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| Subject: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Wed 29 Sep 2010, 11:52 pm | |
| ...Here I am again. I have this terrible feeling that I somehow got it all wrong (haven't played RPG before and creating a character out of the blue is kinda hard). Oh well, this sucks. Why deny it? I messed up the jutsus completely and the history is way too angsty... ;-;
Basic Information: Name: Yamanaka Fei
Secondary Title: None
Age: Twelve
Gender: Female
Physical Appearance: Fei is a tall (5’3’’), gangly, painfully thin girl whose height makes her appear older than she actually is, until one looks at her childlike, round-shaped face. She has a pale complexion, high cheek bones and large bright blue eyes – either half-lidded, as she peeks lazily through her thick blond lashes; or wide open and dreamy, giving her an oafish look. Such impression is further accentuated by Fei’s habit of breathing through her mouth, thin lips parted in wonder – ‘gaping like a fish’, many would say. Fei can also look quite shy with the way she ducks her head and uses her short blond hair to hide her features, softly mumbling a greeting.
Unlike most stupid-looking people, though, Fei doesn’t often stare - unless she wants to seem even more moronic –, but lets her eyes wander, drinking everything in with one slow, smooth gaze. She is very fond of crowded places and blends well into the background, with her quiet movements and unremarkable appearance.
Fei dresses casually – civilian clothes – T-shirts of neutral colors and jeans plus battered, worn down trainers who look like they’ve walked many roads. She also carries an innocent-looking bag filled with kunai, shuriken and some exploding tags on her left shoulder. Her headband is usually left inside the bag – when she is out on missions, Fei ties it backwards around her neck so it’s covered, only showing it to identify herself as a kunoichi. Most people never realize she is a ninja.
(I actually could find a picture but I think it's too big. Anyway, the link is here.)
Personality: Fei is very quiet, and keeps her thoughts to herself – she can be bold, but minds her tongue because she’s afraid of offending someone mindlessly. Fei is a good listener, and because she has nobody to talk to, she’s made an habit out of listening to conversations of random, unknown people – she has also a good memory – but never tells anybody what she heard, because, then again, she has nobody to talk to (and she’d be mortified if anybody found out she eavesdrops). Fei likes analyzing things deeply, but gets annoyed if she has to express her opinions – she has a strong sense of ridicule and is a very private person.
One thing that aggravates Fei are people who don’t behave properly. It’s hypocritical, as she isn’t a polite girl herself, but after watching human interactions for a while, she understands that social conventions and behavioral rules are meant to be followed. As such, Fei is extremely self-conscious and will notice immediately if somebody is thinking (or thinking about thinking) ill of her – in which case she will excuse herself and leave (as Fei tends to avoid people/things she isn’t comfortable with).
She likes doing things at her own pace, doesn’t make friends easily and dislikes people meddling with her affairs. Fei also dislikes attention, as well as holding conversations for extended periods of time – when confronted with small talk, Fei will listen, but simply agree with her interlocutor to spare energy. Overall, Fei has a cool, apathetic nature – she rarely acts up on her feelings, and when she does, she plans what she’ll do first… slowly. Fei believes there’s a lie on every belief and thus she doesn’t knows what to believe, her only absolute truth being that flowers are beautiful. She spends a lot of her time taking care of the greenhouse on her backyard – an inheritance from her mother. If Fei were to die immediately, she wouldn’t miss anything in this world but camellias.
Catch Phrase: ''I don't mind.'' or ''I don't know.''
Clan Information:
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Clan Name: Yamanaka Clan Location: Konoha Clan Traits: There is only one large distinguishing physical trait of the Yamanaka clan and that is their natural blue eyed blonde hair appearance. Members of this clan are big into studying flowers and so they know how to utilize what the flowers can provide in a scientific/medical way. Therefore, they are typically medics. Largely, this clan takes mental warfare to a whole other level, having the main frame of their techniques focus on the opponents mind rather then their body or chakra network. This also gives them heightened mental powers of their own. This is further explained in their jutsu. *Must have Ninjutsu as a specialty, preferred Medical ninja as a specialty as well Kekkei Genkai: - Secret Clan Jutsu: Name: Mind Transfer Jutsu Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: - Description: This technique allows the user to enter the mind of another person or even an animal.[2] The user transfers their consciousness to the opponent, giving them complete control of the body for a short period of time. Their original body is left defenseless while this jutsu is active, leaving it susceptible to attack until they return. The mind transfer is slow-moving, moves in a straight direction, and takes some time to return to the user's body if it misses. Because of these reasons it should only be used on immobilized targets. Similarly, if the opponent's will is strong enough, they can force the user from their body. Lastly, should any physical injury befall the victim's body while the mind-link is active, it would cause the user's body to also receive those same injuries. For example, should the victim's arm be detached, the user's arm would be detached as well, leading to the conclusion that, should the victim die, the user would also die. Drains a C rank amount of chakra per post. Name: Telepathy Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: - Description: This jutsu allows the user to telepathically communicate with other people. The user must control their chakra in order to keep the telepathic link with the designated communicator. If they are startled or attacked when they are concentrating the link breaks and takes up a C rank amount of chakra for every post it is used. It it is only good for up to ten meters. Name: Mind Destruction Technique Type: Ninjutsu Rank: B Element: - Description: This technique is a variation on the Mind Body Switch Technique. Rather than transfer all of the user's consciousness into the target, this jutsu sends only a spirit of confusion, causing them to attack their allies. Although the target is aware of what they are doing, they are unable to stop themselves. This technique can also be used to simply stun the opponent so they can't move. This can also be used to transfer the user and target to a nearby location (50m away, no more). Drains A B rank amount of chakra per post. Name: Mind Puppet Curse Seal Type: Ninjutsu Rank: A Element: - Description: This jutsu utilizes puppetry as well as the Mind Transfer Jutsu. The user will first transfer their consciousness into a puppet. Then they will control the puppet directly with their mind and attack the opponent. When the opponent attacks the puppet, the minds will switch, placing the opponent in the puppet, and the Yamanaka user into the victim. This leaves their body very open for attack, and also, any damage the victim receives will also be done to the user as long as this jutsu is in place. Drains an A rank amount of chakra per post. History: The Yamanaka Clan is one of the newer additions to Konoha's Ranks. They were once a secret group of people, hiding in the wilderness and forests of what is now called the Land of Fire. Their unique jutsu was developed by honing their 'influential' attitude and ability to 'communicate' with other animals and people in the forests. The were a independent, and often reclusive people, but often had contact with the Nara and Akimichi Clans, and soon realized their talents as a group. This would be known as the Ino-Shika-Cho trio; a deceptive, yet devastating combination. They joined Konoha after their homeland was destroyed by the raging demon. Their greatest heroes, including their clan leader, all went to fight against the demon, only to be destroyed so quickly. They were all in awe when their clan was left defenseless, especially in such a destructive time. Their leaders for the past hundreds of years have demanded solitude and independence from the Villages, and their affairs. After this, they had no where else to go. The Hokage at the time accepted them, after finding out about their past and powers. Shinobi were needed to fill the Konoha Ranks, and the Yamanaka were their to help. Whether as support ninja, or ANBU away from site from the rest of the world, the Yamanaka have never ceased to fail to support Konoha. Clan Details: Open
The last line of the Yamanaka's history says that they never ceased to fail to support Konoha. Are they that incompetent or is it a mistake?
Rank Information: Rank: Genin
Village Affiliation: Suna
Special Information: Character Speciality: Main: Ninjutsu Sub: Genjutsu Elemental Affinity: Main: Wind Sub: Fire Special Characteristics: - Fei can adapt. Whenever she arrives somewhere, Fei is quick to pick up how people act there and mimic them – those who don’t stand out are less likely to be noticed, or recalled. - Fei likes to observe people and has a knack for remembering names and stories – not so much for faces, though. - Fei has broken her right arm twice (or rather, had it broken by her stepmother), and had to adapt to doing things with her left one. She found it an useful skill to have and practiced it more. - Fei is an abnormally light sleeper, and any little noise or movement will wake her up.
Skill Information: Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them. Academy Jutsu:
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Name: Bunshin no Jutsu - Clone Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Bunshin no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. The Bunshin technique creates a copy of the ninja without substance. The copy resembles the ninja in every way. This clone can function as a distraction or as means to confuse one's opponent. As soon the Bunshin gets attacked or comes into contact with an opponent, it will disperse
Name: Henge no Jutsu - Transformation Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Henge no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu - Change of Body Stance Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themself with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: E Type: N/A Element: N/A Description: A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water
Name: Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing Rank: E Type: N/A Element: N/A Description: Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed
Name: Explosion Tag: Activate Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: The user will activate an explosion tag. Normally, the tag will be placed by them, so they know where it is and can easily activate it.
Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu - Escaping Skill Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: A very basic technique that allows a ninja to escape from rope binds.
Name: Kai - Release Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.
Name: Shunshin no Jutsu - Body Flicker Technique Rank: D Element: N/A Description: Shunshin no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. The ninja will appear and disappear in an instant, allowing them to retreat or attack suddenly. To facilitate the movement the ninja will often use nearby elements such as mist, sand or leaves to mask their appearance or disappearance.
Clan Jutsu:
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Name: Mind Transfer Jutsu Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: - Description: This technique allows the user to enter the mind of another person or even an animal.[2] The user transfers their consciousness to the opponent, giving them complete control of the body for a short period of time. Their original body is left defenseless while this jutsu is active, leaving it susceptible to attack until they return. The mind transfer is slow-moving, moves in a straight direction, and takes some time to return to the user's body if it misses. Because of these reasons it should only be used on immobilized targets. Similarly, if the opponent's will is strong enough, they can force the user from their body. Lastly, should any physical injury befall the victim's body while the mind-link is active, it would cause the user's body to also receive those same injuries. For example, should the victim's arm be detached, the user's arm would be detached as well, leading to the conclusion that, should the victim die, the user would also die. Drains a C rank amount of chakra per post.
Name: Telepathy Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: - Description: This jutsu allows the user to telepathically communicate with other people. The user must control their chakra in order to keep the telepathic link with the designated communicator. If they are startled or attacked when they are concentrating the link breaks and takes up a C rank amount of chakra for every post it is used. It it is only good for up to ten meters.
Wind Jutsu:
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Name: Daitoppa - Great Breakthrough Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: Wind Description: The user brings a hand to his/her mouth and blows a large blast of wind. Range of the attack: 1-10 meters.
Name: Whirlwind Shield Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: Wind Description: A whirlwind forms around the user, shielding him/her. It can also form around the foe (provided the enemy is at most fifteen meters away from the user) and be used as a prison - this is not recommended, though, as keeping the whirlwind for long periods of time can be quite tiring. The eye of the whirlwind is about a couple of meters wide.
Name: Kaze Kunai - Wind Kunai Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: Wind Description: The user spits wind-chakra, shaping it as a kunai and launching it against his/her foe. It is the size of a normal kunai. Danzo uses this. (The last sentence was a throughly useless piece of information solely motivated by my love of Shimura Danzo *--*')
Fire Jutsu:
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Name: Fire Touch Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: Fire Description: The user sets the first thing his/her hand touches on fire. If not used with care, it can backfire and burn the user too.
Name: Housenka no Jutsu - Mythical Fire Phoenix Technique Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: Wind Description: Katon • Housenka no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. The ninja does the necessary hand seals and then emits a series of small fire balls. The ninja can also hurl a projectile which is covered in these same flames. To the opponent the attack appears to be only the balls of flame, they do not see the hidden threat within the flames. Meaning that even if the flames are put out, the projectiles still converge on the target. The flames can be used to cover different projectiles like shuriken or kunai. Range: 0m-5m
Genjutsu:
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Name: Endless Descent Technique Rank: C Difficulty: C Type: Genjutsu Element: N/A Description: This technique is activated by hand seals, and affects a single target who must be at most five meters away from its user. Victims of this genjutsu will be instantly swept off their feet and thrown off a high cliff that never seems to reach its end. Getting caught in the genjutsu is a quick process, but the illusion can last for never-ending period of time, until it’s cancelled by the target, or by the user (maintaining the genjutsu costs chakra). Any attempts from the victims to reach the cliff and climb back up won’t work. Said victims will be outwardly asleep during the illusion’s duration.
Name: Stalker Rank: C Difficulty: B Type: Genjutsu Element: N/A Description: A very peculiar distraction genjutsu that makes the targets believe they're being stalked. It begins very faintly and subtly - the victim has an uncomfortable feeling of being watched, hears footsteps trailing after him/her, sees a figure recoiling as he/she turns around - and feeds on the target's imagination. So, if a victim believes his stalker to be a tall man, it will be a tall man; if another victim thinks he's being stalked by his ex-girlfriend, it will be his ex-girlfriend. The stalker never approaches the target, just torments him/her from a distance. This technique is a single target illusion that is exceptionally hard to break after the victim believes it.
Name: False Hit Rank: C Difficulty: C Type: Genjutsu Element: N/A Description: This technique can affect up to five people. It tricks the targets into believing the user has been hit and defeated by their attacks. It takes a few seconds to work, so it doesn't works well with taijutsu or surprise attacks, but more with long-range jutsu or kunai and shuriken that are thrown at the user.
Name: Faint Rank: D Difficulty: D Type: Genjutsu Element: N/A Description: This technique makes its single target feel weak. It doesn't cause any pain - the victim just feels tired, as if he/she is about to faint. The illusion is easy to get rid of, but quite vivid.
Name: Kokohi no Jutsu - False Place Technique Rank: C Difficulty: C Type: Genjutsu Element: N/A Description: Kokohi no Jutsu is a simple Genjutsu technique which changes the appearance of a nearby object.
Background Information History:
Birth Arc: Yamanaka Fei was born to Yamanaka Kaori - a jounin medic who had migrated from Konoha to Suna - and Takamura Takeo, a civilian baker. (Much to Takeo’s displeasure, his wife kept the Yamanaka clan name.) After she gave birth, Kaori took a leave from work, which was prolonged by a second pregnancy. When Fei was two years old they buried Takushi, her stillborn brother whose death left Kaori struggling with a cleverly concealed postpartum depression – so Fei got stuck with an absent father and a neglectful mother. The situation reached its climax when Kaori forgot her daughter at the supermarket, leading the former kunoichi to realize she needed to ‘stop acting like an emotional fool and get a grip’.
By the time Fei turned three, her mother had recovered and was thinking about getting back to her work as a ninja. Fei’s first clear memories are of her parents arguing, either in hushed whispers or loud screams – Takeo forbid Kaori from doing missions and Kaori laughed at him. When his wife missed Fei’s fifth birthday due to duty, Takeo left home – Fei visited him once or twice, though Kaori’s reconciliation efforts visibly lessened after her ex-husband remarried. Fei saw her mother crying once. They never talked about it and Fei soon learned to be silent.
Academy Arc: Fei did just fine in Academy. She was even first of her class for a few weeks when she was seven, but wasn’t able to keep the position due to her lack of effort. She knew she didn’t train enough and she knew she could do better, but the lessons never interested her and she preferred to learn ‘better’ things from her mother when Kaori came back from missions. It was by that time Fei met her first and only friend – Shizuka, a girl who had approached her at lunch and persevered despite Fei’s silence and ‘excuse me, do I know you?’ look. Time passed, and Shizuka invited herself to Fei’s house.
Shizuka liked everything, was very surprised by the fact Fei lived alone most of the time and begged for half an hour until Fei reluctantly let her into Kaori’s greenhouse – flowers were a rarity in Suna. Once they entered it, Shizuka fell in love with some red camellias – noticing her friend’s enamored gaze, Fei immediately told her ‘no.’ Shizuka wanted to take a bouquet of camellias and was even more adamant about it because Fei never really denied her anything if she insisted, except now. Shizuka gave in, and it was not until she left Fei noticed the camellias were missing. The betrayal wounded Fei deeply. She spent the next week glaring at Shizuka, and even put some extra effort into learning the Mind Transfer Jutsu as vague plans of revenge haunted her mind. And then Shizuka died, along with some other academy students who tried to learn a wind jutsu that was clearly too much for them.
Fei felt terribly guilty and would have thought herself an awful person, if her mother hadn’t telepathically helped her – they never talked out loud about anything important. ‘You love her even when you don’t, and those kind of feelings are the strongest – they fight.’ They put some camellias on Shizuka’s grave and Fei told Kaori – telepathically – that she loved her. It was the last thing Fei told her mother before Kaori went MIA.
Now she had to live with Takeo, and her stepmother, Maki. Still shaken by Shizuka’s death and even more by Kaori’s disappearance, Fei fell into depression. It took her three weeks to say ‘Good Morning’ to her father, and the moment she did, she had her life threatened by Maki – a retired chunin – who made her promise she wouldn’t try to talk to her father or ‘take him from her’ in any way. And so Fei fell into silence again. Sometimes she pretended she was the one that had disappeared, and sometimes she almost believed it, until Maki glared at her with such hatred she became conscious of her existence.
Fei moved back to her mother’s house right after Maki got pregnant – she was nine then – and it felt strangely empty now she knew Kaori wasn’t going to arrive. Fei busied herself with the flowers and, one day, her mother did come back. Kaori was broken, crippled and insane – and there was nothing Fei could do. It was Takeo’s comment ‘I knew she was going to end up that way’, that motivated Fei to visit her mother every day and never give up. Shortly before Fei’s graduation, Kaori died, leaving her daughter oddly numb.
Genin Arc: Fei graduated with rather good scores – her habit of studying ahead helped on the final exams. She feels lost, though, now that the reason of her life – her mother – is gone.
Role-Play Sample: (I hadn't a clue of how I was going to do this, so I just relaxed and pretended I was writing for Fanfiction.net – it helped a lot, but still...)
Her knees were pointy and uncomfortable against her chest, so Fei hugged them tighter, burying her tear-stained face into her arms as she burned – boiling waves of heat spreading and fogging her mind up until all she could see were faraway, fleeting shapes swiftly moving beyond the haze. Where…? Fei lifted her head up an inch, and the house where she’d lived all her life was so oddly unfamiliar she reached out to certify herself of– there, the couch, where she’d sat with a vague uneasiness because Mother was late – late, for what? What time is it? There’s no clock, no clock, there was a clock, but – but it didn’t matter because nothing had ever happened to Mother yet. And there, the red spots on her wrist where the ANBU – cat mask – had held her just a bit too hard, because he didn’t know how to handle children and she couldn’t go see mother, but she wanted to, and the flame inside her burned so brightly Fei unsteadily got to her feet.
The others had come back from the mission – tall man, two tall men, three, woman? – but they weren’t important, there was somebody else who was, and couldn’t they see that they weren’t? Fei wanted them to LEAVE, but cat-mask had held her– his fingers on her wrist, and she dug her own fingers into the vestiges of his – attacking him like he was there – until the blood trickled down her fingernails; relishing in the pain.
Suddenly she wanted to hurt, to drag her arm across shards of broken glass and laugh until she was out of breath and bleed until she was out of blood. Fei raced down the corridor, everything spinning, mother smiling, and nearly broke the bathroom’s doorknob as she stumbled and howled, only stopping when a pale face looked back at her on the mirror – then she lost strength and couldn’t stand anymore, because her legs were heavy and clinging to the sink couldn’t keep her from sinking.
Fei curled up on the bathroom’s floor, shaking with sobs, and a crimson stain formed where her heart had been.
(As I know my writings can be very confusing, I guess I'd better explain: Fei doesn't really die, she just presses her wounded arm to her chest and the blood spills - my english vocabulary is just way too poor to say what I want, ugh. The 'had' is completely metaphorical. And Kaori doesn't really smile at her - she's hallucinating.)
So, uh. My last text was too emotional and confusing. I want to give you an idea of how I write normal scenes, because I won't be RPGing about Fei having a mental breakdown all the time, right? Here's another one. I know it's too long and that it has too many paragraphs to really be RPG, but that's just the way I'm used to - hopefully I'll learn how to write in a more RPG-like manner someday.
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Leaning closer to the showcase, Fei glanced at the expensive kunai, not quite managing the courage to press her nose against the glass like the children next to her. ‘‘Hey, momma! Hey, momma, look!’’ The boys - Rio and Kane - squealed, genially waving their hands, thus leading Fei to realize they should be younger than she had first thought. Their mother, a fat woman carrying seven bags from clothing stores and one from a food shop waved to somebody in the crowd.
‘‘Ha-na-ji-ma, dear!’’ The two embraced - which was rather awkward with all Hanajima’s bags. ‘‘You look so pretty.’’
‘‘So do I? Why, I do think I’ve lost weight. I’ve been dieting.’’ Fei missed the details of Hanajima’s dieting as a soft noise coming from the store caught her attention. A bored-looking attendant stood by the counter and a smiling, over-eager, newly-employed one – Fei rather liked the contrast – was looking expectantly to her future customers as she brought a set of shiny, beautiful shuriken to the showcase, much to the boys’ awe. ‘‘Mommy, look!’’
‘‘Have they fought again?’’ Hanajima asked her friend curiously, swatting Kane – who had grabbed her dress – away. ‘‘Yes! Hitomi told him he had to prove he loved her.’’
‘‘Mommy, LOOK AT IT!’’
‘‘Prove what! Ryuu always loved her and she’s blind not to–’’
‘‘I think she still loves THE OTHER ONE.’’
‘‘Do you think so?’’ Hanajima feigned surprise and her friend nodded sharply. ‘‘MOMMY! MOMMY! MOMMY!’’
‘‘Yes, yes, she must still – yes, honey, it’s beautiful.’’
‘‘MOMMY, YOU’RE NOT EVEN LOOKING AT IT!’’ Fei felt tempted to solve the problem by stating civilian children shouldn’t have jounin-level weapons, but she didn’t talk to strangers. That way they would know the truth, and people didn’t like the truth, not as much as what was right, because lies could be right sometimes – like telling Hanajima she’d lost weight. Stalker. The word rose unbidden to her mind, and Fei pursed her lips.
‘‘I’m looking, honey, and I think it’s beautiful.’’ Fei stalked them and instantly forgot all about them as she noticed a blond woman passing by. ‘‘Lady, hey, lady!’’ The name, the name, if she turned… ‘‘Kaori, Kaori!’’ Fei’s heart raced and sunk. She looked at the stranger – whose face was too thin, the lips too full, the eyes too dark, the nose too big – and flushed in shame. Hope was a stupid, stupid thing. Never mind Hanajima or Kane or Rio, Fei had to leave this place now. She walked down the sandy road quickly, wrinkling her nose as she passed by a rather smelly individual. It was hot – it was Suna, and Fei considered going to the corner over there for some ice cream, less for the heat but more to go somewhere. Go, go, she chanted, always go like you have somewhere to go, even if you don’t, because everybody else has. Everybody else…?
Fei wondered, if there was somebody else pretending, somebody else looking, somebody else watching, somebody else stalking, somebody else watching HER, somebody else just going, somebody else who could go with her.
...I can't seem to stop writing dreadfully dramatic things, can I? Sorry.
Last edited by Baab on Fri 08 Oct 2010, 2:02 am; edited 12 times in total |
| | | Brad
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| Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Thu 30 Sep 2010, 1:03 am | |
| I'd have to disagree Baab, i think this will be an awesome character profile Keep up the good work, i'm looking forward to seeing your immense rp skillz in action.
-Bradd |
| | | Baab
Age : 27 Posts : 13
| Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Mon 04 Oct 2010, 12:27 am | |
| Uh... it's done. Somebody move it to the completed apps so it can be rejected, please?
If by some miracle this is approved, I'm also looking forward seeing more of my so-called immense RPG skills. Perharps somebody can introduce me to them.
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| | | CYANIDE CANDY
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| Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Wed 06 Oct 2010, 2:36 am | |
| - Baab wrote:
Name: Razors Type: Ninjutsu Rank: C Element: Wind Description: Several thin blades of wind (about one meter tall each) are formed and controlled by the user. The user can make as many blades as he/she would like, but only ONE blade can be moved at a time - though they can be moved in quick succession, so it appears otherwise. Range of the attack: 1m-15m I suggest setting a limit to the amount of blades that can be created at a time. Perhaps five or six at a time would be good. You can choose.
- Baab wrote:
- Name: Faint
Rank: C Difficulty: D Type: Genjutsu Element: N/A Description: This technique makes its single target feel weak. It doesn't cause any pain - the victim just feels tired, as if he/she is about to faint. The illusion is easy to get rid of, but quite vivid. I believe this genjutsu could actually pass as a D-ranked jutsu rather than a C ranked.
And I'm just curious, what do you mean by when you put the Rank of the genjutsu but then next to it you put Difficulty?
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| | | Baab
Age : 27 Posts : 13
| Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Thu 07 Oct 2010, 10:45 pm | |
| Done... But, instead of changing Razors I actually replaced it by a Danzo (oh, Danzo! <3) jutsu I couldn't find on Leafninja, y'know? I hope my impromptu description isn't too bad.
Anyway, difficulty is how hard it's to cancel the genjutsu, it seems. I actually took it from the Genjutsu Rules Topic o_o'... I guess nobody really reads that? Oh well, don't mind me, I have long been diagnosed as a hopelessly compulsive reader. (I even read the Terms of Agreement before I enter a forum.)
PS: I meant to get this done sooner, but I got caught up in school. |
| | | CYANIDE CANDY
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| Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Fri 08 Oct 2010, 1:42 am | |
| - Baab wrote:
- Done... But, instead of changing Razors I actually replaced it by a Danzo (oh, Danzo! <3) jutsu I couldn't find on Leafninja, y'know? I hope my impromptu description isn't too bad.
The description is fine, I just need to know if it's as large as a normal kunai. If it is, please squeeze that into the description. Also, just to be clear, it is only one kunai that is spat out, right?
- Baab wrote:
- Anyway, difficulty is how hard it's to cancel the genjutsu, it seems. I actually took it from the Genjutsu Rules Topic o_o'... I guess nobody really reads that? Oh well, don't mind me, I have long been diagnosed as a hopelessly compulsive reader. (I even read the Terms of Agreement before I enter a forum.)
PS: I meant to get this done sooner, but I got caught up in school. Oh, right! My mistake! I had completely forgotten about that, silly me. I believe you're genjutsu is just fine, then.
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| Subject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Fri 08 Oct 2010, 2:03 am | |
| Done. Yup, I guess it's only one kunai. |
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