Senju, Hanikaro [Suna Chuunin]

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Basic Information:

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Clan Information:

Clan Name:
Senju
Clan Location:
Konoha
Clan Traits:
N/a
Kekkei Genkai:
Wood Element jutsu
Secret Clan Jutsu:
All Wood style Jutsu
History:
The Senju clan was descended from the younger of the two brothers chosen by the Sage of the Six Paths to inherit the way of the ninja. He was born with the "body" of the sage, and he believed that love was the key to peace. This led to the sage choosing him as his successor causing his older brother to attack him out of hatred. Eventually, the Uchiha clan was descended from this older brother and resulted in the bitter rivalry of the Senju and Uchiha.

The Senju clan gained their fame in the era before the founding of the hidden villages. Where other clans focused on mastering one particular skill, the Senju were masters in all skills, from ninjutsu, to taijutsu, to genjutsu. Because of this, they were feared as "the clan with a thousand skills" (「千の手を持つ一族」, "sen no te o motsu ichizoku"), which gave them their name Senju (千手, "a thousand skills", "a thousand hands").

The most famous member of the clan was their leader, Hashirama Senju. His unique Wood Release ninjutsu even gave the clan the nickname the Senju clan of the Forest (森の千手一族, Mori no Senju Ichizoku). This Wood Release, and his ability to control the tailed beasts, made him the greatest shinobi of his time.

The Senjus' place at the top of the shinobi world was undisputed, but there was one clan that was able to stand up to them: the Uchiha clan. Whenever one country hired the Senju, their enemies would hire the Uchiha, and vice versa. This led to a rivalry between the two clans and, more specifically, between the leaders of the clans, Hashirama and Madara Uchiha.

However, in a world of constant bloodshed, Hashirama had a dream of peace, and a great love for his fellow men. Known as the "Will of Fire" (火の意志, "Hi no Ishi"), this belief made the Senju clan propose a truce to the Uchiha clan. Weary of fighting, and persuaded by Hashirama's great charisma and negotiation abilities, the Uchiha accepted, ending their bloody rivalry. Only Madara was against this truce, believing the Senju would one day destroy the Uchiha clan. He was forced to accept, but his humiliation wouldn't end there.

Some time after the alliance between the Senju and the Uchiha was signed, the Land of Fire hired them to stabilize its borders, and the clans created a permanent settlement within the country. Thus, Konohagakure was founded, and, with it, the system of one Hidden Village per country. As the system spread throughout the world, the constant violence stopped, and Hashirama's dream began to become a reality. But it would soon start anew after Hashirama was elected as the First Hokage; a move Madara felt was a humiliation, and made him decide to leave the new village, eventually returning to attack it.

Throughout the years, the Senju retained their supremacy over Konoha, and made the village into what it is today. After the First Hokage's death, his younger brother, Tobirama Senju, stepped up to become the Second Hokage. Although likely not a Senju by blood, Hiruzen Sarutobi, who would become the Third Hokage after the Second's death, was trained by both the First and Second. His successor, Minato Namikaze, was the student of Jiraiya, who was a student of the Third. Tsunade, the Fifth Hokage, was not only a student of the Third, but the granddaughter of the First and the grandniece of the Second. All of them strongly held to the Will of Fire philosophy.

It is unknown if the Senju clan currently still exists as an organization. There are no known people with the Senju name currently alive, although the Fifth Hokage, Tsunade, might be an official Senju. It is very possible that the Senju clan disbanded into smaller clans and families, especially since they never had a specific skill or technique like the Uchiha or Hyūga clans. However, their legacy lives on strongly in the hearts of the people of Konoha.

Clan Details:
Open

Rank Information:

Rank:
Chunin
Village Affiliation:
Sunagakure

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub: Genjutsu

Elemental Affinity:
Main: Earth
Sub:Water
KKG: Wood
Special Characteristics:
Little to no emotion. (explained in history) He was born with larger chakra than an average shinobi (possibly due to his heritage, the exact reasons are currently unknown, however, this gap, which was originally small, has gradually increased over time, again the exact reasons are unknown, but some believe it to be a result of his over-the-top training methods, by wearing himself down to 0 chakra while training on several occasions, and barely coming back from the brink of death each time. 115% chakra.

Tactical genius: Hanikaro's cold, pragmatic nature, his amount of battle experience, and his intensive studies of the inner workings of ninjutsu and genjutsu, is an expert tactician, capable of deducing the power and true effects of techniques even beyond his level, and quickly, after relatively limited observation, discovering the inner workings of most jutsu, and therefore can find loopholes in many opponents strategies. -1 post to genjutsu realization time. After witnessing a jutsu at least twice, or a duration jutsu for at least 3 posts, he can understand the majority of any technique up to B-ranks nature (Increases with rank)

Skill Information:

Jutsu Template:

Wood Style:

Basic Jutsu

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Earth Style(Doton)

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Water Stlye(Suiton)

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Genjutsu

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Description:

Weapon Template:

Name: Standard Weaponry
Quantity: 30 Shuriken, 20 Kunai, 15 Explosive tags, 3 flash bombs, 3 smoke bombs, 60 feet of wire
Rank: E
Appearance: Standard shinobi weaponry
Special Abilities/Characteristics: None
Origin: N/a

Name: Throwing Gloves
Quantity: 1 (Pair of gloves)
Rank: C
Appearance: A pair of gloves that look simple, like ordinary shinobi gloves. However, they are specially made to ch channel a minor amount of chakra to the fingertips, which is used when using throwing weapons. This stream is invisible. On the inside of the gloves there is a seal. These gloves are waterproof, and well-stiched making them very durable.
Special Abilities/Characteristics: When the user is throwing a weapon, the chakra channel wraps around the thrown weapons, and causes them to be completely silent as they move through the air. There is no effect other than this.
Origin: In order to use throwing weapons more stealthily, so that he can keep hidden during long-range battles, Hainkaro made these. He had a fuuinjutsu expert from Kiriagakure develop the seal, one that smothers sound, so that he could throw all forms of weaponry without making a sound. He had a pair of Cotton gloves made, and had these wrapped in a light layer of polyester, not enough of one to interfere in the chakra flow, but only enough so that they were waterproof. After that, he began to use them in the field instead of standard shinobi gloves.

Background Information

History:
Hanikaro was born and raised in konohagakure for his first 15 years of life. At a young age, he discovered his kekkei genkai, when he realized he was capable of making sprouts grow out of the earth. He was believed to be orphaned from a young age, and never had any real parental guidance, other than that offered by other members of the village, which was never substantial. However, when the elders discovered that he somehow possessed the rare bloodline limit of the Senju clan, they took great interest in Hanikaro’s progress. He quickly was the excitement of the whole village, thinking he could be the next great prodigy of Konoha.

However, in an argument with another monk, who insited on calling him brat and being condescending towards Hanikaro, mostly out of jealously of the respect he was gaining from the other village members. In a fit of rage, Hanikaro used his superior skill to defeat the surprised genin. After this point he was exiled from the village, and set out for the land of mists, where he felt he could earn respect through being strong. Since he had no formal teaching anymore, during his journey he began to experiment with his deity-blessed ability and invent less conventional methods of utilizing. On the way to the land of mists, Hanikaro was ambushed several times by thugs, or weak ex-ninja, all of whom he found he was able to kill with a surprising lack of guilt. Remembering hearing somewhere that the village of the mists ninja academy ‘test’ was to kill one’s own classmates, he severed the ears of the bandits to use as a trophy when he arrived. Upon reaching the hidden mist village, he was originally denied entrance.

He remained calm and told them of his intention to become a Genin of the village. Even when the Chuunin at the Gate scoffed he still managed to maintain his calm demeanor and presented the ears of his defeated foes. It was only after one of the guards used the very sensitive word ‘brat’ that he lost his cool. He insisted the guard fight him, and the guard, laughing came out with a kunai in hand and encouraged the boy to come at him. He was completely unprepared for the viciousness of the boy’s assault and was almost killed within the first few seconds of the fight. When he finally managed to regain his bearings the child surprised him yet again by slicing his throat in half with a great wooden sword. The remaining guards, awestruck by the now unconscious childs ability, allowed him to by-pass the usual procedure and become a genin.

Genin: tough his time a genin was short, he learned much from it. During this time, he began to master the use of weaponry, and found to his delight, he could manipulate his wood style jutsu to create additional weapons. He found that strangely most elemental technique came to him very difficultly, Yet Earth and wood techniques only took him a very short period off time. Originally he was looked down upon by his teammates, and it was only when he unhesitatingly killed a robber who ambushed the three of them on a return from a D-ranked mission that he gained their respect. He learned much from his Teammates about basic-technique academy techniques.

Unfortunately his ill-fated teammates were to die soon after; Both were killed during the Chunnin exams, one by Hanikaro himself, who originally refused to fight, but, shocked by his former teammate’s desire to kill him and progress in the exams, he realized that his partner bore no such emotional burdens, and cut away the last shreds of his emotional attachment during the battle, and claimed victory. His wood style came in particularly in handy here, as it was something no opponent could have possibly expected from a kiriagakure shinobi. He passed the chuunin exams on his first try.

Chuunin: During his time as a chuunin, Hanikaro’s abilities in weaponry expanded exorbitantly. He found that by tweaking his wood and earth styles in a certain manner could allow him to create a wide variety of weapons, so that he need not carry his own into the field with him always, and could design any weapon to fit his current need. He became a highly valued chuunin and was considered an asset to the village, who took full advantage of his unique ability. He was considered by most to be a ‘support’ hero, but was soon recognized as a chuunin who could perform many roles, especially after he used his Wood Style to defeat a unsuspecting jounin single-handedly. During this period he developed many of the techniques he uses today, including Light Manipulation, his unusual healing ability, pain suppression, and blinding light. He became a jounin at the age of 25. During his time as a chuunin, he completed (with teams and alone) 21 c ranked missions, 32 b ranked missions, and 1 a mission, and killed a supposed 18 people (not including kills he participated in.

His capacities with wood and earth style techniques rose to great heights, and the village elders treated him as a form of trump card, due to the exceedingly rare nature of his techniques. He was granted a title 'The roots of death' in honor of his rare bloodline. He was an excellent soldier- were it not for a strange sadistic streak that was emerging in his nature. His wood style was so adept at taking life, that Hanikaro began to take pleasure in the act of killing others. On missions, he would often butcher innocents needlessly, just for the pleasure it brought him. However, in a war-like village such as kiriagakure, this was a trait to be admired rather than feared. His bloodthirstiness brought him acclaim in the eyes of the shinobi hierarchy, and fear in those of the civilian class- an emotion which he enjoyed observing. It did not take long for Hanikaro to rise to the rank of Jounin.

Role-Play Sample: An’barak trudged through the forest, his cloak wrapped tightly around him. The thick canopyof trees above him dripped with water, as exorbitant amounts of rain somehow managed to still pour through the dense foliage. The cloth of his silk cloak was wet, and beginning to become cold, but An’barak ignored the discomfort. He had heard rumors of a tome of powerful demon lore existed somewhere within this land, and so he had come in search of the knowledge. If anyone could find it, it would be him. He had tracked down several other such artifacts before, and he would do so again. Unfortunately, he had heard rumors of a purported criminal organization that functioned within the area… The Akatsuki. An’barak had much confidence in his own abilities: a whole dozen Anbu hadn’t been able to bring him down, but a fight with a member of that little group was a fight he didn’t need. Their abilities were infamous… He would have to be careful as he searched this land. He stepped in a puddle, as he was lost in thought, and his foot sank deep into the muddy liquid. Muttering a curse as he lifted his leg out, he continued on, as several lightning bolts streaked through the dark cloudy sky, followed shortly by the sound of thunder. It was, in An’barak’s eyes, actually quite a Lovely country. Dark and brooding, the rain country was the perfect place for a demonic artifact to hide.

Indeed, if he weren’t so cold An’barak may even consider living here… But he shrugged away the thought. There was no time to settle down for him, on his quest for power, especially in such a dangerous place. He didn’t want anyone to get word of his existence here, or to hear about that which he was searching for. Criminal organizations had a way of discovering information that was meant to be secret, so An’barak couldn’t afford to ask anyone about what he was looking for. “Damn it.” He muttered. “This may take longer than I thought.” He paused momentarily, glancing up at the dark sky above him, a few drops of rain hitting his scarred face. He continued at his brisk pace, letting out a dull cough. At this rate he would fall ill… He decided that it may be in his best interests to actually set up a camp after all in this hostile environment.

Trudging over to a set of fern tree’s (he remembered from somewhere that these were good for blocking rainwater), he then shot a bolt of shadow energy towards a distant oak, which immeadiatley withered, and crumpled, the life instantly leaving the great tree. An’barak began tearing off limbs, and soon enough, he had enough dead wood to suit his purposes. He wove several quick handsigns, and breathed a ball of fire over the dried twigs, a bonfire quickly crackling and coming to life. He sat down, wrapping his cloak tighter around his frail frame, letting it dry off in the warmth of his fire. He looked up again, more yellow flashes lighting the gloomy gray clouds. In this weather, it seemed fairly pointless to continue on foot. Even for the rain country, this storm seemed pretty bad. He supposed he would have to sit here for quite a while, as he leaned his back against a tree, tapping his foot impatiently, as if the storm would notice his anger and quickly move out of the area. “It’s going to be a long day.” He sighed to himself.

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First things first, these giant walls of text need to broken into paragraphs. I can't read a giant wall of text with no logical breaks and eye rests, neither can many other people, so you need to break things up into paragraphs. Especially your RP Sample, I wouldn't approve a Jounin if they posted like that, nobody wants to read a text wall.

Also, you're going to need more history, like three good paragraphs per arc. Theres only one Jounin slot remaining, besides my own, and I'm expecting high quality to fill it.

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split and lenghtened.

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Your picture isn't inside the little box the template provides for, hence that small box in your app that you may have noticed. I can't see the picture due to my computer but I know its not in the box, so you should either remove the box or put the picture inside of it.

Also, you have a link in your application? You don't need links, especially when it apparently leads nowhere and its also just kind of there for no apparent reason, randomly in parenthesis or something...

You should remove the catch phrase section or put 'None' if you don't have any, otherwise its just cluttering up your application.

Your list codes are broken. List makes them all align with one another, but you may not want that, so either add the finishing list command somewhere or remove the initial command because it just makes the app look bad. Remove all of your (List) or fix the coding.

The Senju clan image shouldn't be in a link, the code should make it display normally as an image so I don't know why you have it displayed as a link because it just makes the application look worse. Fix that.

Ninjutsu isn't capitalized and Genjutsu is as your sub, looks bad, make them both capitalized for visual purposes. Jounin apps are supposed to be looked at as examples so I want it to be perfect visually.

Also, remove the instructions of the Character Template, they don't need to be on your application.

Wood (Mokuton) can't be your Main element, its a clan element, Earth or Water is your Main, and the one thats not your Main is your Sub. Mokuton is neither of them and is a clan based element. You should add Mokuton below your Main and Sub and list is as "Kekkei Genkai Element".

Your special characteristics each need to be separated and each needs to be described in a paragraph or more. Why do you have better control/more chakra? How? When did you achieve this? How does this feature in your character? Etc.

For your jutsu, organize them. Separate them into element, letter rank, and type, this is just a giant messy blob of jutsu. Also, they come in a code with bolding, I want to see bolding on every single jutsu. Capitalize the names of your jutsu, the words that need to be anyhow. Totally serious about this...

Light Bending: Seems more Clan Jutsu-ish for a Light clan, remove this.

App wrote:: Name: Armor of the Forest God
Rank: S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wood
Description: After weaving several handsigns, the clan member will activate the jutsu. Almost immediately after activation, beams of wood will shoot out of his body in all directions, and then wrap around the user. It will do this for several seconds, until an elegant suit of completely wooden armor is formed. It appears to resemble a suit of dense plate mail, complete with a full plate helm, and is surprisingly well-jointed, allowing full ranges of movement. The wood, after formation, then petrifies itself, turning as hard as rock, but losing little of its mobility in the process. This armor is extremely strong, capable of deflecting most physical attacks easily (kunai, punches) and can absorb the force of a wide variety of ninjutsu. If the armor is broken through, it can be recreated at the point where it was destroyed for an appropriate chakra cost.

First off, Jounin are A Ranked, you can't even use this jutsu. Secondly, how do you assemble full plate mail and make it so you're not encumbered both movement-wise and weight wise? What's an 'appropriate chakra cost'?

App wrote:: Name: Petrify
Rank: D-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wood
Description: for a slight additional chakra cost to the additional cost of the jutsu (2 ranks below the original rank of the technique it is being applied to) the user can cause any wood style technique to change from normal wood to petrified wood- greatly increasing the strength of the wood, turning it to an almost stone like nature.

You do realize petrified wood can't move right? So you could use this AFTER you used a Mokuton jutsu because otherwise the wood couldn't move, thus the jutsu wouldn't work in the first place. Also, one rank below for cost, two ranks below is too cheap.

App wrote:: Name: He who built the forest
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wood
Description: Using a large amount of chakra, and after weaving a large number of handsigns, the user slams his hands on the ground, and causes it to burst forth with a dense forest of trees. The trees grow very gradually, at around 3 feet per second, therefore are capable of causing very little damage, but are rather used to build a forest for the Senju clan member to use as a weapon throughout the fight.

Uhhh...Birth of Dense Woodland, and other Canon Senju jutsu, do the same thing, why do you have this?

Wooden Weapons: Only Basic Ninja Weapons, I can't allow you pull out specialty weapons and using them without the appropriate spec.

Tracer Seeds: C Rank.

Sprout: Needs more details. How large are the trees? How quickly? Etc. Also, three trees at max for a C Rank jutsu. I'd allow 5 at B, and the total of 8 at A. Eight trees covers quite a bit of ground and adds great versatility.

Walking Woods: S Rank, which you can't use, so remove it.

Entangling Roots: C Rank, make it a little bit longer.

He Who Walks In Trees: How long does this take? How far can you travel? What happens if the tree your in is damaged? What happens if that tree is destroyed? Also, B Rank.

Wood Trick: D Rank.

Thorned Wire: Why does it have no element in the template? Also, how does a metal wire grow thorns? You can't manipulate metal so it makes no sense as its written to make thorns come out of a wire.

Pollen Stream: Crosses into other plants territories, pollen is not characteristicly a tree thing so please remove this.

Foliage Veil: Very similar to a technique I created...

Moi wrote:: Name: Kusari Myaku - Chain Pulse
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description: An Oparu Clan jutsu developed by Camuraki Oparu. The clan member places their hand on an object and channels pure double-helix chakra into it, causing the object's chakra to disrupt and fail and the chakra to burst out at weak points in it. If used on a tree, for example, the chakra causes the tree to die (though this is not visible) and causes the leaves to break off the tree as that is the weakest point where the chakra can break free. Doing this causes the finger tips to bleed.

Also, Senju manipulate the tree, not the leaves and what not in it. Besides being similar to a clan jutsu already in existence it doesn't matter the Senju's abilities so I wouldn't approve of it regardless.

Tree Ally: At least B Rank, needs way more details. How do you control it? How good is the control? How far away can the tree be? Do you have maintain some form of contact? Can you use jutsu with it? How long? Etc.

Petal Dance: Not related to trees, also crosses into Shokobutsukon territory, remove.

Wood Clone: Its apparently D Rank on the site, though it has a different description than what you've stated. Please use the site provided clan information on this jutsu.

Body Flicker: D Rank, and thats not what the jutsu does or what its for. I believe we have a description of the jutsu somewhere on the site...

Wood Locking Wall: Use the clan jutsu.

Wood Expansion: How much growth? What can it effect?

Thorn Whip: Not Mokuton. Remove.

Spear Form: How long? How large? Made of wood? You haven't provided much detail on these, do they have arrow head tips or some special kind of tip? Are they attached to the hand? Etc.

Blind Attack Ring: Senju control Wood, not Plant. Removed.

Grass Skating: How does a wooden end help you move quicker? Especially through grass, that doesn't make much sense.

Hidden Vineyard: Plant Element, remove.

Gatling Seeds: Plant Element, remove.

Roots of Time: Much more detail.

Razor Leaves: Plant Element, remove.

Four Pillars Home: Please use the site provided version.

Splinter Grenade: How does this work? How does it detonate? Normal chakra doesn't explode, only special forms like Deidara's, and you don't have Katon to use a combustion reaction to cause an explosion, so how do you cause this?

Bamboo Forest: Not Mokuton, remove.

Seed of Thorn Vines: Plant Element, remove.

Spore Burst: Plant Element, remove.

Great Forest: Please use the site provided version.

Tree Restraints: Please use the site provided version.

Forest Genesis: Please use the site provided version.

Four Pillars Prison: Please use the site provided version.

Earth Trick: D Rank.

Earth Rope: D Rank.

Ground Thorns: C Rank. More details, how large of an area? How big are the spikes?

Inner Decapitation: C Rank despite Canon information.

Crack: More details. How large? Can this affect any kind of earth and rock? What about other Doton jutsu? Etc.

Armor of Earth: B Rank.

Terra Musica: More fitting to a Kekkei Genkai or Weapon ability, remove.

Earth Clone: B Rank.

Speed Pillars: How many pillars per use?

Rock Fissure: Makes no sense. This isn't Looney Toons, theres subtance underneath the opponent, so cutting a circle around them wouldn't do anything whatsoever as you describe it. I'd highly suggest removing unless you failed to explain something or I failed to understand something.

Mud Bomb: How do you detonate it? I asked this before on one of your Mokuton jutsu, refer to that.

Rock Fist: More details.

Earth Flow: More details.

Weapons of Rising Earth: How many? How large? And Basic Shinobi Weapons only please.

Call of Chains: I assume those chains are made of earth? The technique doesn't specify, fix that.

Earth Cage: A Rank.

Magnitude: How powerful? Whats the range?

Gaia Hammer: How large? How strong? Does it weigh you down? How fast can you attack with it? Etc.

Earth Mirrors: Just plain makes no sense. How do you make a mirror of earth? You cant reflect off of rock. And how do attacks go through it and come out of one end? Its makes no sense at all, remove.

Earth Dragon: How large? How long? Etc.

Rock Bombardment: More details.

Harden: How does this justu work? How long does it last? Does it consume chakra each post? Etc.

If you finish up with these and intend to keep the character then I'll go over the side details like Looks, Personality, and History. I've left these out for now.

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Btw, Senju Clan is only available for Konoha

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DaHashi wrote:: Btw, Senju Clan is only available for Konoha

Where does it say this? also, In my history i explained how I arrived in kiriagakure from konoha

Working on the rest.

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Alright, I believe i have fixed everything, and added water-style since i was unaware i could have a 3rd element along with kkg. Also, I'm Not sure why He Who Walks with the Trees needs to be b-rank, as it gives a similar effect to the Earth style technique to go underground, only with less versatility.

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There are still things I posted in my first post that have not been corrected, I would rather not individually go over all the things that you missed so please re-read my post and double check everything you've done.

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pretty sure I fixed everything, checked again, edited 1-2 things i saw that were still wrong, but i don't see terribly many.

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Jsalos wrote:: Special Information:

~~[list]~~Character Speciality:
~~You may pick 2 skills:~~
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub: Weaponry
Elemental Affinity:
~~What element(s) your character possesses, no more than two~~
Main: Earth
Sub:Water
KKG: Wood
Special Characteristics:
No strong emotions (explained in history)

Lets start there, that should've been removed like I said.

And I'll repeat myself, you haven't made the changes I set out, that above proves it when I asked you to remove such things. You also have 5+ jutsu that you haven't editted according to what I asked, and I'm just flipping through the list. They're incredibly obvious, and I don't like repeating myself so many times, if the changes aren't made, or you don't explain why the changes weren't made, the application will not receive my approval, which you need to make a Kiri Jounin.

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Petrify: Done

He Who Built The Forest: I have it because A. I cannot have S-rank jutsu, and B: because forest genesis is far to quick and offensive when compared to this jutsu. This takes quite some time to set up actual trees, but in contrast, it gradually makes a quite wide area for me to use for further techs.

Wooden Weapons: Only Basic Ninja Weapons, I can't allow you pull out specialty weapons and using them without the appropriate spec. Done

Tracer Seeds: C Rank. Done

Sprout: Needs more details. How large are the trees? How quickly? Etc. Also, three trees at max for a C Rank jutsu. I'd allow 5 at B, and the total of 8 at A. Eight trees covers quite a bit of ground and adds great versatility. Done

Walking Woods: S Rank, which you can't use, so remove it. Done

Entangling Roots: C Rank, make it a little bit longer. Done

He Who Walks In Trees: How long does this take? How far can you travel? What happens if the tree your in is damaged? What happens if that tree is destroyed? Also, B Rank. Did the descriptions on them, however, i don't understand why this should be b-rank, when a a more versatile technique, Such as Subtarranean Fish, is C.

Wood Trick: D Rank.

Thorned Wire: Why does it have no element in the template? Also, how does a metal wire grow thorns? You can't manipulate metal so it makes no sense as its written to make thorns come out of a wire.: Done

Pollen Stream: Crosses into other plants territories, pollen is not characteristicly a tree thing so please remove this.: done

Foliage Veil: Very similar to a technique I created...: already Discussed this one

Tree Ally: At least B Rank, needs way more details. How do you control it? How good is the control? How far away can the tree be? Do you have maintain some form of contact? Can you use jutsu with it? How long? Etc. I made it C- and limited it more, given how limited it is I don't think it should be B.

Petal Dance: Not related to trees, also crosses into Shokobutsukon territory, remove. Done

Wood Clone: Its apparently D Rank on the site, though it has a different description than what you've stated. Please use the site provided clan information on this jutsu. Done

Body Flicker: D Rank, and thats not what the jutsu does or what its for. I believe we have a description of the jutsu somewhere on the site... Removed

Wood Locking Wall: Use the clan jutsu. Done

Wood Expansion: How much growth? What can it effect? Done

Thorn Whip: Not Mokuton. Remove. Done

Spear Form: How long? How large? Made of wood? You haven't provided much detail on these, do they have arrow head tips or some special kind of tip? Are they attached to the hand? Etc. Done

Blind Attack Ring: Senju control Wood, not Plant. Removed.Done

Grass Skating: How does a wooden end help you move quicker? Especially through grass, that doesn't make much sense. Removed

Hidden Vineyard: Plant Element, remove. Done

Gatling Seeds: Plant Element, remove. Done

Roots of Time: Much more detail. Done

Razor Leaves: Plant Element, remove. Done

Four Pillars Home: Please use the site provided version. Done

Splinter Grenade: How does this work? How does it detonate? Normal chakra doesn't explode, only special forms like Deidara's, and you don't have Katon to use a combustion reaction to cause an explosion, so how do you cause this? Done

Bamboo Forest: Not Mokuton, remove. Changed to Mokuton

Seed of Thorn Vines: Plant Element, remove. Done

Spore Burst: Plant Element, remove. Done

Great Forest: Please use the site provided version. Done

Tree Restraints: Please use the site provided version. Non-existent, there is a similar technique, but it is not the same one.

Forest Genesis: Please use the site provided version. Removed

Four Pillars Prison: Please use the site provided version. Done

Earth Trick: D Rank. Done

Earth Rope: D Rank. Done

Ground Thorns: C Rank. More details, how large of an area? How big are the spikes? Done

Inner Decapitation: C Rank despite Canon information. Done

Crack: More details. How large? Can this affect any kind of earth and rock? What about other Doton jutsu? Etc. Done

Armor of Earth: B Rank. Done

Terra Musica: More fitting to a Kekkei Genkai or Weapon ability, remove. Done

Earth Clone: B Rank. Done

Speed Pillars: How many pillars per use? Done

Rock Fissure: Makes no sense. This isn't Looney Toons, theres subtance underneath the opponent, so cutting a circle around them wouldn't do anything whatsoever as you describe it. I'd highly suggest removing unless you failed to explain something or I failed to understand something. Removed

Mud Bomb: How do you detonate it? I asked this before on one of your Mokuton jutsu, refer to that. Done

Rock Fist: More details. Done

Earth Flow: More details. Done

Weapons of Rising Earth: How many? How large? And Basic Shinobi Weapons only please. Done- since I changed to weaponry spec, I am assuming that I can form advanced weapons now as well

Call of Chains: I assume those chains are made of earth? The technique doesn't specify, fix that. Done

Earth Cage: A Rank. Done

Magnitude: How powerful? Whats the range? Done

Gaia Hammer: How large? How strong? Does it weigh you down? How fast can you attack with it? Etc.

Earth Mirrors: Just plain makes no sense. How do you make a mirror of earth? You cant reflect off of rock. And how do attacks go through it and come out of one end? Its makes no sense at all, remove. Done

Earth Dragon: How large? How long? Etc. Done

Rock Bombardment: More details. Done

Harden: How does this justu work? How long does it last? Does it consume chakra each post? Etc. Done

Alright, hit every jutsu again, hopefully its all good this time.

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Jsalos wrote:: Wooden Weapons: Only Basic Ninja Weapons, I can't allow you pull out specialty weapons and using them without the appropriate spec. Done

How many weapons can you create? How large? How many at one time?

Jsalos wrote:: He Who Walks In Trees: How long does this take? How far can you travel? What happens if the tree your in is damaged? What happens if that tree is destroyed? Also, B Rank. Did the descriptions on them, however, i don't understand why this should be b-rank, when a a more versatile technique, Such as Subtarranean Fish, is C.

Underground takes time time to set up and thus can't be used to dodge attacks, this jutsu does not have such a time delay. Also, they don't fuse with the earth, they move through it, you're actually becoming a part of it. Also, what happens if you are attacked while in the tree and you're hit? What happens if the whole tree is destroyed? You still didn't answer those questions.

Jsalos wrote:: Thorned Wire: Why does it have no element in the template? Also, how does a metal wire grow thorns? You can't manipulate metal so it makes no sense as its written to make thorns come out of a wire.: Done

No, it still makes no sense, how do you make thorns grow out of metal? First off, thorns are Plant element, and second off, you can't cause things to grow out of metal unless you can manipulate the metal in some manner as you've stated it.

Jsalos wrote:: Tree Ally: At least B Rank, needs way more details. How do you control it? How good is the control? How far away can the tree be? Do you have maintain some form of contact? Can you use jutsu with it? How long? Etc. I made it C- and limited it more, given how limited it is I don't think it should be B.

Fine.

Jsalos wrote:: Wood Expansion: How much growth? What can it effect? Done

Still not adequate, you mention weight, not size. I want a size.

Jsalos wrote:: Spear Form: How long? How large? Made of wood? You haven't provided much detail on these, do they have arrow head tips or some special kind of tip? Are they attached to the hand? Etc. Done

8ft at max for a C Rank jutsu.

Jsalos wrote:: Roots of Time: Much more detail. Done

How fast?

Jsalos wrote:: Splinter Grenade: How does this work? How does it detonate? Normal chakra doesn't explode, only special forms like Deidara's, and you don't have Katon to use a combustion reaction to cause an explosion, so how do you cause this? Done

Still doesn't make any sense, you haven't describe how you can create an outwards pushing force to propel the shrapnel, or how powerful the propellant is.

Jsalos wrote:: Bamboo Forest: Not Mokuton, remove. Changed to Mokuton

How large? How far? How many? How long?

Jsalos wrote:: Tree Restraints: Please use the site provided version. Non-existent, there is a similar technique, but it is not the same one.

Please note you have to have the opponent already subdued to have any chance to hit with it.

Jsalos wrote:: Ground Thorns: C Rank. More details, how large of an area? How big are the spikes? Done

I want an area of feet this jutsu effects, a 'small area' is subjective.

Jsalos wrote:: Crack: More details. How large? Can this affect any kind of earth and rock? What about other Doton jutsu? Etc. Done

How wide?

Jsalos wrote:: Speed Pillars: How many pillars per use? Done

Too many for a C Rank, try three.

Jsalos wrote:: Rock Fist: More details. Done

B Rank. Too powerful for C Rank.

Jsalos wrote:: Earth Flow: More details. Done

Too far, deep, and wide, 25ft long, 3ft deep and 5ft wide and you have a deal

Jsalos wrote:: Weapons of Rising Earth: How many? How large? And Basic Shinobi Weapons only please. Done- since I changed to weaponry spec, I am assuming that I can form advanced weapons now as well

Only those that match your spec.

Puppet Seal: Physical contact or this is a no-go. Also, describe what happens each post to the puppet.

Suiton Jutsu are WIP, please hold.

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All changes requested so far have been made.

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le bump of power

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Weaponry, please refer to our Weaponry Guide, you get a main and sub weapon spec.

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where is this guide? dont see it in weapons section, rules/guides section, or character section.

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Name:Suiton: Shiryoku [Water Release: Sight] (Doujutsu)
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element:Water
Description: The user is able to see light without it being bent by water. This allows them to see through a mist, or to the bottom of a pond.

You can't possibly do this without bending light which would require a light affinity from a clan or Kekkei Genkai.

Name:Suiton: Ningyou no Funryuu Ito [Water Release: Water Jet Puppet Strings]
Rank: C
Type:Ninjutsu
Element:Water
Description: After using Kugutsu no jutsu the user will apply elemental affinity to their strings in this case water. Only five strings can be made at any time because of the added focus in applying the element. No other jutsu that requires seals can be preformed unless this one is canceled for obvious reasons. After extending the strings from their finger tips each will become like a high power jet of water which can only reach about 15 meters. They strike the enemy with enough force to cause bruising and knock back. Until canceled the jets will continue to spray and slowly drain on chakra. Does not require handseals.

-_- You don't use Kugutsu, why is this on your app?

Name:Mayomeru [Purify]
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water
Description: The user places their hands on a surface of water and causes all man-harmful impurities to be removed from it. This makes the water suitable for human usage and probably more easy to manipulate by Suiton.

You can't remove jutsu or poisons with this technique, otherwise its OP.

Name:Suiton: Suisou [Water Release: Water Camouflage]
Rank: C
Type:Ninjutsu
Element:Water
Description: The user performs a short string of handseals then stands still in a pool of water for a few moments. He then sinks into it turning completely into water. The user loses mobility but can still see and sense his surroundings. This makes for a good surveillance or ambush technique.

What happens if the pool is heated up or crystalized?

Name:Mizu Kyuuin [Water Absorption]
Rank: C
Type:Ninjutsu
Element:Water
Description: Certain Suiton jutsus require water, this jutsu allows the user to absorb water for future use for a single jutsu whatever the rank is. In other words, the user has to charge his body with water before fighting, and during the battle the water reserved by the technique will serve as a source for a single jutsu execution only.

You can't use a C Rank jutsu to prepare other jutsu, also, the cost of whatever justu you prepared will have to come out of your topic based limit or else this is effectively bonus jutsu without a clan ability that would enable you to do so.

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changes made.

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The Weapons Guide is currently not up, but lemme get the gist of it for you.

Quote :: - Weaponry users on US 2.0 are combined with Kenjutsu, though you can still have 'Kenjutsu'. With the current system you choose two types of weapon and you specialize in these types of weapon. One is your main, the other your sub. Your main can be used up to your own rank, your sub may be used up to 2 ranks below your rank, always being at least D Rank. Other than your two chosen, you're treated as a normal ninja.

You may pick from the following categories:

Swords - All forms of Sword
Axes - All forms of Axe
Polearms - All forms of polarms, from spears to halberds
Blunt - All blunt weaponary, such as hammers, maces, ninchucks etc
Ranged - All ranged weaponary such as bows and advanced forms of shuriken/kunai
Exotic - Any weapons that don't fall into the norm such as whips and chains. Really odd shaped weapons of whatever variety count as exotic

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Would Armor fall under the exotic category?

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Weapons are considered miscelaneous weapons meaning you can have them like items, ex. rings, guantlets, etc.

But then again our wep specialist may have something else to say.

Subject: Re: Senju, Hanikaro [Suna Chuunin] Thu 18 Feb 2010, 6:21 am

weapon signifies attack. armor is primarily deffense. armors would be an item

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so theoretically, anyone, not just those with weaponry spec could have special suits of armor?