Yuketsu, Jikkensha (Complete)

Age : 30 Posts : 1236

Ryu, if you keep going. i'm more then willing to give you a 5day extension for the exams.

Age : 32 Posts : 95

Will do I'm just waiting for some modding

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

Quote :: O shit I may as well give up this is the last nite I can get approved before the CE's......

I already listed everything i did once and I just stated I erased my poison what more do u want from me?

This app has just officially been a waste.

Ill get to this after school, but realize we have THREE moderators. 3. Z isnt even supposed to be doing applications, but he is so that leaves Lauren and myself.

Now. You listed it once. I said to list everything you fixed based on my post. By not doing so, you are making ME take more time to review everything in the actual application again, thus putting off the actual moderation. And I have no doubt that when I reread it, half the application wont have been fixed, you've needed to be told to fix items 4 or 5 times before.

What I told you to do as a moderator was:

Me: Fix this, this this this and this.

You: I fixed this by doing this, changed this and this, removed this, etc.

I NEED A LIST TO WORK OFF OF BEYOND I EDITED. Especially when the moderation post I created is as long as an application itself.

If you believe the application is a waste, that is your fault for not editing what we asked you to right away, and trying to make a Jounin level Genin. Not our fault. If you need further proof, here it is:

Quote :: Subject: Re: Yuketsu, Jikkensha (Complete) Tue Oct 12, 2010 4:39 pm

My first moderation post.

Todays date: November 1st

Thats almost a full month of moderation.

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

Quote :: Extended Tongue: Yuketsu has an extremely long tongue. This is due to a body modification the he cast upon himself. This tongue is about the same length as his own body. This tongue can be use for various things like holding something or attacking.

How heavy can stuff hold, where is the extra tongue stored, since you just posted its a very long tongue (Im assuming based off of Orochimaru), and you didnt make it a jutsu, you need a place to store it. Orochimaru's can extend and shrink at will, yours cannot, making it so that either you are choking yourself constantly, or dragging your tongue on the ground.

Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Again, as I said before. Remove this. You cant have this without having the summon in your application because you learn it from whichever person or animal is carrying the contract. If I need to mention it another time I will stop modding the application because you arent paying attention to some of the things Im telling you to do.

Quote :: Strategist:
Yuketsu has a talent for being well prepared. He takes various precautions before engaging in personal combat with an adversary, usually studying them through his various methods in order to gain a clear advantage. He seems to always have a contingency plan if something doesn't work out the way he expects.

the second I see ANY metagaming with this SC, I will personally come in and remove it. PLain and simple.

Quote :: Name: Passos Straordinario [Extraordinary Step]
Type: Kenjutsu
Rank: C
Elemental Afinity:N/A
Description:It is a stabbing attacking that's power is fueled by the user's speed and striking strength. The sword impales the target almost entirely to the hilt. Then the sword is pulled out as quickly as possible with a slight angle added.

Like I said previously. Change the description. THis is a one hit kill move with its current description and unallowed.

Quote :: Name: Mord Schlag [Killing blow]
Type: Kenjutsu
Rank: C
Elemental affinity: N/A
Description: Its purpose is to use the hilt like a war-hammer to pierce armor and other hard defenses. If one is strong enough, the sword can be used to destroy stone and other hard surfaces.

Jesus, did you read ANYTHING I asked you to change or I explained why it wouldnt work? Even with a Rapier, using this technique the way you want too, you would slice off your hands. YOURE GRABBING THE BLADE TO USE THE TECHNIQUE. Think on why thats a bad idea and change it.

Quote :: Name: Steroids Serum
Rank: C
Type: Supplement
Natural Abilities: These are supplement pills that Yuketsu carry around. These pill further enhance the users body giving it the ability to perform at a greater level than a normal shinobi. This pill slightly increase the speed, strength and durability to the user for the duration of 4 post. With the enhances the user will lose strength, speed a durability after the 4 post duration.
All lost are 2x for the duration of of 2 post.
*This steroid has to be taken ahead of being attacked by a jutsu and only works for the duration of 4 post. However is serum has a 1 post delay before the effects take place. If beaten either before or after the 4 post requirement these effects of this serum will not any effect what-so-ever, leaving the user.

Again, something else that wasnt changed. Heres my post:

Quote:
*This steroid has to be taken ahead of being attacked by a jutsu and only works for the duration of 4 post. If beaten either before or after the 4 post requirement these effects of this serum will not any effect what-so-ever, leaving the user .

Edit this. Based on this little tid bit here, you can ALWAYS take the steroids before the jutsu wihtout being defeated.

Change it or I will tell you to remove it.

Superhuman drug: You changed A and S-Rank. Good job.Now, for the THIRD BLOODY TIME:

Quote:
Poison Name: Superhuman Drug
Rank: C-S
C-B Ranked:Poison Description: Yuketsu has manufactured a "superhuman drug" that can slow down a person's perception of time. The drug is kept in a bottle by him, but also inside Yuketsu's body, which is blue in appearance upon release. It is able to make one second seem like 100 seconds for the unfortunate victim to whom it is administered. An undiluted dose of the drug causes the senses to speed up trillions of times while the relatively "slow" body fails to keep up, resulting in paralysis; on the other hand, it is implied that a diluted dose of the drug can greatly enhance the user's reaction speed.
Yuketsu only has non diluted of the drug
Gaseous State:
C-Ranked: Makes 1 second seem like 10sec 1/2 full post your in illusion.
B-Ranked: Make 1 second seem like 100sec 1 full post your in illusion.

*Reserved for Higher Rank:
Quote:

B-S Ranked:Liquid State: An liquefied dose of the drug causes the senses to speed up trillions of times while the relatively "slow" body fails to keep up, resulting in paralysis; on the other hand, it is implied that a diluted dose of the drug can greatly enhance the user's reaction speed. A single droplet would have to be diluted 250,000 times to be suitable for use.
Liquid State:
A-Ranked: Makes 1 second seem like 10 minutes and 3 post paralysis Illusion for a full post.
S-Ranked: Makes 1 second seem like 100 minutes and 5 post paralysis Illusion for 2 full post.

Caranore wrote:
Quote:
Gaseous State:
C-Ranked: Makes 1 second seem like 10sec I quarter of your post your in illousion.
B-Ranked: Make 1 second seem like 100sec 1/2 ofyour post your in illousion.

*Reserved for Higher Rank:
Quote:

B-S Ranked:Liquid State: An liquified dose of the drug causes the senses to speed up trillions of times while the relatively "slow" body fails to keep up, resulting in paralysis; on the other hand, it is implied that a diluted dose of the drug can greatly enhance the user's reaction speed. A single droplet would have to be diluted 250,000 times to be suitable for use.
Liquid State:
A-Ranked: Makes 1 second seem like 10 minutes and 1 post paralysis Illusion for a full post.
S-Ranked: Makes 1 second seem like 100 minutes and 2 post paralysis Illusion for 2 full post.

Time differences are WAYYYYYYYYYYYY too much. 1 second seeming like 100 minutes? So, to your character when he reaches S-Rank, one second feels like almost 2 straight hours, and the only downside is you have a 2 post paralysis.

The increase in processing speed required to utilize all this information would make your brain explode, literally. Point in case: there was a chess player who thought ahead I believe it was 100 moves in a chess game every move, and his brain exploded at the match causing him to die.

Secondly, you never specified how long this reaction speed boost would last. Given that, you could make it last an entire fight.

This is unapproved until revamped drastically. Id even go as far as saying you need to remove it.

This wasnt even edited in the slightest. Again, Im going to say remove it. C-Rank: One second lasts 10 seconds, no time limit, and you only suffer 1 post paralysis. Now, Im not sure how much you know about human speed and reaction time, as well as brain functions, but apparently you didnt read my post about this at all in the first place. Just remove this, I know what you want with it, but you wont get it without excessive editing and I can see based on previous comments on this application I will need to bring this up atleast 2 more times.

Either remove it, or drastically change the effects. Im not gonna say it anymore. The application will remain unapproved for a very long time if EVERYTHING in this post isnt fixed. When you do post to say edited, I want an entire list of what was changed and to what. I refuse to read this application a 5th time to figure out what you did and didnt change.

The drugs need to be limited in the amount you carry, period. No ifs ands or buts about it.

If you add ANYTHING ELSE to this application while I am moderating it without tell me, I WILL archive this and you can start straight from scratch. Again. Your application is not the only thing I am working on, nor is it of any high concern to me because you dont do what I tell you to do.

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

Round two:

Quote :: Yuketsu is a researcher and personifies the stereotype of the mad scientist. He sees everyone and everything not as a living being, but as an object to be researched—including himself. He has little respect or regard for most others, and was even willing to turn his own men in order to obtain his greater lust for power. Yuketsu's favorite food is pike fish, and that he does not like onion. One of his free-time activities is reading and writing. He himself publishes a serialization in the journal, titled "Effective Medication for the Brain", which apparently contains detailed instructions on preparation of medicine and their application. In battle, Yuketsu likes to play with his opponent, torturing them little by little until they can hardly stand. Every time he fights he uses it as an experiment testing himself and his opponent little by little. He also uses it as an oppurtunity to implant microbes or other things in case they get away. Before engaging, though, he will make extensive research on his possible opponents to tilt the chance of winning in his favor.

From Bleach wiki: Mayuri Kurotsuchi is a researcher and personifies the stereotype of the mad scientist. By his early actions during the Ryoka Invasion, he is displayed as one of the most sadistic and cruel Shinigami. He sees everyone and everything not as a living being, but as an object to be researched—including himself. He has little respect or regard for most others, and was even willing to turn his own men (who were not aware of his plans) into living bombs in an attempt to capture Uryū Ishida and Orihime Inoue for experimentation. He also withheld vital information about the Bounts from the other Shinigami in order to capture one as a research subject for himself.

It is known that Mayuri's favorite food is pike fish, and that he does not like onion. One of his free-time activities is reading every character published in Seiretei Communication. He himself publishes a serialization in the journal, titled "Effective Medication for the Brain", which apparently contains detailed instructions on preparation of medicine and their application. Surprisingly, it is highly popular among the readers.

Plagarism. Fix this or be archived and deal with the consequences of plagarism. Period.

Age: You're a 16 year old Genin? Genin are usually 12-14, this kind of implies you're a bit of a failure in the shinobi department and is far from fitting the image of the prodigy you seem to be going for. It heavily conflicts with that actually, I'd recommend lowering it.

Appearance: Why is your appearance written out so oddly? Thats not how we usually write things, your spelling is off, and you mention chakra suppressing robes, are those an item you have detailed elsewhere? If not, don't mention them.

Nan Kaizou: Eijutsu is what this is, Medical Ninjutsu. This technique also needs limits for how much and how far you can stretch, as well as a better description of what is extended and how, too vague, way too vague.

Iron Gate Half: This is just going to be used as an excuse to deflect someone's attacks, so I would recommend removing this or adding a note about only D Rank attacks being able to be blocked by this jutsu.

Venom Body: What poison? And what do you mean by 'admitted', makes no sense.

Bakuretsu Kawarmi: This can be accomplished with standard Kawarmi, remove this.

Hilt Force: Plagarism as you originally had a different name, and now you have had a sex change, refering to your character as a her. Fix it or change it. Also this technique will be limited by the strength of the weapon used, just so you're away and this seems more like Taijutsu than Kenjutsu in the first place.

Quote :: Name White Justice - Enforced Stance
Rank C
Type Kenjutsu
Element N/A
Description This technique allows the user to increase the power of an attack of their blade by using both hands to the hilt of the blade, and thus attacking with the force of both arms. Theoretically, this allows the user to double the strength of any given sword technique, but requires that both hands be used, meaning that the other hand will be occupied and unusable for jutsu while in this 'stance'

So essentially you are wasting a C-Rank amount of chakra to use two hands on your sword? This technique makes no sense.

Quote :: Name Iron Devotion - Melee Stance
Rank C
Type Kenjutsu
Element N/A
Description This is a basic fighting technique in which the user can defend and attack from; intercepting incoming physical threats of ones own rank with ease; and even of greater rank if they don't have the skill specialty of the techniques they are attempting to use. One can also attack with the sword. Any swing of the blade of the user is considered a C-ranked kenjutsu attack.

Okay... what? So you can recieve, block, and counter attack any technique of your own rank so long as its physical? Nada. You obviously havent read the minor specialties rules, which doesnt allow any techniques for anyone greater than C-Rank. Fix the description so its less god modding, since the physical portion can be construed as Ninjutsu and Fuuinjutsu as well. Fix this drastically or remove it because tis OP

Quote :: Name: Cutting Mantis
Rank: C
Type: Kenjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: A Kenjutsu technique that users a katana to be successfully done. By swiping his katana in front of him at high speeds. He will be able to deflect small objects that are thrown at the user. If the attack lands the katana will be moved so fast that it will act as a shield.

Remove, since you no longer have a katana. Also, You won't be able to block jutsu above this jutsu's rank, you're aware of this right?

Quote :: Name Null Point - Defensive Stance
Rank C
Type Kenjutsu
Element N/A
Description This is a technique in which the user will change to a purely defensive stance; able to take on multiple threats from different angles with incredible accuracy and impressive reaction skills. Ones blade becomes a C-rank defense while in his stance.

Multiple sources, C-Rank defense against anything and everything. I can easily see you abusing this, so fix the description so it says what you can and cant block, etc.

Age : 32 Posts : 95

Cara Wrote

Quote :: Venom Body: What poison? And what do you mean by 'admitted', makes no sense.

Admitted 1. To permit to enter: ExampleA crack in the wall admitted some light.
This has also been edited

I ERASED ALL OF MY KENJUTSU

Quote :: Yuketsu is a researcher and personifies the stereotype of the mad scientist. He sees everyone and everything not as a living being, but as an object to be researched—including himself. He has little respect or regard for most others, and was even willing to turn his own men in order to obtain his greater lust for power. Yuketsu's favorite food is pike fish, and that he does not like onion. One of his free-time activities is reading and writing. He himself publishes a serialization in the journal, titled "Effective Medication for the Brain", which apparently contains detailed instructions on preparation of medicine and their application. In battle, Yuketsu likes to play with his opponent, torturing them little by little until they can hardly stand. Every time he fights he uses it as an experiment testing himself and his opponent little by little. He also uses it as an oppurtunity to implant microbes or other things in case they get away. Before engaging, though, he will make extensive research on his possible opponents to tilt the chance of winning in his favor.

Changed

Quote :: Hilt Force: Plagarism as you originally had a different name, and now you have had a sex change, refering to your character as a her. Fix it or change it. Also this technique will be limited by the strength of the weapon used, just so you're away and this seems more like Taijutsu than Kenjutsu in the first place.

This is copied from my old app but it doesn't matter since it is erased with all other kenjutsu

Quote :: Nan Kaizou: Eijutsu is what this is, Medical Ninjutsu. This technique also needs limits for how much and how far you can stretch, as well as a better description of what is extended and how, too vague, way too vague.

EDITED

Quote :: Superhuman drug: You changed A and S-Rank. Good job.Now, for the THIRD BLOODY TIME:

Quote:
Poison Name: Superhuman Drug
Rank: C-S
C-B Ranked:Poison Description: Yuketsu has manufactured a "superhuman drug" that can slow down a person's perception of time. The drug is kept in a bottle by him, but also inside Yuketsu's body, which is blue in appearance upon release. It is able to make one second seem like 100 seconds for the unfortunate victim to whom it is administered. An undiluted dose of the drug causes the senses to speed up trillions of times while the relatively "slow" body fails to keep up, resulting in paralysis; on the other hand, it is implied that a diluted dose of the drug can greatly enhance the user's reaction speed.
Yuketsu only has non diluted of the drug
Gaseous State:
C-Ranked: Makes 1 second seem like 10sec 1/2 full post your in illusion.
B-Ranked: Make 1 second seem like 100sec 1 full post your in illusion.

*Reserved for Higher Rank:
Quote:

B-S Ranked:Liquid State: An liquefied dose of the drug causes the senses to speed up trillions of times while the relatively "slow" body fails to keep up, resulting in paralysis; on the other hand, it is implied that a diluted dose of the drug can greatly enhance the user's reaction speed. A single droplet would have to be diluted 250,000 times to be suitable for use.
Liquid State:
A-Ranked: Makes 1 second seem like 10 minutes and 3 post paralysis Illusion for a full post.
S-Ranked: Makes 1 second seem like 100 minutes and 5 post paralysis Illusion for 2 full post.

I don't think you understand this but it isn't to be inserted into myself. This serum is actually a gas. When it is released and inhaled by the opponent they have they side effects. It doesn't actually speed them up, it's actually meant to hurt them. It's effects are meant to be somewhat like itachi's genjutsu he used on kakashi with lesser effects. "However" the liquefied version which is A-S ranked are to equal to itachi's. This is for offensive use only not to enhance my character by speeding him up.

Spoiler:

I also have a summoning in the creation area and it's been there for some time now.

Quote :: Name: Steroids Serum
Rank: C
Type: Supplement
Natural Abilities: These are supplement pills that Yuketsu carry around. These pill further enhance the users body giving it the ability to perform at a greater level than a normal shinobi. This pill slightly increase the speed, strength and durability to the user for the duration of 4 post. With the enhances the user will lose strength, speed a durability after the 4 post duration.
All lost are 2x for the duration of of 2 post.
*This steroid has to be taken ahead of being attacked by a jutsu and only works for the duration of 4 post. However is serum has a 1 post delay before the effects take place. If beaten either before or after the 4 post requirement these effects of this serum will not any effect what-so-ever, leaving the user.
Speed increase: 2x
Strength increase: 2x
Durability: This pill grants the user one last breath. With this one last breath Yuketsu makes his final move before he dies or faints.

Even while this is in use my charry will still die or faint depending on the injury. He will just perform one last move before his fate. So actually what do I edit.

Age : 35 Posts : 1492

The summoning should be put in your app, just add it under your jutsu section. This way you dont need to wait on Aaron to get to it and I can do it right here.

The superhuman drug still has the same exact time differences in my last post (ie C-Rank 1 sec=10 sec). This still needs to change since its only blockable by wind jutsu at best, and if used on a Genin, the Genin would not just get paralyzed from such a drug, they would die because of the sheer amount of information flowing into the brain. 1 second=10 Seconds for a C-Rank means for every one second a Genin would have 10 seconds to analyze EVERYTHING and within the half post they would have had two minutes to analyze everything by the time 10 seconds comes around, cauing the brain to literally either explode or melt down due to the innate handicaps all humans have placed on their brain at birth. Noone can have that amount of processing power for so long, since half a post lasts approximately 5 minutes, which is normally 300 seconds, not almost a full hour.

Secondly, yes, its based on Itachi, but that is an actual Genjutsu. And a Sharingan specific technique none the less. One second lasts 72 hours, but Tsukiyomi is not only specific directly to the Uchiha, but Mangekyo and is insanely hard to get, let alone use at a SS-Rank amount of chakra per use. You have a drug that costs no chakra, causes the sheer amount of information flowing to the brain to increase drastically, easily putting the opponent in complete paralysis without you doing anything, or killing them, or making them a vegetable.

It still needs to be removed. As for Kenjutsu techniques, stances would be a style. You need to make your Kenjutsu make sense. Killing blow for example made no sense whatsoever because you were holding your sword by the blade. Tell me why holding the blade is a bad idea for ANY type of Kenjutsu unless you have a locked sheath and Ill allow it. (Note: a rapier doesnt have a sheath).

Age : 32 Posts : 95

I don't want the kenjutsu they are erased final

I erased Super-Human Drug

Added: Venom/Poison Serum and Pulse decreasing serum

also adding summoning as you read this

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

Proximity Mines: You've removed the chakra concept of it but how does it work now?

Chakra Disruption grenades: This has been commented on multiple times by me and still not removed or fixed...

Poison Serum: I may of said this before, at least I remember saying it... there is no universal block to all poisons especially if it is injected because poisons don't only enter through the blood stream.

Extended Tongue: How long? Also, avoid the word cast when talking about body modifications. It makes them sound like magic spells or something.

Nan Kaizou: The twisting, okay. The extending, not okay.

Dokueki Karada Shiyou (Venom Body Method): Developing an immunization in 1 post with a C-rank amount of chakra and being able to use the poison after... needs to be knocked down especially considering I'm not even positive how its even possible.

You wrote:: A mas scientist and researcher is what Yuketsu thinks of himself though it is very stereotypical. He sees everyone as an object to be researched and not as a living beings, including himself. He has little respect or regard for most others, and is even to turn on his own subordinates in order to obtain his greater lust for power. Yuketsu's favorite food is pike fish ramen, and he loves onion. One of his free-time activities is reading and writing. He himself published a journal, titled "Effective Modifications for the Body", which apparently contains detailed instructions on preparation of modifications and their application. In battle, Yuketsu likes to play with his opponent, torturing them little by little until they can hardly stand. He uses every fight as an experiment to test himself and his opponent little by little. Incase his opponents gets away from a fight, Yuketsu plants little microbes on them in order to track them down. Before engaging, though, he will make extensive research on his possible opponents to tilt the chance of winning in his favor.

Bleach Wiki wrote:: Mayuri Kurotsuchi is a researcher and personifies the stereotype of the mad scientist. By his early actions during the Ryoka Invasion, he is displayed as one of the most sadistic and cruel Shinigami. He sees everyone and everything not as a living being, but as an object to be researched—including himself.[4] He has little respect or regard for most others, and was even willing to turn his own men (who were not aware of his plans) into living bombs in an attempt to capture Uryū Ishida and Orihime Inoue for experimentation.[5][6] He also withheld vital information about the Bounts from the other Shinigami in order to capture one as a research subject for himself.[7]
It is known that Mayuri's favorite food is pike fish, and that he does not like onion. One of his free-time activities is reading every character published in Seiretei Communication. He himself publishes a serialization in the journal, titled "Effective Medication for the Brain", which apparently contains detailed instructions on preparation of medicine and their application. Surprisingly, it is highly popular among the readers.[8]

http://bleach.wikia.com/wiki/Mayuri

" The act of plagiarizing; taking someone's words or ideas as if they were your own "

You changed it a tiny bit, but it's still the same thing in essence. Just delete the paragraph and start from scratch using your own words and ideas. Once thats done that'll be one less thing to worry about Razz

Summoning

Note: Percentages do not work well in a ranked system, try to avoid them.

Third Eye: How would having a third eye cause this effect? Also, this is a sharingan trait (or too close to it I should say).

Scaled Skin: Why should a summoning with a ninjutsu main get a defense bonus?

Houden no Jutsu (Electrical Discharge Technique): 10 foot dome with electric shock =/= C-rank

Seiteki Shigamitsuku (Static Cling): Magnetism, please remove.

Manako no Same (Shark's Eye): Sharks don't see electric fields, they sense them. Also too powerful for C-rank.

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

More instances of plagiarism:

You wrote:: Yuketsu has potential to be the most intelligent scientific and inventive mind in Kiri. He is also the most cruel and sadistic. His research and inventive skill is entirely without ethics or morality and he commonly makes test subjects of his own allies if it furthers his goals. His mind is full of scientific curiosity which he puts toward all situations and pursuits he comes across

Bleach Wiki wrote:: Mayuri Kurotsuchi is the most intelligent scientific and inventive mind in Soul Society. He is also the most cruel and sadistic. His research and inventive skill is entirely without ethics or morality and he commonly makes test subjects of his own allies if it furthers his goals. His mind is full of scientific curiosity which he puts toward all situations and pursuits he comes across.[61]

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You wrote:: As a member of Kiri Research Institute, Yuketsu is a talented inventor and scientist, having created a number of devices or techniques to aid him in battle or otherwise. As Yuketsu is the mad scientist archetype embodied, he has no morals or empathy in everyday life and apparently his work is devoid of it as well. He is willing to go to any lengths he feels are necessary to achieve his goals, and apparently cares very little for morals or the value of Human life. He often takes no interest in the issues of the village and prefers to engage in his research when such issues arise, unless personally ordered to do otherwise by the kage. By being held for such high regards Yuketsu has become adept to inventing chemicals, body modifications, and items to serve his purpose as a shinobi.

Bleach Wiki wrote:: As the head of the Shinigami Research Institute, Mayuri is a talented inventor and scientist, having created a number of devices or techniques to aid him in battle or otherwise. As Mayuri is the mad scientist archetype embodied, he has no morals or empathy in everyday life and apparently his work is devoid of it as well. He is willing to go to any lengths he feels are necessary to achieve his goals, and apparently cares very little for morals or the value of Human life. He often takes no interest in the issues of Soul Society and prefers to engage in his research when such issues arise, unless personally ordered to do otherwise by Captain-Commander Yamamoto.

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You wrote:: Yuketsu has a talent for being well prepared. He takes various precautions before engaging in personal combat with an adversary, usually studying them through his various methods in order to gain a clear advantage. He seems to always have a contingency plan if something doesn't work out the way he expects.

Bleach Wiki wrote:: Mayuri has a talent for being well prepared. He takes various precautions before engaging in personal combat with an adversary, usually studying them through his various methods in order to gain a clear advantage. He seems to always have a contingency plan if something doesn't work out the way he expects.

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You wrote:: Being a current member of the Research an Development Institute, Yuketsu has otherwise been shown to be an adept chemist. Through his many years of life Yuketsu has become an average chemist among the R@D Institute but far among people of his age. With this knowledge Yuketsu has gained the knowledge to create and research chemicals that normally a genin wouldn't

Bleach Wiki wrote:: Being the current head of the Research an Development Institute, Mayuri has otherwise been shown to be an adept chemist.

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You wrote:: Within his left ear Yuketsu hides a has a ligament and modifies into a Kusarigama upon will as he pull it from within his head. This is a small simple scythe but it is as sharp as any other blade. This Kusarigama is attached to a long expendable rope-like ligament. This Kusarigama is a body modification that appears when Yuketsu pulls out the ligament the tip becomes sharp. When the ligament is with Yuketsu's ear their is no Kusarigama to be found. This is a body modification.

Bleach Wiki wrote:: He is able to pull part of his ear out to form a scythe attached to a rope-like ligament for use as a kusarigama. It is easily as sharp as a standard Zanpakutō, and he is quite skilled in its use.

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You wrote:: After researching and development Yuketsu creates a landmine he designed which is meant to be effective against anything within it's 2m destruction range. Once its sensors anyone near, it detonates violently damaging anyone within a 2m Diameter.

Bleach Wiki wrote:: After rescuing Uryū from Szayel, he gives Uryū a landmine he designed which is meant to be effective against Arrancar. Once its sensors pick up an Arrancar's reiatsu, it detonates violently. Uryū subsequently used it on the Espada Yammy Llargo, with the effect of critically injuring the Arrancar in his sealed state; the explosion was very powerful.[58]

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I am... shocked to say the least( Especially because there were even more plagiarized items on this app before it had began going through moderation.) . This app is the most disappointing thing I have seen on any Naruto site to date... I have nothing more to say for the moment... fix all of this and I'll check again. Make sure you fix everything because my faith in this app is wavering and I am very tempted to just deny the entire thing...

Just so I make my opinion on plagiarism very clear, let me say this: I. Would. Rather. Die. Than. Take. Someone. Else's. Work. So when I say fix I'm really saying " Delete these parts of your apps and completely re-do them.". Its not that hard to write down original thoughts, just do it.

Age : 32 Posts : 95

No it's not hard at all but I figured why do it because I wanted to get approved quickly.

Age : 32 Posts : 95

you know what? I kinda deserve it... deny the app. I'll start this whole app over...I am ashamed

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

Denied and archived.