have to remove those. Note that there are some Kirigakure specific taijutsu in there, if you want to put those on the app!
Fix that, and I'll check back!
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| | | | Thantosis
Age : 27
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| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Sat 16 Feb 2013, 8:27 am | |
| Bumper Cars
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| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 30
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| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Sat 16 Feb 2013, 8:40 am | |
| - Quote :
- Affiliation: Mizu no Kuni
Change this to Kirigakure.
Do that, and I think you'll be good.
EDIT: The image you're using right now is Dante from Devil May Cry, which has already been face claimed. So you're going to have to change that. Cool?
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| | | | Thantosis
Age : 27
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| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Sat 16 Feb 2013, 8:34 pm | |
| Good?
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| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 30
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Sun 17 Feb 2013, 5:09 am | |
| Haha, nope.
Origin = Mizu no Kuni
Affiliation = Kirigakure |
| | | | Thantosis
Age : 27
Posts : 16
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Sun 17 Feb 2013, 6:37 am | |
| Done Fingers crossed?
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| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 30
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Mon 18 Feb 2013, 12:57 am | |
| Approved 1/2 |
| | | | MsMoney
Age : 37
Posts : 2201
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Mon 18 Feb 2013, 4:38 pm | |
| So,
- Your personality needs to be a tad bit longer, and also please separate it into like two paragraphs so it's not such a big block of text. I also want to ask you to proofread your posts and be careful that they will actually make sense, as I gotta say you got me confused a few times while I was reading over your personality. You also have quite a few grammar errors, and if you could take a moment and read over your application to fix a few of those it would be appreciated. An example of errors or confusing sentences will be quoted below, just so you see what I'm talking about: (I only take a small part, but keep in mind that we want posts on this site to be easily read and understood (and with a good grammar). Sometimes it's best to end a sentence and start a new one, rather than let one sentence carry out for a long time.)
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- He is good about changing the color of his shirts though he has a shirt for every day of every week and then starts from the top the next month, though it is hard to notice when but he does the same with pants but he doesnt have as many varieties.
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- He is very very set in his ways this isnt because his life is in disarry but the exact oppisite
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- is hard to become close to but after you do he will stick with you to the end which he will ensure that his is before yours.
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- unless the stuation
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- more serious attiude
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- he only acts surious
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- maybe the only thing he feels is almost as important as protecting the world around him is that he aims to make sure that he makes a lasting impression on those around him, so that he will not be forgotten.
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- siblings didn't not forget them
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- saw two of his cousions
- I would like for you to proofread your combat style and change the grammar errors you see there. This section is something that should be very clear. Also, place into it his main weakness and main strength.
- You are missing one jutsu from the academy list:
- Code:
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[b]Name:[/b] Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique
[b]Rank:[/b] E
[b]Type:[/b] Genjutsu
[b]Range:[/b] N/A
[b]Medium:[/b] Optical
[b]Element:[/b] N/A
[b]Description:[/b] This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others.
[b]Chakra Cost:[/b] 1CP per 5 clones
- I can't click the link to your FC.
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| | | | Thantosis
Age : 27
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| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Thu 21 Feb 2013, 9:09 pm | |
| | Explosion |
| | | | MsMoney
Age : 37
Posts : 2201
| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Fri 22 Feb 2013, 2:30 am | |
| (2/2) approved.
Now you can make your account here. |
| | | | Sloth
Age : 31
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| | Subject: Re: Sitorm, Anthossit [Kiri Genin] Fri 05 Apr 2013, 7:44 pm | |
| | Unapproved due to user inactivity. |
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