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| ![Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Naruto_anbu0006](http://media.animegalleries.net/albums/Naruto/anbu/naruto_anbu0006.jpg?=123) Kuwahara, Jin.THE INFO.
Name: Kuwahara, Jin
Nickname: Ijou
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Covered with a black robe and a white cat mask with whiskers and two round eyes, standing at 1.75 metres, weighing 70 kilos, Ijou certainly gives off an intimidating look. His wooden sandals also give off a slight sound when walking, coupled with his slow and strange movements and mannerisms, he is one person you don't want walking up to you unexpectedly. Though he slightly resembles a Konahagakure anbu member, he gives more of a shady person look. Ijou doesn't remember how he looks underneath, because he never looks at a mirror, but he has projected in his mind an image of himself.
In this image, he has black hair to his shoulders, black pupils, a wide grin with sharp teeth and horn that stick out of his head. He is reminicent of a devil figure, bent on killing and destruction. He moves around like a maniac, cutting, slahing, scratching, biting. Forever standing over the corpses of his enemies, shining with a dark aura that overshadows anything behind him. He may very well look that way, or it might be just a paranoiac image, who knows.
Also, he(the real Ijou) has quite a few physical mannerisms, like the use of hand gestures when really focused halfway through a speech. Ijou will uncharacteristically start using hand gestures when he really involves himself in a conversation or monolgue. Either to further express his point or to make the listener more physically involved. Also, he claps when he hears something interesting or noteworthy. Often times it comes off as strange and akward.
Another interesting feature is Ijou's pale skin tone. His hands, feet, legs, neck bare a resemblance to that of a corpse. He has fully functioning organs, yet his skin tone alarms him. So often times he wears white gloves over his hands, or he will be extra cautious in hinding his neck. He understands the irony in wearing white gloves to cover your white hands, but it's part of his image of a medical ninja: black robes and white gloves.
Forehead Protector: Used as a belt of sorts, wrapped around the robe just below the waist.
Personality:
After being influenced by many different philosophies and religions, to have any real understanding of his way of thought would be to dig into these very philosophies and religions.
The Death God cult
Shinigami(death god) cultists bring utter destruction and death. Shinigami is the evil god, the evil heart, the evil design. Going the route of this religion is an easy way out for murderers, rapists, and criminals, because it is a God that does not forsake such acts, but encourages them. What atrracted Ijou to this religion was it's core principal to spread chaos. Chaos breeds progress, creativity and productivity in his mind.
Way of the Ninja Monk
Ninja monks are secluded people that dedicate their lives to spirituality and live in ninja temples. At first Ijou read up on them just to mock them in his mind, but he gradually found out the meditation practised by ninja monk helped calm his violent urges. He has no affiliation with the actual ninja monks however.
Kuroanahi- Black Hole Sun
The myth of the Black Hole Sun(Kuroanahi) states, that when the shinobi world is in utter stagnation the sky will tear and a black hole will bring about chaos to the world. Nobody knows where it started, but it predates the Sage of the Six Paths. In Ijou's mind, Kuroanahi is the remedy to today's stagnate world, he believes himself to be, in a way, someone who represents what the Blach Hole Sun is.
Though he has many beliefs, one has to understand that Ijou, at least at this point in his life, is highly delusional and possibly borderline insane. He doesn't fully comprehend that he has these ideas of what the world should be like and what his part is in all of it. To reduce his high anxiety, in other words, to reduce his "crazyness", he constantly has to take anti axiety pills, so there appear two different sides of Ijou. The Ijou without the anti axiety drugs and the one with them.
With anti axiety drugs
Calm, quiet, observant, self contained. In this state Ijou's breakdowns are somewhat manageable. He will feel killer's intent from time to time and he might do things that are generally uncharacteristical to him, but most of the time he's contained.
Without the drugs
Outrageous, bipolar, dangerious. Ijou's mind becomes foggy, he doesn't think before acts anymore, he just acts. He might start talking gibberish, he might assault someone nearby, he might do absolutely nothing, but that's the thing, he becomes unpredictable.
Even with the two split personalities, Ijou has been attempting to solve his issues through meditation and various medicine. He realized that the shape he's currently in might worsen by the minute.
Clan: N/A
Nindō: "It's simple and beautiful. To spread chaos."
THE NINJA.
Origin: Land of Water
Affiliation: Kirigakure
Rank: Genin
Specialties: Eijutsu, Ninjutsu
Elemental Affinities: Doton, Suiton
Combat Style:
Experimentation
Though many say battle is not a place for failure, Ijou believes otherwise. One has to fail to learn, so he's not afraid to use unorthodox techniques and way of fighting in battle. While most medical nin would be concerned about their bodies, Ijou is not afraid to sacrifice his.
Precision
Even though he is willing to get hurt, he will never approach a battle just to get hurt. He fights with precision, attempting to execute everything with the highest amount of success possible. He will fight to survive, or, if the situation warrants it, to kill his opponent.
Close-medium range killer
Ijou's prefered range to battle is at close to medium range. He doesn't really engage in too much hand to hand fighting, but likes to constantly keep his opponent at his toes with his attacks. If he feels overwhelmed or outmanuevered by his opponent, he will switch to a more defensive stance. Prefered weapons at this range are kunai and senbon. He will use water and earth techniques for supplementary, defensive and offensive purposes.
Medical nin
Since he is a medical ninja, he uses encyclopedic and practical knowledge of the human body to his advantage. He knows which spots on the human body hurt the most, which cause numbness or even paralysis, which, when hit, cause internal or external bleeding. Naturally, this knowledge not only helps him on the offensive. With medical jutsu he can treat himself while in and after battle.
Special Characteristics:
Advanced Chakra Control
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Name: Advanced Chakra Control.
Rank: D-S.
Type: Chakra Based.
Physical Requirements: Must specialize in Medical Ninjutsu or Genjutsu, and must not have an Increased Chakra Capacity or Bijuu.
Training Requirements: 700.
Description: An exceptional attribution that one is innately born with and further invokes during the course of their training. Chakra Control is key to preserving your stamina which will increase your vitality and enable you to use techniques to it's fullest capacity. It is essential for nearly all specialties of Ninjutsu but is heavily coveted in the areas of Medical Ninjutsu and Genjutsu which require good chakra in order to perform their techniques proficiently. Those with Advanced Chakra Control however are able to take it to the next step and preserve more noticeable chakra from their standard pool. Depending on the rank of the technique, a small quantity of chakra is preserved within the body when executed the Jutsu, which ultimately lowers the cost of your techniques. Furthermore because your Chakra Control is so flawless and exceptional, your Surface Walking and Water Walking techniques no longer cost chakra because you can now perform them effortlessly. This technique does not lower the cost chakra points going towards maintaining a jutsu, only creating them.
D Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 1 CP.
C Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 2 CP.
B Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 4 CP.
A Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 8 CP.
S Rank Jutsu - Costs are reduced by 12 CP.
THE BACKGROUND.
History:
"It always rained in our forest, and the rain washed away everything: tears, blood, feelings, memories..."
Jin was born in a small wooden house, in one Kirigakure's Island of Tranquility forests. His father lovingly held him in his hands, while the exhausted, but ultimately smiling mother looked at her newborn. This example of fatherly authority ruled the household when Jin was growing up. He never ventured beyond the wooden house until he was five years old, and even then, he always went outside with his father alongside him. Searching for healing herbs, and observing his father use magical blue aura to heal seemingly dead animals was the whole world for him. Not that his mother was out of the picture, she was the source of warmth and humanity, the polar opposite to his rather emotionless father.
Time went by quickly and Jin's grasp on reality became tighter. The topic of him leaving the safe haven of the house was brought up more and more often, almost always by his mother. A decision was made to let Jin attend the Kirigakure academy, but only as soon as his father got a job working at the village morgue. Which he did soon enough, and Jin finally got the chance to explore the world beyond the wooden house and forest. A world filled with agony and despair as he would later find out.
The academy years were part of an observational period for Jin. He observed and devoured information as much and as often as he could. Human interaction, the workings of the ninja world, the amazing powers bestowed to humans known as jutsu-everything fascinated him. He always stayed overtime at the academy, not only because he had to wait for his father's job to end, but because he was geniunely insterested in the teachings passed down at the academy and would often play ninja with other kids, gleefully laughing and running around. He couldn't get enough of life.
On the day of his graduation, his father let him celebrate with his peers and go back home alone, as a sign that he accepted Jin as a fully fledged ninja that could take care of himself. Jin accepted the honor with pride, attempting to leave the main island on time to be back home by 7 pm. Just as he left the sight of the village, he suddenly saw a figure among the mist. The figure was accompanied by the sudden slight ringing of bells. As the sound got closer, Jin's perception of time and space got hazy and by the time he realized he was under a genjutsu, it was too late, as he was already asleep.
Jin never talked in his sleep, but this time he felt as if he did. In the dream, he was floating on water, stomatch down and with his head in the water. Underwater, there was a mirrage of a cat mask, to which he was talking non stop. At first about his experiences at the academy, about his friends, but the water turned darker and darker and somehow he felt intimidated to talk about his family, where they live...The mirage was getting slowly more and more distorted and it felt like the water had become a mass of darkness that enveloped Jin. It was dark, dark, dark...And then...
His father. Shaking him. Oh god. What's with his eyes? No pupils? Why is he shaking him? Why is he crying blood? Is that Jin's mother laying in a pool of blood? Is she dead? Please let her be alive. Jin starts screaming. He pushes away his father. His face bloody with his father's tears. Trying to comprehend the situation. Too much. Too much to handle. He faints.
Hours later drops of water encourage him to wake up. It was rainning heavily. The wooden house was as quaint as ever, but the smell of blood dominated the yard, with his parents laying on the spring grass. Jin couldn't face them. At first it was guilt, since he had comprehended, after hours of crying and bashing his fist to the ground beforehand, that he was at fault, he had led the stranger, the third corpse, to his family, but soon that guilt evolved into paranoia. He just couldn't look at his dead father and mother with his own face, he wanted peel off it off with his muddy fingers, he felt disgusted with it. He could look at the third corpse though. He tried concentrating his anger at it, but the corpse had no emotion, so he eventually just became more angry with himself. Jin started convincing himself that he had killed his parents. That he was the black robed, cat masked figure. After all, it was easier for him to think that he had killed his father and mother, than some stranger. Yes, that was it. Had had killed his parents. He took the mask, and took the black oversized robes. Now he could look at the corpses of his dead father and mother. Now he was the killer. He could act like a killer and leave his victims just there, laying. It would be easier than dealing with them. And so he left. With the rain behind him. Washing away the tears, the blood, the feelings, the memories, his whole previous existence...
Jin was no longer. He formed a new persona known as Ijou, which meant change, and for four years that followed, he enveloped himself in various philosophies, religions and ways of thought, all the while working as a medical ninja in the village. He was looking for something that justified him killing his parents, something that would help him continue on with his life but instead of finding peace and solace, he found himself insane.
Roleplay Sample:
The morgue was a place where few ventured voluntarily. It had a whole atmosphere of negativity that induced one bad memory after another. Whether it was the death of your grandfather, your grandmother, or your parents, the morgue was sure to remind you of the inevitable process of death. It was a perfect place for Ijou, because he wanted to be reminded.
Always sneaking into the morgue without having any real credentials, he would do all of his work overnight. Tearing up bodies, examining the insides, then sewing them up with extreme care, it was a an enjoyable past time for the 15 year old teenager. The human body really was a wonder in his mind. So complicated and beatiful: connections between connections. Yet so frail, one fatal part stops working, the whole body shuts down.
One time he found the body of a baby in one of the morgue containers. The newborn had a an enlarged head, most likely a tumor, but otherwise seemed to had been born a few moments ago, still unwashed and with an expression yearning for life. That brought up the thought of birth and life in Ijou‘s mind. Giving life is where one starts his journey, everything around him from that moment influences him in a way. A baby born in one family might grow up as a completely different human being in a different family. It‘s a beatiful thing life. Yet for this frail, not yet formed as a human being in any way except for his basic bodily functions creature, life ended when it started. He didn‘t get to feel love, happyness, excitement, regret, sorrow, hate... But maybe that‘s better. Nobody knew the exact life this baby would have had, there are no pre-determined paths all humans take. We just act and make the best of it.
After a few minutes of thought, Ijou shook his head, opened up the infant and started examining.
THE ARSENAL.
Academy jutsu
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Name: Bunshin no Jutsu • Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type: Genjutsu
Range: N/A
Medium: Optical
Element: N/A
Description: This technique creates identical clones of the user. However, they hold no actual substance and will disperse upon impact of an attack or contact with an opponent. They cannot disrupt the area around themselves with their movements; won’t kick up dust, crush grass, etc. They are simply optical illusions used to momentarily fool others.
Chakra Cost: 1CP per 5 clones
Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another object or person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured. The user does not gain the properties of their transformation (ie. horse like strength), and may only transform into something ranging between 1/2 of their regular size, to 2x their regular size. Thus one cannot transform into large creatures.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Element: N/A
Description: After performing a tiger seal, this technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead. The object that the user switches with must be preset somewhere else in the thread, meaning that the object must have received specific mention previously in the thread.
Chakra Cost: 2
Name: Explosive Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to activate an explosive tag they have planted somewhere. Preferably they should be within close to mid range and visible to the user. You cannot activate another persons explosive tags unless your chakra has been channeled into them beforehand.
Chakra Cost: 1 (per 3 explosive notes)
Name: Kai • Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them, although it consumes half the chakra cost of the Genjutsu.
Chakra Cost: Cost of Genjutsu + 2CP
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu • Escaping Skill
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to free themselves should they be tied up. It is extremely basic. Using their physical training, the user will twist and contort their body to loosen their bindings, effectively relieving themselves of the tightness of their bindings and slipping through the restraints. This technique can only be used if the user is of equal or higher rank than their captor.
Chakra Cost: 1
Name: Chozou no Jutsu • Storage Technique
Rank: E
Type: Fuuinjutsu, Supplementary
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: A simple jutsu that allows a ninja to seal or unseal any item, mostly weapons, from scrolls or from their body. After forming the necessary handsigns, the ninja will seal the item into a scroll etc. Scrolls can also be used as ammunition for other weapons or have other seals inside of them, which expands the number of potential tricks a shinobi can use. The items themselves are unaffected by time. Ninjutsu can also be stored in scrolls, to be released when the scroll is opened, but require another person to cast said Ninjutsu; else it cannot be sealed.
Chakra Cost: 1 to seal; 1 to unseal.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: NA
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: D
Type: N/A
Range: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall.
Chakra Cost: 1 (1 per post)
Ninjutsu[5]
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Name: Doton Gun no jutsu - Earth sensing technique
Rank: C
Type: N/A
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Medium(5m-10m), Far(10m+)
Element: Doton
Description: By touching any rock/earth like substance, the user is able send out a chakra signal through that substance around a 10m. radius in all directions(below, left, right, above) and sense any activity in that radius. For example, the user could touch the surface of the earth, and sense all underground activity within the range of the technique, like a shinobi hiding underground. Or if he was in a building, he could sense if there were any people walking above or below him and pinpoint their location.
Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Mizosoba no jutsu - Gap closer technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Medium(5m-7m)
Element: Doton
Description: The user forms three hand seals, then spits out chunks of rock, which form into a three meter wide disk. This technique is tandem with the tunneling jutsu.
Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Suirou no Jutsu - Water Prison Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: Suiton (Water)
Description: Suirou no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that utilizes water to imprison an opponent. The ninja forms the necessary hand seals which causes the water to form around the target into a spherical prison which only allows for limited movement. The ninja must keep their body touching the water prison to maintain its existence. If the contact is broken, the water falls away and their target is released. When combined with a solid bunshin technique, the ninja can imprison their target but still allow for a clone to attack others nearby.
Chakra Cost: 9 (2 per post)
Name: Yokoana no Jutsu - Tunnneling Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Far(10m+)
Element: Doton
Description: The user of this technique can create a tunnel in the ground by doing a string of three hand seals and slamming his hand on the ground. A 3 metre wide hole will appear that leads to the rest of the tunnel. The tunnel itself is very primitive, 1.60 metres tall, 3.5 meters wide and up to 20 meters in length.
Chakra Cost: 7
Name: Mappa Oni no jutsu - Underling Demon Technique
Rank: C, B
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m), Medium(5-10m)
Element: Suiton
Description: This technique allows the user to create a whip like demon creature out of any nearby open water based liquid source(for example blood, anything that is 50% or more water) within 3 meters by forming two hand seals. This creature is typically 5-7 centimeters in width and up to 7 metres in length. It's body looks exactly like a water whip and his head is twice as big as his body, with two 8 centimeter long fangs as teeth. It's speed can be compared to that of a snake about to jump on it's target. It can be destroyed by simply squishing it with bare hands or cutting it with kunai. It's only purpose is to have contact with the target, or to latch on to cloth, skin or muscle. Since it can be formed out of any water based liquid, it means that you can form it, for example, out of liquid poison and strike an open wound or make one by biting a muscle, effectively poisoning the target.
Since this creature isn't very durable and is easily destroyed, it's strength lies in numbers. You can create as many creatures as you want as long as your chakra pool and liquid reserves allow it, simply by forming the initial two hand seals. You cannot control the creature once it attaches to a target or splashes when directly hitting the target. No hand seals are needed at B rank if the water based liquid is within hand's reach(meaning you could use water bottles or potions and poisons attached directly to you).
Chakra Cost: C rank: 3 per liquid underling
Eijutsu[8]
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Name: Oshi Tezawari - Pressure Touch
Rank: D
Type: Medical Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: By emitting a pulse of chakra through the finger tips on the patient’s head pressure points, the user is able to relieve the headaches of any person, regardless of cause (stress, migraine, other ailments, alcohol consumption, etc.) The technique can have an offensive use as well, by altering the effects of the pressure exerted. The pressure will cause a severe headache at the target.
Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Onnetsusei Nami - Thermal Wave
Rank: D
Type: Medical Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The purpose of this technique is to return needed heat to the patient's body. The user sends a chakra wave to the patient’s chest to increase the blood flow, thus increasing the body temperature. The offensive use of this technique would be the heat wave causing the effects of a hot flash on the target. The sensation of heat usually begins in the face or chest, although it may appear elsewhere such as the back of the neck, and it can spread throughout the whole body. The heat can cause the target to feel light headed accompanied by a rapid heartbeat and sweating. The effect can last for 2-3 posts without interference.
Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Seiryou Nami - Cool Wave
Rank: D
Type: Medical Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The purpose of this technique is to cool down the temperature of an overheated body. The user sends a chakra pulse to the patient’s body, in order to open up the skin pores, pump up blood to the skin and widen the blood vessels nearest to the skin, or increase sweat production at the said area. All these effects cool down the body and make it return to normal temperatures. The offensive use of this technique would be of the similar origins, through contact the pulse emits a wave which cools the body where contacted. This effected area is no more than 40 cm in size and the affected area reacts much like any part of the body when cooled. Initial or brief contact merely cools the area, numbing it slightly to pain and reducing its speed of movement by 10%(in the case of limbs). If contact is maintained for more than one post, the limb or affected area will be further numbed and become slightly more brittle, making bones easier to break. The effects last for 2 posts after contact is broken.
Chakra Cost: 4
Name: Tsugimeichi no jutsu - Joint Location technique
Rank: D
Type: Medical Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: This is a quick method to fix a joint dislocation often used in battle by medical ninja. With this jutsu a medical nin is able to to relocate/reposition his own joint by applying chakra to the dislocated spot, then, in the case it was a dislocated shoulder, he would yank the arm so it would be going straight with the shoulder, relocating the shoulder. The chakra helps the bone relocate more smoothly, without the need of excessive force. It still causes extreme pain if no painkillers are applied. Only a battle hardened jonin is able to continue fighting completely unfazed after using this technique without any medicine.
Chakra Cost: 3
Name: Ninpou; Mainā Shibire Mizu - Minor Numbing Water
Rank: C
Type: Eijutsu
Element: Suiton
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m), Mid (5m~10m), Far (10m+)
Village: Kirigakure
Description: This jutsu is developed and trained within Kirigakure as a village specific jutsu. After the formation of the needed hand seals, the user will touch a glass of water, or some other small, contained source of water. After this is done, the user of this jutsu will cause a small portion of medical chakra to filtrate into the water, which is then entered into the patient upon drinking or through water based IVs. When this water is introduced into the patient's body, it'll act as pain medications normally act when on high doses, dulling most pains, other then those that are severe and extreme. This is a jutsu to bring about convenience. Please note that this chakra only lasts for five posts, ending at the beginning of the sixth post, and does not bring on any other effects of pain medications.
Chakra Cost: 6
Name: Shousen no Jutsu - Mystical Hand Technique
Rank: C-A
Type: Medical Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: Shousen Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilized by medical ninja. This technique allows the ninja to heal wounds by focusing their own chakra to their hands. If the higher the medical ninja's rank is the quicker they are able to heal more critical and serious injuries. Injuries of equal rank may be healed in 1 post, and completely restored in 2. If choosing to heal a wound higher than the rank of the Shousen used, it requires 2 extra posts per rank. Thus C-rank Shousen healing an A-rank wound would require 5 posts to fully heal, while a B-rank wound would require 3 posts for instance. If healing a lower-ranked wound with a higher-ranked Shousen, the wound is fully healed in one post as opposed to two.
Chakra Cost: C: 8CP (2 per post), B: 12CP (4 per post), A: 20CP (6 per post)
Name: Kisoku Kuchidashi - Airway Interference
Rank: C
Type: Medical Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: The user will focus chakra to their hands and release it to either the throat, in order to loosen the air ways, or the chest, in order to help the lungs expand. This will help the user or the patient breathe easier. A bastardized use of this technique causes the airways to constrict making it much harder for the target to breath. This technique lasts one post without continuous contact.
Chakra Cost: 6 [3CP for continuous use]
Name: Shindan Shuhou - Diagnosis Technique
Rank: C
Type: Medical Ninjutsu
Range: Close (0m - 5m)
Element: N/A
Description: After performing the needed handseals, the user releases a pulse of chakra through the patient’s body. The pulse then returns through their chakra network back into the user’s palms, giving them a mental image of where the chakra network seems to be flaring or lowering. This can give the user a better idea of the location and injury type that has been inflicted. For use in offense, this technique is capable to present a map of the opponent’s chakra network on contact which can be used to determine chakra natures and levels.
Chakra Cost: 8
Weaponry
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Name: Basic Medical Kit
Rank: C
Quantity: 1
Contents: 2 [50cm]Bandage Tape [2], 1 [500mL]Antiseptic bottle [1], 4 Gauze Pads [2],
4 Finger Splints [2], 1 All purpose Splint [3], 1 Sling [2], 2 Needle & Syringe [2], 6 Plastic Gloves [3], 10 Nutrition Pills [1], 6 Blood Pills [2], 2 Chakra Pill [2], 2 [200mL]Basic Antibiotic [2], 2 Scalpel [2], 1 [500mL]Saline ~ [1], 1 [5m]Sewing Thread [1], 2 Packet of Sewing Needles [2], 6 Senbon [2]
Name: Small Scroll
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Quantity: -
Description: Scrolls are an important asset to any ninja's arsenal, whether they are used for sealing, summoning or simple communication, scrolls have always found their home within a ninja's pouch or pocket. When stood, a small scroll will measure up to fifteen centimetres in height, with the scroll length itself reaching fifty centimetres.
Contents:
Free for future storage
Name: Small Scroll
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Quantity: -
Description: Scrolls are an important asset to any ninja's arsenal, whether they are used for sealing, summoning or simple communication, scrolls have always found their home within a ninja's pouch or pocket. When stood, a small scroll will measure up to fifteen centimetres in height, with the scroll length itself reaching fifty centimetres.
Contents:
Free for future storage
Name: Small Scroll
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Quantity: -
Description: Scrolls are an important asset to any ninja's arsenal, whether they are used for sealing, summoning or simple communication, scrolls have always found their home within a ninja's pouch or pocket. When stood, a small scroll will measure up to fifteen centimetres in height, with the scroll length itself reaching fifty centimetres.
Contents:
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|  | | Electricmonkey
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| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Mon 08 Apr 2013, 10:05 pm | |
| | Done. |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29
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| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Mon 08 Apr 2013, 11:48 pm | |
| Needs:- Longer appearance.
- Longer personality.
- Origin is just "Mizu no Kuni" or "Land of Water" so you can remove the "Kirigakure"
- Weaponry comes with two ranges that you can pick out of three total. You need to specify which are your two chosen ranges. Close, medium, and long range. It would look something like this:
Weaponry [Dom: Close; Sub: Long] <-- or whatever your desired ranges are.
- Combat style could be longer.
- Are you not going to have any special characteristics? Because there are currently none on the app. I highly suggest you add the one free special characteristic that you get at creation.
- Name: Senpuku o Mizu no jutsu • Hiding in Water Technique -- Hmmmm. This sounds too OP for a D rank jutsu. You're literally able to not only break your body down into water, hide for extended amounts of time, but avoid attacks this way. This jutsu (in the anime and manga) is seen being used by shinobi no lower than B rank. I dont think that D rank is going to cut it, and it would only work at C rank if there were severe limitations added.
- Name: Dendou Ranpu no jutsu- Electric Light Technique -- Just out of curiosity, what would happen if you shoved this ball of electric light into someone's face? Would it just blitz out and cause no damage, or would it burn them and cause pain? I am hoping for the first option.
- Name: Suiton: Mizurappa no Jutsu - Wild Water Wave technique -- What do you mean you can freely manipulate this water? You change change its direction? You can adjust it so that it's more likely to hit? Please specify, and note that I will not allow anything like that on a C rank jutsu.
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| | | | Electricmonkey
Posts : 18
| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Wed 10 Apr 2013, 4:38 pm | |
| - CleverYamanaka wrote:
Needs:- Longer appearance.
- Longer personality.
- Origin is just "Mizu no Kuni" or "Land of Water" so you can remove the "Kirigakure"
- Weaponry comes with two ranges that you can pick out of three total. You need to specify which are your two chosen ranges. Close, medium, and long range. It would look something like this:
Weaponry [Dom: Close; Sub: Long] <-- or whatever your desired ranges are.
- Combat style could be longer.
- Are you not going to have any special characteristics? Because there are currently none on the app. I highly suggest you add the one free special characteristic that you get at creation.
- Name: Senpuku o Mizu no jutsu • Hiding in Water Technique -- Hmmmm. This sounds too OP for a D rank jutsu. You're literally able to not only break your body down into water, hide for extended amounts of time, but avoid attacks this way. This jutsu (in the anime and manga) is seen being used by shinobi no lower than B rank. I dont think that D rank is going to cut it, and it would only work at C rank if there were severe limitations added.
- Name: Dendou Ranpu no jutsu- Electric Light Technique -- Just out of curiosity, what would happen if you shoved this ball of electric light into someone's face? Would it just blitz out and cause no damage, or would it burn them and cause pain? I am hoping for the first option.
- Name: Suiton: Mizurappa no Jutsu - Wild Water Wave technique -- What do you mean you can freely manipulate this water? You change change its direction? You can adjust it so that it's more likely to hit? Please specify, and note that I will not allow anything like that on a C rank jutsu.
Done done done done and done.
Expanded on appearance, personality and combat style, added a special characteristic. Reworked to the wording on the wild water wave technique and electric light techqniue, it should be clearer. Changed the hiding in water technique to C rank and added the limitation that you can only stay underwater as much as you can breathe underwater.
Now, it's basically the same as one would normally hide in water, except the user actually merges with the water. |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Fri 12 Apr 2013, 2:00 am | |
| - CleverYamanaka wrote:
Needs:- Longer appearance.
- Longer personality.
This, still.
Combat style also needs more still.
Pressing enter to add spaces in between your text to make it look longer is not what I meant 
Name: Senpuku o Mizu no jutsu • Hiding in Water Technique -- "Some human limitations apply?" What does that mean, exactly. You need to highly increase the chakra cost on this. I expect to see 9 chakra on this for activation, and two chakra points for every post. I also want a limit. |
| | | | Electricmonkey
Posts : 18
| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Fri 12 Apr 2013, 3:01 pm | |
| | Edited, expanded, added weaponry techniques and some other jutsu to closer meet the limit, I think it's done. |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Mon 15 Apr 2013, 9:35 am | |
| | I am assuming you're redoing your app. |
| | | | Electricmonkey
Posts : 18
| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Mon 22 Apr 2013, 2:19 pm | |
| | Yes, redid, ready for evaluation! |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29
Posts : 1688
| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Sat 27 Apr 2013, 2:07 pm | |
| Things:- Can you explain the nickname, so that we understand it's meaning and origin? If it is described in the history, that's alright as well. Some kind of explanation as to why his nickname is something completely other than his name would be nice, as well as a meaning/translation, if it has one.
- Appearance is lacking. At least two meaty paragraphs.
- Jashinism, for all intents and purposes, is not allowed as of yet, and for now that is on the banned list. Because of that, so is the religion as a whole. That said, however, you can simply rename it and call it something different while having it basically be the same thing, and I'd be fine with that.
- Ninja Monk is a profession that is listed under the Ultimate Shinobi's profession guide, so you cannot just automatically become one without first being a part of that profession. As such, please remove that, or explain that you have no real affiliation with any official groups of ninja monks. Either is fine. I just dont want to see you becoming what is clearly a part of the professions list.
- Doton Gun no jutsu - Earth sensing technique -- No way, jose. You're going to need to up the rank to C rank, as well as drop the range of this jutsu by a lot. This is sensory ninja business that you have here. The ability to perhaps sense what is happening under the ground, in the case of opponent's using jutsu that take them underground would be fine, but not just things like movement on top of the ground. I want the range dropped hugely, as well as the rank increased, or the jutsu to go away.
- Mizosoba no jutsu - Gap closer technique -- Not sure I understand this jutsu clearly enough, but it sounds like you're able to literally recreate rock in order to patch up holes that may have been made in other rock? If so, that's denied. You cannot just create matter like that, out of nothing. What is more, I can see this being very easily abused. Let's say you make an earth based shield jutsu, someone breaks it, and you just repair it with a D rank jutsu. It's not fair. You'll have to state that this jutsu cannot be used to modify rock that has already been effected by chakra. What is more, you'll have to gather the mineral from somewhere, not just spawn rock from the already existing rock, and create more somehow. I suggest pulling it from the ground.
- Yokoana no Jutsu - Tunnelling Technique -- With that amount of earth being made into a tunnel, I can see this being A or S ranked, easily. In fact, at one point, I had a jutsu like this which did something similar. It was S rank. 200 meters of tunnel is crazy insane. D rank gets you a couple feet, like what Kakashi uses with the Head Hunter jutsu. C rank can get you a bit further, but not 200 meters. What is more, this would take time to build, and probably cause a bit of a trembling on the surface when the tunnels are being constructed.
- Mappa Oni no jutsu - Underling Demon Technique -- It would not hurt to be a bit more clear with this jutsu, sir. Basically, you're creating a snake like entity out of liquid, correct? Not whip like, but more of a snake. This snake jumps and latches onto its target with fangs that are ________ inches long, if that? Please specify that. Take out the bit about adding chakra to the fangs. Take out the bit about being able to manipulate any kind of liquid, seeing as this is suiton (water release), not all liquids release (thus allowing you to control things like oil which are literally hydrophobic in nature and separate from water). Anything water based, sure. But not any/all liquids. Hand seals will always be needed. Decrease the size of these from seven meters in length to something more like one meter in length. That's three feet. Ever had a three foot snake jumping at you? It's plenty scary. Increase the chakra cost on these a bit. Lastly, reduce their speed. The ability to move at the speed of a thrown knife, while changing their course (which I am assuming they can do), is not going to be allowed.
Make these edits for me, and I'll check back asap.
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| | | | Electricmonkey
Posts : 18
| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Sat 27 Apr 2013, 5:31 pm | |
| - CleverYamanaka wrote:
Things:- Can you explain the nickname, so that we understand it's meaning and origin? If it is described in the history, that's alright as well. Some kind of explanation as to why his nickname is something completely other than his name would be nice, as well as a meaning/translation, if it has one.
- Appearance is lacking. At least two meaty paragraphs.
- Jashinism, for all intents and purposes, is not allowed as of yet, and for now that is on the banned list. Because of that, so is the religion as a whole. That said, however, you can simply rename it and call it something different while having it basically be the same thing, and I'd be fine with that.
- Ninja Monk is a profession that is listed under the Ultimate Shinobi's profession guide, so you cannot just automatically become one without first being a part of that profession. As such, please remove that, or explain that you have no real affiliation with any official groups of ninja monks. Either is fine. I just dont want to see you becoming what is clearly a part of the professions list.
- Doton Gun no jutsu - Earth sensing technique -- No way, jose. You're going to need to up the rank to C rank, as well as drop the range of this jutsu by a lot. This is sensory ninja business that you have here. The ability to perhaps sense what is happening under the ground, in the case of opponent's using jutsu that take them underground would be fine, but not just things like movement on top of the ground. I want the range dropped hugely, as well as the rank increased, or the jutsu to go away.
- Mizosoba no jutsu - Gap closer technique -- Not sure I understand this jutsu clearly enough, but it sounds like you're able to literally recreate rock in order to patch up holes that may have been made in other rock? If so, that's denied. You cannot just create matter like that, out of nothing. What is more, I can see this being very easily abused. Let's say you make an earth based shield jutsu, someone breaks it, and you just repair it with a D rank jutsu. It's not fair. You'll have to state that this jutsu cannot be used to modify rock that has already been effected by chakra. What is more, you'll have to gather the mineral from somewhere, not just spawn rock from the already existing rock, and create more somehow. I suggest pulling it from the ground.
- Yokoana no Jutsu - Tunnelling Technique -- With that amount of earth being made into a tunnel, I can see this being A or S ranked, easily. In fact, at one point, I had a jutsu like this which did something similar. It was S rank. 200 meters of tunnel is crazy insane. D rank gets you a couple feet, like what Kakashi uses with the Head Hunter jutsu. C rank can get you a bit further, but not 200 meters. What is more, this would take time to build, and probably cause a bit of a trembling on the surface when the tunnels are being constructed.
- Mappa Oni no jutsu - Underling Demon Technique -- It would not hurt to be a bit more clear with this jutsu, sir. Basically, you're creating a snake like entity out of liquid, correct? Not whip like, but more of a snake. This snake jumps and latches onto its target with fangs that are ________ inches long, if that? Please specify that. Take out the bit about adding chakra to the fangs. Take out the bit about being able to manipulate any kind of liquid, seeing as this is suiton (water release), not all liquids release (thus allowing you to control things like oil which are literally hydrophobic in nature and separate from water). Anything water based, sure. But not any/all liquids. Hand seals will always be needed. Decrease the size of these from seven meters in length to something more like one meter in length. That's three feet. Ever had a three foot snake jumping at you? It's plenty scary. Increase the chakra cost on these a bit. Lastly, reduce their speed. The ability to move at the speed of a thrown knife, while changing their course (which I am assuming they can do), is not going to be allowed.
Make these edits for me, and I'll check back asap.
Explained the nickname a bit in the history, appearance now has 350+ words, fixed everything you wanted about the personality, changed all of the jutsu like you asked, except on the underling demon technique. I left it's range at 7 metres, left the chakra cost at 3 and I believe I should be able to use this technique without any hand seals at B rank if the liquid is within hand's reach. This is because a similar C rank technique used by Orochimaru and Anko.
Here is a link
Orochimaru summons 4 snakes, which are more durable, thicker and tougher than the creatures I use in my technique, they're also poisonous and can store blades in their mouths. These snakes easily stretch beyond 7 metres in that clip and you can youtube Anko's fights and see that it goes far beyond 20 metres even. It would cost me 12 chakra points(the amount of chakra points used for an average B rank jutsu) just to summon the same amount of creatures as Orochimaru did using a C rank technique in that clip. The only advantage I have is that I can form these creatures out of water based liquid(it's debatable if that's even an advantage) and I can summon them from over a 3 metre range, but Orochimaru can do his technique without hand seals.
So I ask you good sir, why must I weaken my jutsu when it is already is in many ways inferior to a similar C rank technique? |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
Age : 29
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| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Wed 01 May 2013, 6:28 pm | |
| Fine. The jutsu is fine. You have valid points.
You only have 13 jutsu that I counted, and you're allowed 15. Do you want to make the two more/add the two more, or do you not mind having the two unused slots? |
| | | | Electricmonkey
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| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Wed 01 May 2013, 7:30 pm | |
| | Nah I'm fine with 13. |
| | | | CleverYamanaka
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| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Sun 05 May 2013, 9:52 am | |
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| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Sun 05 May 2013, 12:14 pm | |
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| | Subject: Re: Kuwahara, Jin [Kiri Genin] Sun 16 Jun 2013, 5:09 pm | |
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