Kaiku Clan [Old]

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Name: Kaiku

Kekkei Genkai:

Members of the Kaiku clan have adapted and evolved to a point that they are almost a different species then most of the ninja race. Kaiku clan members have extremely pale and rough skin along with some reptilian features. Their teeth are adapted to be carnivorous, which eliminates molars and replaces them with more canine teeth. Kaiku clan members also lack fingernails and instead have long retractable claws that are stronger then steel.

Chant Signs:
Because of their superior intellect, Kaiku clan members can perform chants instead of handsigns when needed. These chants are so silent that only the user can hear them. There is a one syllable chant for every kind of hand seal and each one corresponds to one hand seal. A kaiku clan member must say them in succession in the same way another ninja would have to make the hand seals. This makes Kaiku members able to be combat effective even when their arms are taken up.

Super Skin:
The skin of Kaiku clan members is extremely tough and durably. This skin is tougher then most metals, meaning regular weaponry would simply glance off Kaiku clan members. Depending on the rank of the Kaiku, the skin is harder. Each rank of Kaiku can block weapons that are one rank below them as a passive ability (ex: B-Rank Kaiku can block C-rank weapons.). This is completely passive and costs no chakra since this is just their normal skin. There are three types of Kaiku super skin, each with a certain ability that comes with that type. One type of Kaiku clan members stayed in the volcanoes to live, giving them burn resistance. Others went to the top of mountains where thunderstorms occured often, giving them paralysis resistance. The third group went to the bramble forest where they were cut on a daily basis, forcing their bodies to develop protections from these cuts.

Burning: Living in a volcanoes for most of their life, Kaiku members are immune to burns and could even walk through magma without hurting themselves. This does not stop the impact force of an attack, but does protect from the heat. Kaiku members from this origin are usually darker in coloration, giving their normally pale skin a tanned appearance. This change in appearance can give away their skins abilities if someone that knows about the Kaiku clan were examining them.

Paralysis: Kaiku members are immune to paralysis because their evolved skin does not conduct electricity, it actually has a weak repelling force to electrical attacks. This prevents clan members from being paralyzed with electrical attacks, this excludes anything else. Kaiku clan members that have this skin attribute are more vascular then the other types of Kaiku. These veins protrude from the skin and are very visible from close to medium range. This change in appearance can give away their skins abilities if someone that knows about the Kaiku clan were examining them.

Bleeding: Kaiku clan blood is extremely thick. Because of this, cuts that clan members have do not bleed and instead scab up before any blood can even flow out. The viscosity of this blood is due to the high concentrates of iron in it . Kaiku with this trait don't bleed red like other ninja or kaiku. Instead they bleed a medium shade of purple when they actually do bleed. This blood color is also shown in their scabs because it makes the scabs look like dark purple patches. This change in appearance can give away their skins abilities if someone that knows about the Kaiku clan were examining them

Partial Body Metamorphosis:
Kaiku clan members can have the ability to morph parts of their body into desired forms. This is not a ‘basic’ ability and can only be used if the Kaiku has medical as a specialty. This is not shape shifted, which would be completely morphing into another shape. There are six categories of partial body metamorphosis, Arms, Legs, Torso, Internal, External, and Head. At D-rank, a Kaiku can only access two of these. At C-rank they can access three. At B-rank they can access four. At A-rank five. And at S-rank all six. All six of these categories can be used at once to create a form like a full body metamorphosis, but there is still a fine line of difference. These do cost chakra and must be put into the jutsu template. Here is a run down of each type of metamorphosis:

Arms:
Having access to arm metamorphosis technique means the Kaiku can morph their arms into different tools to help in any battle situation. (Ex- arm blades, shield arms, axe arms.)(Note: Once an arm transformation is used, it Stays the entire topic.)

Legs:
Leg metamorphosis is usually used to help a Kaiku traverse terrains or gain speed or dexterity. It is not impossible to use this offensively though. Using this type of metamorphosis correctly can give a Kaiku a major advantage in a battle. (Ex: Swimming legs, jumping legs, tails)(Note: Once a leg transformation is used, it stays the entire topic.)

Torso:
The torso category consists of everything but arms and legs. Basically everything above the waist except the arms( Tails fall into leg metamorphosis). This is possibly the least limited type of metamorphosis and can be used for offense or defense.(Ex: Wings or horns)(Note: Once a Torso transformation is used, it stays the entire topic.)

Head
The head category is a category that is mainly fixed on vision changing jutsu, but can be used for other things such as horns.(Ex: Eyes, Hair, Horns.)(Note: Head transformations stay the entire topic they are used. Vision is an exception to this however.)

External
The external category covers the entire outer layer of the body, skin. External transformations are used to change skin types and are very limited due to this one category of use.

Internal
The internal category covers everything under the skin excluding muscles. This category is somewhat limited but can be used to avoid fatal damage in most cases.(Ex: Blood vessels, organs.)

Here is a quick run down of each rank metamorphosis jutsu and what level they should be at.

C-Rank: Change in shape, no abilities or second functions.
B-Rank: Change in shape, an ability OR a second function.
A-Rank: Change in shape, an ability, and a second function.
S-Rank: Change in shape, multiple abilities, multiple functions.

Hyper Evolution:
Kaiku members, being of a different species, have the ability to evolve or adapt to a situation in a matter of seconds. This is done by exposing themselves to a certain type of attack until they gain an immunity to it. To do this, Kaiku clan members must be HIT by that type of attack three times and then wait one post for the transformation to occure before they become almost completely immune to it. This immunity is only as strong as the Kaiku's rank, meaning this immunity makes them immune to attacks of their rank and below (excluding S-rank. The one exception to this rule is ' Perfect Evolution', a clain trait only S-rank Kaiku can use. 'Perfect Evolution' allows the Kaiku to pick one type of hyper evolution and increase it's power to be able to block S-rank attacks). An example of this is if they were hit by a katon element attack. Once they’ve been hit with a fire ball for example three times, they become almost completey immune to the element and can walk through fires without harming themselves in any way. This works for certain specialties as well as elements, this is elaborated more here:

Katon:
After being hit by three fire attacks, Kaiku members develop fire proof skin for one topic. This skin is very black and rugged, as if they have been charred by the fire. After the skin is gained, that Kaiku member is completely immune to Katon based attacks, meaning they can not be incinerated. However, this does not protect from the impact forces of attacks. This can only block katon jutsu up to the Kaiku's rank once activated unless the Kaiku has picked katon as their 'Perfect Evolution'.

Raiton:
After being hit by three lightning attacks, Kaiku members develop small spikes all over their skin that repel electricity. The spikes are essentially reverse lightning rods. Instead of being made of material that attracts lightning, they are made of skin that repels lightning. These spikes also utilize positive and negative charges to repel raiton attacks. These small spikes are so powerful, that lightning can't even touch the clan member and is instead diverted away from them as if they were protected by an orb of some kind. The lightning looks as if it hit the side of an orb and the flies off the sides of it, making the attacks shoot past the Kaiku. This gives them immunity to raiton for the entire topic. This can only block raiton jutsu up to the Kaiku's rank once activated unless the Kaiku has picked raiton as their 'Perfect Evolution'.

Fuuton:
After being hit by three wind based attacks, Kaiku clan members develop an immunity to the element by hardening their skin to a point that it can not be cut by wind attacks at all. This is like an advancement of their normal super skin, making it even tougher then normal. This prevents wind from cutting into it no matter how powerful it is. The Kaiku can still be blown back by the jutsu though. This can only block fuuton jutsu up to the Kaiku's rank once activated unless the Kaiku has picked fuuton as their 'Perfect Evolution'.

Suiton:
After being hit by three water based attacks, Kaiku clan members grow gills, fins, and scales onto their body. This makes them able to battle on land and underwater with ease. The Kaiku member breaths underwater like a fish would, using scales and gills in place of lungs to process oxygen. The fins that the Kaiku grows are located on their arms and legs and are different sizes depending on the size of the user. These fins help the Kaiku move very fast underwater, faster then they would be able to run on land. This can only block suiton jutsu up to the Kaiku's rank once activated unless the Kaiku has picked suiton as their 'Perfect Evolution'.

Doton:
After being hit by three doton based attacks, Kaiku clan members develop extreme strength and endurance to combat the earth element. Their body covers over with calluses that seem to armor them. This adaptation allows Kaiku members trudge over any terrain without any trouble. This also makes them able to completely demolish the earth with a single punch. Another ability this gives them is the ability to extend their calluses into shields on their arms, guarding them from attacks. This can only block doton jutsu up to the Kaiku's rank once activated unless the Kaiku has picked doton as their 'Perfect Evolution'.

Kenjutsu/Weaponry/Puppetry:
After being struck with three Kenjutsu/Weaponry/Puppetry attacks(Struck as in cutting the skin or making contact with the skin.), Kaiku members skin starts to swell up and down, representing the change in their body. When a sword tries to strike them after the change, the sword is immediately stuck to the skin and gets absorbed into the Kaiku’s body. This new skin works like a glue trap. When a weapon comes into contact with the skin, it gets stuck in it and pullTo do this however, a weapon has to make physical contact with the skin, if the chakra protruding from a blade hits the skin it does nothing. This effectives puppets physical attacks, like swords or kunai they may be equipped with. Any jutsu or techniques a puppet has that uses another form of attack are exempt ( Like poisons or flames.). Once the sword has made contact, there is no way to pull it out. The weapon is absorbed and grinded up inside the Kaiku and is then excrete as a pile of useless scrape. This can only block Kenjutsu/Weaponry/Puppetry attacks up to the Kaiku's rank once activated unless the Kaiku has picked Kenjutsu/Weaponry/Puppetry as their 'Perfect Evolution'.

Secret Clan Jutsu:

Metamorphasis Jutsu:

Arms

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Legs:

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Torso:

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History:

Long ago, in a large village in demon country, there was a giant volcano that erupted daily. This daily eruption endangered the nearby village but was block by a squad of ninja that were specifically trained to combat the lava. For years that was how the village lived, under daily assault of an angry volcano. Years passed, and the number of ninja able to combat this lava daily decreased by the day. Eventually there weren’t enough of these ninja to block the lava and the village was almost destroyed. In a despite attempt to save the village, the elders prayed to the demon lord of the volcano to stop the constant attacks. The demon lord demanded human sacrifice and the villagers hastily complied. The next day, at the normal time the volcano would erupt, there was no eruption. Happy, the villagers celebrated for weeks while a dark plot was unfolding in the administrators building. The leader of the village was devising a plan to attack the volcano and it’s inhabitants, making sure that there was no more threat.

A week later, the attack was launched and a group of 20 ninja entered the volcano. Angered, the volcano god emerge to meet the attack. The demon lord of the volcano was the first of the Kaiku clan. Every attack the ninja tried, he would only gain an immunity to and then they had to try another. This went on until all of their attacks were useless and remaining ninja were cornered. Feeling pity on the ninja, the demon lord sent them back with a note. This note demanded the immediate sacrifice of the survivors to the demon. Scared, the villagers did what they were asked to do and continued to live their lives.

The volcano lord was no fool, and knew that the humans would try to attack again someday. To protect the volcano, he created a race of demonic humans and started his own ninja clan known as the Kaiku.

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Age : 30 Posts : 1701

Each section of your kkg needs to be developed in a clearer fashion and MUCH more detailed. probably at least 2 paragraphs per section.

Beyond that, your hyper evolution is really OP

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

Im not trying to seem rude, but I think you may want to read the prerequisite to evolve and then reevaluate your thoughts on it.

Age : 30 Posts : 1701

So you have to be hit by three attacks...AND THEN YOU GET IMMUNITY. Immunity is the key word. There is no immunity in the naruto world, especially not against every element from just 3 attacks.

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

IF you want me to make it take longer to gain it, all you had to do was ask =P Added a one post delay

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No. Immunity will never be allowed. You can have resistance, based on the rank of the attacks you wistood. Thats it.

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The fact of the matter is that it isn't just granted immunity. In a naruto fight, the one hit that successfully hits the opponent is the one that ends the battle. That hit is usually the only time that the person is hit, meaning one hit can make or break a battle. If this immunity was par say, complete immunity to C-A rank attacks with no consequence, then that would be a problem. With that said, getting hit by one attack, let alone three is highly dangerous.

Now, if we leave the word immunity and think about the power of this trait, we would notice that it isn't terrible high due to the previously mentioned points. Also, immunity is in the naruto world and on some apps as well. Immunity to poison perhaps? Saying there is no immunity in the naruto world is a bold statement.

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

finished with everything Razz

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

C'mon, I'm trying to finish my character this week and if this isn't approved I can't really get anywhere...

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Chant Signs: Needs more details, how long do these chant takes? How many different words or syllables or whatever are possible, there should be 12 similar to the 12 handsigns.

Super Skin: What rank of weapon can it negate? Also, with the three effects, that makes clan members pretty OP, so make it so a clan member may choose one of those effects, and also, provide enough detail in each to fill a paragraph.

Each of your types of immunity need to be made to exclude jutsu above the user's rank, in addition, they should also exclude S Rank period because S Rank should never be negated by anything else unless it is of the opposing element on the chart. More details, especially for Weaponry, need to be included.

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As suggested during our talk, the metamorphs should be split into five categories.

With Puppetry/Weaponry/Kenjutsu, you haven't specified what I was looking for. And it just doesn't make much sense, because your skin adapting to a weapon might make sense if you picked a kind of damage and the skin change was different, but as is its not very doable. If your skin got hard, blunt damage would wreck you, if it got soft, slashing damage would wreck you, if it got smooth piercing damage would right on through.

With Kugutsu, an overall block would be impossible, because the puppet can do loads of different things. You could adapt to one style of damage (from peircing, slashing, blunt, and explosive) but you couldn't cover them all. Also, poison, would be a different adaptation completely.

Since you kinda live in the same house as me I'll go over and hand pick out where more details need to go, it'd take time to post all of that...

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Done~

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LE BUMP

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Approved, if I missed anything, let me know.

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You need to put it into the correct site clan template or it will not be approved.

Is this clan 'open' or 'closed'. I don't know because it is a foreign template. GODDAM IT Z! smarten your act up mate! xD

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Sorry about that. I joined the site real early on so I started making this clan on the first template that was posted =P

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mmkay then. Approved.

Age : 37 Posts : 1136

Clan has been unlocked and unapproved in preparation for re-moderation following staff discussion. So that you are not adversely affect your PC in the interim it is assumed you will continue to possess the clan traits as previously approved until moderation is finished. Thank you for you patience.

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Question, can I re-work the clan pre-moderation? Because I think I can pretty much guess what is wrong because I can see it myself and I planned on doing some fiddling during my next update. Also, it should save time for those who are going to check the app if I knock out some of the problems before they even have to lift a finger Razz

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Actually, a list or overview of what ya'll want to be patched up or removed would really help me in editing this bad boy.

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Quote :: Chant Signs
...Kaiku clan members can perform chants instead of handsigns when needed. These chants are so silent that only the user can hear them...This makes Kaiku members able to be combat effective even when their arms are taken up.

So even if both of their arms are amputated, a clan member is still capable of normally using Ninjutsu or Genjutsu. Silently. Really?

Quote :: Super Skin
This skin is tougher then most metals, meaning regular weaponry would simply glance off Kaiku clan members. Depending on the rank of the Kaiku, the skin is harder. Each rank of Kaiku can block weapons that are one rank below them as a passive ability.

Burning: ...Kaiku members are immune to burns and could even walk through magma without hurting themselves. This does not stop the impact force of an attack, but does protect from the heat...

Paralysis: Kaiku members are immune to paralysis because their evolved skin does not conduct electricity...This prevents clan members from being paralyzed with electrical attacks, this excludes anything else.

Bleeding: Kaiku clan blood is extremely thick. Because of this, cuts that clan members have do not bleed and instead scab up before any blood can even flow out.

Super skin is too powerful. Needs to be downgraded to two ranks below user or have a cooldown

Raiton Paralysis Immunity is a little OP. At the very least it should be made clear that any attack the penetrates the skin remains effective, if the skin is central to this defence

Burning Resistance as stands is OP and covered already in the adaptations aspect. Needs to be effectively qualified

While blood loss prevention is more acceptable it should take at least half a post to seal up and it should make clear that it would not stop blood coating blades etc that cut you or it spurting out in first instance

Quote :: Partial Body Metamorphosis:
Kaiku clan members can have the ability to morph parts of their body into desired forms. This is not a ‘basic’ ability and can only be used if the Kaiku has medical as a specialty...there are six categories of partial body metamorphosis, Arms, Legs, Torso, Internal, External, and Head. At D-rank, a Kaiku can only access two of these. At C-rank they can access three. At B-rank they can access four. At A-rank five. And at S-rank all six.

Arms:
Having access to arm metamorphosis technique means the Kaiku can morph their arms into different tools to help in any battle situation. (Ex- arm blades, shield arms, axe arms.)(Note: Once an arm transformation is used, it Stays the entire topic.)

Internal
The internal category covers everything under the skin excluding muscles. This category is somewhat limited but can be used to avoid fatal damage in most cases.(Ex: Blood vessels, organs.)

C-Rank: Change in shape, no abilities or second functions.
B-Rank: Change in shape, an ability OR a second function.
A-Rank: Change in shape, an ability, and a second function.
S-Rank: Change in shape, multiple abilities, multiple functions.

This aspect is rather vaguely defined. Establish clearly the range of uses that it can be used for, whether it can change the nature of the material, etc. Internal manipulation should either have a thread limit, cool down or effective limitation. Internal should have a chakra cost, quite possibly external too.

Quote :: Hyper Evolution
This is done by exposing themselves to a certain type of attack until they gain an immunity to it. To do this, Kaiku clan members must be HIT by that type of attack three times and then wait one post for the transformation to occure before they become almost completely immune to it. This immunity is only as strong as the Kaiku's rank, meaning this immunity makes them immune to attacks of their rank and below. The one exception to this rule is ' Perfect Evolution', a clain trait only S-rank Kaiku can use. 'Perfect Evolution' allows the Kaiku to pick one type of hyper evolution and increase it's power to be able to block S-rank attacks).

Katon:
After being hit by three fire attacks, Kaiku members develop fire proof skin for one topic...After the skin is gained, that Kaiku member is completely immune to Katon based attacks, meaning they can not be incinerated. However, this does not protect from the impact forces of attacks. This can only block katon jutsu up to the Kaiku's rank once activated unless the Kaiku has picked katon as their 'Perfect Evolution'.

Raiton:
After being hit by three lightning attacks, Kaiku members develop small spikes all over their skin that repel electricity...These small spikes are so powerful, that lightning can't even touch the clan member and is instead diverted away from them...This gives them immunity to raiton for the entire topic. This can only block raiton jutsu up to the Kaiku's rank once activated unless the Kaiku has picked raiton as their 'Perfect Evolution'.

Fuuton:
After being hit by three wind based attacks, Kaiku clan members develop an immunity to the element by hardening their skin to a point that it can not be cut by wind attacks at all...This prevents wind from cutting into it no matter how powerful it is. The Kaiku can still be blown back by the jutsu though.

Suiton:
After being hit by three water based attacks, Kaiku clan members grow gills, fins, and scales onto their body. This makes them able to battle on land and underwater with ease. The Kaiku member breaths underwater like a fish would, using scales and gills in place of lungs to process oxygen.

Doton:
After being hit by three doton based attacks, Kaiku clan members develop extreme strength and endurance to combat the earth element...This also makes them able to completely demolish the earth with a single punch. Another ability this gives them is the ability to extend their calluses into shields on their arms, guarding them from attacks.

Kenjutsu/Weaponry/Puppetry:
After being struck with three Kenjutsu/Weaponry/Puppetry attacks(Struck as in cutting the skin or making contact with the skin.)...When a sword tries to strike them after the change, the sword is immediately stuck to the skin and gets absorbed into the Kaiku’s body...Once the sword has made contact, there is no way to pull it out. The weapon is absorbed and grinded up inside the Kaiku and is then excrete as a pile of useless scrape.

Clearly this aspect is rather OP. What counts as attack should be clearly defined as at least a c rank attack. The adaptive state should have a post length (aka 3 posts) before it ends. This should be affected by nature of attacks i.e. attacks to which you have adapted too would increase the period while not receiving such attacks should bring it to an end more quickly. Furthermore adapting to one element should leave you inversely weaker to the element that has superiority over it. i.e. if you have adapted to fire attacks you should be weaker against water ones.

In all cases I think it would be better if they just reduced the effectiveness of attacks by one rank or something fair less potent then outlined above. I think the last one should be changed entirely for being nonsensical. I would suspect that absorbing almost any S rank weapon would be foolish in the extreme

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Hugh wrote:: Super skin is too powerful. Needs to be downgraded to two ranks below user or have a cooldown

I don't consider a cooldown acceptable, I think the ability should be passive, but be massively downgraded.

Age : 30 Posts : 1256

I have re-posted the original clan here and made a new app for the re-done/fixed/re-vamped version.

Kaiku Clan Ver. 2